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The magic little box

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0 posted 04-04-2000 11:23 PM       View Profile for Clayton   Email Clayton   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Clayton

The magic little box

I sit and I wait
when will it come
The little message of fate

I see the small box
It's requests my acceptance
I can hardly contain myself

I know on the other end
waits what I need
what I crave
the cure to my bad day

The messages fly by
we speak of things unspeakable
I relax with a sigh
For she is what I need
my diamond in the rough

Oh So I wish I could be
be with her
holding her
loving her

To feel her hand resting in mine
feel the pain flow away
I know the time will come
but so far away is that day

I yearn for her
to sit with her
to sing with her
to kiss her

quickly I dial
fumble with the numbers
to hear her words
to hear her laugh
to hear her sing
I sign with releaf
my problems are solved

or so I think.

the dial tone sounds
I dread this moment
why does she have to go
I need to see her but I can't

Who am I fooling
How much longer can I last
have love dangled in front of your face
but it disappears so fast

This is the first poem I've ever really written.. I know it's not that great.. it's not every very poem like.. I"m only 14/male here and never really had a very good time writing them.. but when I fell in love that helped..   I've written a few more poems shortly after I might post..  I just wanted a little feedback is all.  I am very much in love with her.. we met on the internet about 2 and a half years ago.. and fell in love about a half a year ago.. I talk to her on the phone and I'm going to California to meet her in the summer
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1 posted 04-04-2000 11:33 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

As far as "poem like" well I don't know about wrote from your heart and that's where poetry comes from.  This is a very good start.  Good luck with your meeting and I wish you the very best!!

 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.

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2 posted 04-05-2000 02:52 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

I have to agree  on this one, poetry ALWAYS comes from the heart...this is why we write!! I can feel your emotion dripping from this piece- and that in itself is good writin m'friend!!! Keep your heart open and your pen handy!!!  


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

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3 posted 04-05-2000 06:31 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

From the heart ...
The very best start.
Feelings from within ...
Flowing through your pen.

Welcome to Passion's !

 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~

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4 posted 04-05-2000 08:17 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Welcome to Passions... You've written a really nice poem here - Hang around - Check out the Teen Forum... You'll like it here.. Also, check your email for a special greeting...
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5 posted 04-05-2000 09:24 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Very well done, young poet, for you write from your heart. There are other poets your age in teen forum and you will enjoy their works as they will yours. Keep writing! We'll look for more from you. WElcome!
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6 posted 04-05-2000 11:45 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Oh, internet love can be such a hard thing. Welcome to passions  
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7 posted 04-05-2000 08:57 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Clayton, you did a good job on this! Keep writing! I look forward to more from you. If I can ever be of assistance, please let me know. Welcome to our family!  
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8 posted 04-05-2000 09:32 PM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan


Welcome to Passions. A good first posting.  The hardest part is working up the nerve to post that first poem.  Keep writing.

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9 posted 04-05-2000 09:42 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Welcome to Passions, Clayton! This is a great poem!

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