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~ Walking Into the Wind ~
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~ Walking Into the Wind ~ |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas 
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~ Walking Into the Wind ~ Splitting the sea with ravenous speed the roar of the waves crashing by - To the very top deck, we scrambled that night in hope's of pretending to fly... We zipped up our coats & held on for dear life as our Captain made up for lost time - With near hurricane winds, our voices unheard, the rush that I felt was divine! My hair whipped my face - I barely could stand I was laughing so hard - I had tears... With both of us staggering, stumbling ahead I realized I'd done this for years. * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * My whole life a whirlwind - strong & intense I trudge on, though not standing tall - My chin on my chest, my eyes closed real tight, praying to God I don't fall... Dark waters below me, laugh as I falter no balance, my feet seem so lost - Determined, I press on to reach life's white railing, and I will soon, no matter the cost. At times in my life, those winds are too strong and I have to sit down for awhile - If I didn't, I fear that I'd be blown away, so I wait, holding on with a smile. * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * Yes, to the very top deck, we scrambled that night, in hope's of pretending to fly - Finally we reached the front of the boat and stared out to the wind-smitten sky... Our hands clutching tight round the railing secure we finally stood tall as we "flew" - - We laughed at the ocean & bright stars above having accomplished what we'd set out to do. No matter the strength of the wind in your face, lean into it - - soon you'll stand tall - - And may laughter always ring out from your lips, even when you stagger & fall.... ~ poetFemmeFatale ~ |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
nicely done, yep... everyone once in a while you have to go to the top deck and feel the spray in your face, kinda makes life worth living, even if you fall occasionally, just hope you land on your feet rather than your...er... well.. where I have landed a few times... enjoyed. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
"I'M THE KING OF THE WORLD!!!!!" LOL Reminds me of that part of "Titanic" where Jack runs out onto the bow of the ship and screams that. . . Good to see you as always pFF. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
hey poet femme... so nice to see you sailed back thru...  this is very very good.....so full of your strong emotions...and imagery of the sea. very well written and expressed. the ending is perfection. "My whole life a whirlwind - strong & intense I trudge on, though not standing tall - My chin on my chest, my eyes closed real tight, praying to God I don't fall... Dark waters below me, laugh as I falter no balance, my feet seem so lost - Determined, I press on to reach life's white railing, and I will soon, no matter the cost. At times in my life, those winds are too strong and I have to sit down for awhile - If I didn't, I fear that I'd be blown away, so I wait, holding on with a smile. --------------- powerful emotions girl!! take care,jm ...when you walked into the room, I saw their faces, you made it feel like time was standing still...and I felt fascination... then you turned and smiled in my direction... and my heart...gave me away. glass tiger |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
That's all we can do sometimes Gennifer...struggle against life storms laughing all the way...nicely done  |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
pFF, you have a rare talent of making readers feel the experience expressed in your writing. You take us there, where life happens, and bring us back, better than we were before, thus, the last four lines. Incredible talent that you posses. DH A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Great poem, PFF!! Good to see you posting again. *S* |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
-PFF Glad to see you are back! This was very intense and powerful. Beautiful imagery captured in this one. Take care! AMY ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Gen this was great. I love how you've described this. It's good if you can get through those storms and major winds with a smile still on your face. |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Femme, As much as this sounds scary to me being on a boat in a near hurricane, you made it sound delightful, like a challenge you met with strength, and still has you floating in it's memory. I enjoyed it much, glad you came to visit and posted it. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
You know - I should have replied to this when you first posted it. I can't help but think we have both seen more than our share of "hurricane wind" since that moment time stood still up on that deck. The last stanza you've written here is golden. No matter what - I'll lean into that wind - you do the same. I don't know that I've accomplished anything that I've set out to do yet, but I'll not lie down any time soon, believe that... Lovely poem, Gen. Michael [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 04-09-2000).] |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Mike - The spray is my favorite part! And landing on your butt makes for more laughter, so it's okay! LOLSven - That *scene* is what we were hoping for - unfortunately, we couldn't GET to the bow! Argh! Janet Marie - You've been a dear friend to me...You always have such nice words for me...Thank you girl. Ruth - It's how I stay sane! I'd not be alive today, if it weren't for laughter...  Danny - I am humbled by your comments sir...I owe you BIG. You have been there for me always. Suthern - Hi girl! I miss it when I don't post. Hope you're still keeping an eye on that Toe! LOL Aimster - Thanks girl! You're always there in some way, with nice words to offer. WhtDove - You have been so encouraging, and supportive - that's what I like about you! Thanks!Lost Dreamer - It was a bit scarey, but that's what made it so exciting! I darn near peed on myself with delight! ROFLMAO Fond memory indeed...Michael - Out of the whole trip, this is the one moment I hold so dear...probably because it was the one time we shared that innocent energy that felt so alive between us. It wasn't muttled with emotion, or doubt. We were alive that night - I believe that. Keep leaning in, and you'll make it - you're well on your way! Thank you. |
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Richter_9 Junior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 41Whereever I happen to be at the time |
Your words reflect uncommon strength and wisdom. Rich |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
and wouldn't you know it...just about the time I was enjoying myself ICEBERG!!!...anything to put a little light in your life, sis? see you soon. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Sounds like a wonderful time...an adventure...the beauty of life...James |
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Destiny Junior Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 47 |
inspiring... some days it's really hard to laugh into the wind... think i'll carry this one with me for a while, if you dont mind Destiny |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Rats! I finally found inspiration for another poem and here I sit at work. Too busy to complete a good thought but I'll try again later. Great poem... and thank you, Femme. P.S. Can someone tell me what "style" her poem is? I'm not really up on the poetry terminology but I like that style. a lot! =) "The storm rises up when the shadows descend every beat of my heart every day without end I will stand like a rock I will bend till I break till theres no more to give if thats what it takes I will risk everything I will fight I will bleed I will lay down my life if thats what you need every second I live thats the promise I make" I have no idea who wrote this... tell me if you know. =) |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you know, I thought about the Titanic also...this a wonderful poem, and makes me feel like I can do anything! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Thanks again pFF... just thought I'd read this one again, and run out onto the bow and scream. . . I'M THE KING OF THE WORLD!!!!! And let fate take me where it will. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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