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I've been B-booged

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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 04-04-2000 03:47 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Iíve been B-booged

As one who in poetry often immerses
I opened the forum, and read a few verses
Martieís is really the height of perfection
And certainly doesnít need any correction

But low and behold, there was a response
From Mr B-boog in his cool nonchalance
He said Martie let me give my response
By suggesting some words with a different nuance

Now Margie and I got a little unglued
That Martieís magnificent verse was B-booged
So I wrote him a letter and said Mr Boog
I believe that you may be a little confooged

I said we donít criticize on Forum six
Is not like CA and itís not in betwixt
I said Martieís poems are the tip of the top
The peak of perfection , the cream of the crop

And he wrote me an e-mail, so perfectly nice
A gentlemanís note laced with manners and spice
He said now critiquing does not bother me
ĎCause I look for improving on my poetry

Then I went to CA and I posted a few
Itís a place where piranha jaws cut you in two
Now CA is a forum, and thereís no mystique
Where poets expect a quite thorough critique

B-boog read my poem and he started right in
Please letís change the title, he said with a grin
And I have another exciting proposal
Letís throw the first verse down the garbage disposal

But then he took time to explain things to me
About some mistakes that I never did see
And I learned quite a bit through B-boog's good advice
Of ways I could make rhyming verses concise

Donít let B-boogís comments intimidate yoog
Itís sincere and quite valid from his point of vieoog
Donít let his critiquing be so misconstrooged
If he thinks that your verses may well be improoged

I think Iíve been inflooenced more than I shooog
Perhaps I have been a bit over b-booged
But too tell yoo the trooth, I like Boog a lot
Heís one of the troothfulest friends that Iíve got

So Mr. B-boog, this verse is for yoog
Twoo words that are proobably well overdoog
I ďthank yooĒ for helping me so to improog
Best wishes and please have a very goog doog

Best Regards, bboog
Liz
© Copyright 2000 Elizabeth Santos - All Rights Reserved
suthern
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1 posted 04-04-2000 03:54 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Elizabeth: I truly don't think you needed any improvement... and I'll hold steadfast that most of us who avoid CA like the proverbial plague don't care for unsolicited critiques. *S* But this poem is a delight. *S*
Janet Marie
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2 posted 04-04-2000 04:02 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

LIZ this is CHARMING!!!!!!
absolutly adorable...I'm laughing so hard I cant type...I think it shows such class on your part...we all saw BB critiques and werent sure what to make of them here in the land of kind replies..but as you say in this witty poem...we are never to accomplished to learn...
this was great truly
thanks for the lesson Liz and BBoog
lol
jm

 ...when you walked into the room, I saw their faces,
you made it feel like time was standing still...and I felt fascination...
then you turned and smiled in my direction...
and my heart...gave me away.
glass tiger
Michael
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3 posted 04-04-2000 04:05 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Now that's what I call some serious poetic license...  Good tribute to your friend, Liz.  I am glad he's found CA to his liking also.


Michael
Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 04-04-2000 04:15 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

suthern, I know how you feel, most of us don't like unsolicited critiquing, but bboog has got the gist of the forums and has found a great home CA, where I have come to respect so many poets who post there. And he is a really nice guy. Thanks, you are sweet and your comments very kind
P.S. I owe you a poem but am having trouble finding it. But I will send it
Love ya
Liz

Janet Marie, Thank you for laughing, which I like to do myself, especially at situations.

Michael, Poetic license has no limitations in the mind of the poet. Thanks  
Balladeer
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5 posted 04-04-2000 04:52 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Liz, you're fresher than a booganvilla, slipperier than a taboogan, more eloquent than Humphrey Boogart and stealthier than the boogeyman. In other words, you're a cute little booger!
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 04-04-2000 07:38 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Elizabeth,
Could not say it better then Balladeer. Enjoyed the poem. Love Sy
Denise
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7 posted 04-04-2000 08:28 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

My sentiments exactly, Elizabeth! He is a sweetie pie!

Denise
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8 posted 04-05-2000 12:47 AM       View Profile for Cerenity   Email Cerenity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerenity

Hi Liz,

Well if I ever get my tong untied I would say that the typing alone on this one was a lesson in its self. You are loving to the core my lady.

Cerenity
Mike
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9 posted 04-05-2000 12:52 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

chuckling here... thanks for the smile.
WhtDove
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10 posted 04-05-2000 01:00 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Liz...this was just adorable.  
Tom Sawyer
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11 posted 04-05-2000 01:15 AM       View Profile for Tom Sawyer   Email Tom Sawyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tom Sawyer

This was hilarious... I'm new here, so I don't know any of the personalities involved, but I feel like I do after reading this.  Glad you could be so kind to your critic, and glad to know he's kind underneath.  I'm no poet, so I hope I don't get B-Booged any time soon, but if I do, it's good to know it's constructive criticism.

(This was also the best piece of poetry I've read tonight, btw.)

(Mental note to self:  STAY OUT OF CA)

[This message has been edited by Tom Sawyer (edited 04-05-2000).]
bboog
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12 posted 04-05-2000 01:52 AM       View Profile for bboog   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit bboog's Home Page   View IP for bboog

Liz,
    Flattery will get you everywhere. I really enjoyed your bbooged poem and also your response to my April fool's joke. As I mentioned to you in an e-mail, I'm pretty thick-skinned (or thick-headed) when it comes to criticism and try to remember that others may not be so. I do try to keep my critiques to the work itself, not the person.
   Perhaps you should know one of the reasons for me being so quick and dirty with the poems I read/review. It has to do with my wife.(I know, blame it on the wife.) To be honest though, she hates it when I write. Even after publishing two books now. She calls writing "my bad habit". (I make good money in my business and she wants me to only concentrate on that.) Note: I've been married now for 14 years and she hasn't stopped me from writing or critiquing, it's just something I've learned to live with.  She really hopes that I'll fall flat on my face with my new book of fiction, Extreme Urgency, which is due to be released pretty soon. And I'm afraid she could be right on this one. So that's the way it is.
  Usually I try to read, review and write fairly quickly, so if my posts come off as being abrupt, brusque or too direct- they probably are. Also, I am NOT a perfect speller, but if I notice that you've got a typo in your poems, I'll point it out. (And I'll gladly delete the comment later after it's fixed so nobody will know.) Hopefully you'll return the favor to me. So to any and all of you who have been bbooged, I have this to say to you, "I pity you!".
  Oh, and by the way, the critical analysis section is not that bad of a place to post a poem or two. (There you can ALSO freely critique/bash/smash/rave/love/hate one of my gilded "masterpieces". While you're there, you'll probably find a warm cup of metaphor tea and a couple of critiques to crunch on. Just remember to duck if a dart is thrown at you.
   Again, thank you Liz for your warm-hearted poem. I really enjoyed it. And I also loved your "Letter to Your Granddaughter" poem. Didn't get a chance to say so.
best regards,
bboog




[This message has been edited by bboog (edited 04-05-2000).]
Severn
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13 posted 04-05-2000 02:31 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Superbly doone, Lizzy loove.

CA is a great place and teaches how to improve your work - I personally feel it is essential for any serious writer to reach the point where they can be critiqued by others - cause that's what editors are gonna do! But if that isn't where a writer is at then we should have a place to post our work in safety - away from the 'meanies' in CA!  Hehe - including me! And, that is why I love Open 6...

Well done Lizzy - good stuff!

And Bboog - ~giving bows at books being published~ I may become a disciple!


 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
Parker
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14 posted 04-05-2000 02:51 AM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

well nice poem Liz, you go get him.
Elizabeth Santos
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15 posted 04-05-2000 03:29 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Balladeer, First time I was ever described as such. But I'll take any compliment I can get, I think.

Sy, Speak for thyself. Love ya

Denise. Glad you agree. Thanks

Cerenity, Typing is not my forte, nor is spelling. Thanks, dear

Mike, Glad you enjoyed

Wht Dove, Thank you

Tom Sawyer, Watch out for the big, bad Boog

bboog, Well you said it better than I can. No footnote needed here, exept the Guatamalan wife you speak of is lovely. I saw her picture on your site.

Kamla, I agree, Open Six is not for critquing. Hear that, Boog? Thanks dear for your comments

Haleya, Last but not least, Thanks for reading my silliness

Liz
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16 posted 04-05-2000 08:09 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Elizabeth's a booger???? LOL... Don't know about that, but I sure did enjoy this poem....
Sunshine
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17 posted 04-05-2000 02:02 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Sunshine here, dancing fast to catch up with y'all - and Liz, you've done a marvelous job of introducing some of us who have been away awhile into the intricacies of Mr. B-boog.  Someone to watch out for, and to watch for!  Marvelous job!

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

 
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