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Fallen Tree Sounds

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RAM
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               Fallen Tree Sounds


The chink of light eludes me;
it's out dancing with the moon.
I'm drifting in this cell of dreams we made.
There were some days within these walls
when that mere slip of light
came dancing with the shadows as they played.

I still, at times, will watch for light
to grace these graceless planes -
to dress these empty days in glad array,
as if unsaid farewells aren't real.
But these have told me much:
your silence tells me all you cannot say.


  RAM  2/22/99

© Copyright 2000 RAM - All Rights Reserved
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Very well thought out of poem. Keep up the good work. It is a poem that sounds like it has written centuries ago.  



 Ronil (the one and lonely)
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Rick~
This is a delicately done piece of work.

Gosh .. do I like this line ...

'The chink of light eludes me;
it's out dancing with the moon.'

Very pretty.
~*Marge*~




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Wonderful poem. Well written!

Denise
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Another beauty, RAM--words stitched together like delicate lace...very very lovely...
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WOw...the last line of this says it all...wonderful  
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thanks Xeonox, Marge, Denise, Serenity, Hoot.  

As for the last line, Hoot, I can't claim it.  This was an exercise that a number of poets I know participated in -- where we gave each other lines to use as last lines.  That line came from a poet friend who shares my interest in using "punch" lines.    

Rick




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