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frayed circuits

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Corazon
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0 posted 04-03-2000 11:37 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Corazon


spark spark
spark
breaker flipped
again
the system can only
take so much
I turn off
all not essential
to breathing
to living and slowly
inward I go
to find
the problem
one circuit at a time
eliminating the stress
checking for errors
in logic
faulty reasoning
has taken its toll
frayed circuits discarded
patched and replaced
there
maybe this time
no
same reaction
same
spark spark
same
flip out
of reality

but now
the night is tired
clutched covers
eye level and above
wait for the morn
to shed
light
anew




[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 04-03-2000).]
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CherylLynnMckee
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1 posted 04-03-2000 12:04 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

Unique poem...I like the comparisons you draw here..nice writing!

 
Corazon
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thanks cheryl....
Parker
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this gave me a real voltage of emotion, such a lovely spark it was, let their be light. If it was only that simple.


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4 posted 04-04-2000 12:15 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Corazon~
NOW I know what they mean
when they say I've 'flipped out'.

This was very unique.
Let's send it back to the top
for a re-charge !
~*Marge*~


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5 posted 04-04-2000 12:26 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Hey, great thoughts, Corazon. I love these comparisons. Sounds like there was a short somewhere!!!
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I'm with Marge on that re-charge!  Back to the top with this!  Superb!  Thanks...
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I can relate to those blown circuits right now dear...care to join me with the battery pack???  

You hang in there girl...got yours in the mail fed-ex style!!!

Love you
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Corazon
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love all the "electric" comments  *g* you guys are too cute...and oh so nice to me too *s*....
thank you to you all  

[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 04-04-2000).]
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I absolutely love this, especially the positive note on the ending...and you my dear friend already shine  
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10 posted 04-04-2000 04:15 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

When you turn off all not essential to breathing, you turn out a helluva poem! *S* Great job... (I always knew you were sizzling. *EG*)
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thank you both of you ruth's you two mean much to me  
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Corazon, you amaze me.  You always come up with metaphors that I would've never thought of.  
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Corazon, are you telling us you're a techie girl ? ...   ... Nice spark !
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