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0 posted 04-03-2000 04:48 AM       View Profile for SorrowsMystress   Email SorrowsMystress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for SorrowsMystress

I've tried to rationalize
Tried to find answers
But I come up empty handed
You left me alone tonight
I'm sure you didn't notice
That you could make a person feel stranded
I wanted to cry somehow
But the tears would never come
I guess I'm just not built that way
I wanted to tell you
That you hurt me somehow
But I couldn't find the words to say
You say I bring you down
Like I mean for it to happen
But I can't help the way that I'm feeling
How can I get you to understand
There's just so much going on
And I'm searching for a way to start healing
You mean the world to me
And my world seems like it's crumbling
It won't stop no matter what I try to say
We seemed to be so right together
The epitome of everlasting happieness
Is that gone now, or just hidden away
I've asked you to understand
It's not you that makes me sad
It's just that things are so complicated right now
You make me smile when I shouldn't
Made me believe when I couldn't
And you've given me hope somehow
So instead of understanding
I'll ask you to have patience
Please don't give up just yet
I'll make it up to you
if it's the very last thing I do
I'll ensure you'll never have any regrets.
I know I've asked a lot of you
Just understand I need you now
More than anything I've ever needed before
Just stand by my side
It will be over soon enough
And nothing will come between us anymore.

this isn't really that good, but it's still in the works. It's 3:43 in the am, and I just wrote it with a weary mind. (Unfortuanately writers block keeps me up at night) So please be gentle, this is a rough draft. Thank you. :/
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1 posted 04-03-2000 06:25 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***S M,
I can relate to this poem so very much.
There is no need for me to be gentle upon this great piece of writing at all.
I hope you find your way.
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2 posted 04-04-2000 08:22 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

"Just stand by my side"..this is a place where I have found myself a few times.  So true...this poem and life sometimes is full of complications.  James
since 02-11-2000
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3 posted 04-04-2000 09:42 AM       View Profile for Enola   Email Enola   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enola

Not that good??!!  This is brilliant!  Don't do anything more to it, it doesn't need anymore work.  I understand totally what you mean.  I believe that if this person does leave you, you will be able to cope, it may be harder, but it is possible.  I know that sometimes life is really tough and it looks like there's no way out of the situation you're in, but faith and persistance will see you through.
Love & Hugs

 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.
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4 posted 04-04-2000 10:12 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

There is a great deal of truth in this piece  
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