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When the Son Shines!

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redwriter1
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0 posted 04-02-2000 09:42 PM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for redwriter1

(sigh).. lyrics again.. sorry guys.. can't help it
(sheepish look)


If and when you hit the bottom
it's not the end
it's just a matter of
leaving the past behind
so when you look you up can find  (will?)

When the son shines
there's no regrets
no indecisions or second guessing
it's a blessing
when the son shines


Just imagine what would happen
if you looked up and saw the light
it may not be what you thought
but the warmth of love is all you've got

sorry.. wish this one was better.. any thoughts, advice.. ?



 Kay-lynn
**A dream is a wish your heart makes  





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Elizabeth
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1 posted 04-02-2000 09:59 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Well, I'm not one for critique, so I can't help in that area. Except--are you talking about sunshine, or somebody's son? But nice work!

Elizabeth


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There's nothing wrong with lyrics! This is beautiful! Great message!

Denise
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3 posted 04-02-2000 10:47 PM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for redwriter1

Elizabeth, it's. a matter of
when the "sun... shines".. and
when the "son... shines".. see?

I hope you understand now (smile)

and ps. thanks dsnyder.. you always make me glad i'm a writer.  
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