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Open Poetry #6

When the Son Shines!

redwriter1
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since 1999-07-22

Posts 480
Franklin, TN

0 posted 2000-04-02 09:42 PM

(sigh).. lyrics again.. sorry guys.. can't help it
(sheepish look)

If and when you hit the bottom
it's not the end
it's just a matter of
leaving the past behind
so when you look you up can find (will?)

When the son shines
there's no regrets
no indecisions or second guessing
it's a blessing
when the son shines

Just imagine what would happen
if you looked up and saw the light
it may not be what you thought
but the warmth of love is all you've got

sorry.. wish this one was better.. any thoughts, advice.. ?

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Kay-lynn
**A dream is a wish your heart makes

[This message has been edited by redwriter1 (edited 04-02-2000).]

Elizabeth

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since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

1 posted 2000-04-02 09:59 PM

Well, I'm not one for critique, so I can't help in that area. Except--are you talking about sunshine, or somebody's son? But nice work!

Elizabeth

"He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!"
-The Crucible

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

2 posted 2000-04-02 10:16 PM

There's nothing wrong with lyrics! This is beautiful! Great message!

Denise

redwriter1
Member

since 1999-07-22

Posts 480
Franklin, TN

3 posted 2000-04-02 10:47 PM

Elizabeth, it's. a matter of
when the "sun... shines".. and
when the "son... shines".. see?

I hope you understand now (smile)

and ps. thanks dsnyder.. you always make me glad i'm a writer.

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