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Meadowmuse
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Disappear



I light the candles
all through the house
Quieter times have brought
you into my heart again

Flames licking near me
can't bear to watch anymore
Why couldn't you have saved me
from what I'm still running toward?

Just when I thought time was moving
And just when I thought I could hold it all
Just now, now I thought I could breathe again
Your flames are telling me what it is I'm losing

Couldn't we have tried a another song?
something just low and sweet between us
like your slow seduction I thought would never end
How can these candles burn so long?

How could it hurt so to cry you back with my tears?
It's been a while since I spoke your name aloud
What could it hurt just this time, to say I love you?
How can I watch another flame disappear?


Dear LadyClaire


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1 posted 04-02-2000 10:02 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

A very pain-filled poem--I liked the candle imagery used here.

Elizabeth


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This is so sad and so beautiful, Claire. Very beautiful!

Denise
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3 posted 04-02-2000 10:19 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Oh, Claire~
This is so sadly filled with loss
and longing.
Beautiful look into a saddened heart.
Very touching, Claire.
~*Marge*~


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4 posted 04-02-2000 10:23 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Oh, those wicked wicks!
There's something about a candle's glow that's so warm or sad.
Beautiful verse

Liz
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Keep this up and you'll have us all crying

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6 posted 04-02-2000 11:17 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Thank you all, in earnest, for reading. Not feeling very poetic tonight, I'm afraid.

~ Claire
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Clair*
This is done with style and beauty that your heart reflects off from your soul.  Every line was breathtaking.


 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.

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Sad but beautiful...wonderful writing.

 
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Deeply sad and painful, but also lovely Claire.  Like always.  

 *Krista Knutson*

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I've done this a few times myself..ha..ha..
or was it a few hundred times...whatever the relationship..when it is over it seems to leave some hurt in our memory that reappears now and than.  James
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11 posted 04-03-2000 02:45 AM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Claire, Your poetry is poetic in any state, it flows naturally with your emotions, very lovely.

Parker
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12 posted 04-05-2000 12:16 AM       View Profile for Auguste   Email Auguste   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Auguste's Home Page   View IP for Auguste

Very sad and moving.  Touching work!

 


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This reeps of sadness  
Michael
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14 posted 04-05-2000 12:19 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

maybe those are trick candles or something... you know - the ones that never go out.    I've come across those a few times myself.  Great poem, Claire, if sad. Hope you didn't mind me trying to get a smile out of you.


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15 posted 04-05-2000 01:11 PM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

"Couldn't we have tried a another song?
something just low and sweet between us
like your slow seduction I thought would never end
How can these candles burn so long?"

I could really relate to this poem, especially these lines.  Very touching, and beautifully put!


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The pain in this is palpable... great poem!
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Claire,
       let the song fill your heart my friend. . . and hear the music. . . dance to its soft melody. . .

Let the candles light the way to show you what you need to see. . .

Very touching my friend. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

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Meadow,
Your sentiment of lament is lovely. Beautiful poem. *L*
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Claire, I am drawn to your poetry, for it is like a candle and I, the moth.  This poem touched me.
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Butterflies...CherylLynn...Krista...James...Parker

Michael(Auguste)...Michael...Ruth...Troy

Suthern...Sven...Seymour...Martie

Thank you ALL

Your words are of the candle's light,
illuminating my heart tonight.



Dear LadyClaire



 
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