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i am goodbye
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i am goodbye |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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I am sunlight. I am rain. I am living. I am pain. I am mud-colored stones in a brook, a long winding passage in a must-read book, a turret of your castled rook, a long lustful backward goodbye look. I am nature. I am love. I am a woman. I am a dove. I am a man. I am a horse. I am an insect. I am divorce. I am sweetness. I am your tongue. I am your eyes. I am all wrong. I am all right. I am the night. I am a flashlight With the batteries almost gone. I am the long cords in your arms. I am what you say when it can only end in harm, Imploding collapse, a broken calm, Middle finger all that's left of your palm, Birds suddenly singing deathly psalms, No longer just your only two's song. I am love. I am hate. I am goodbye. I am too late. I am the rope from which you pretend to hang. I am the words still sharp as fangs. Puncture wounds and so-long swoons, Nights alone watching the arc of the moon. I am the diminished glow on your face. I am the final night of her lingerie lace. I am the first sun pouring through the blinds When nothing but nothing is left on your mind. I am your friends trying to help you through. I am the loneliness that ferments and stews. I am her, I am you. Tell me what you want to do. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
What a way to describe goodbye. Very interesting, Bsquirrel--and painful too. Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Bsquirrel...very well put. Saying "goodbye" is always hard, even when it's for the best. Keep writing, and take good care of YOU, okay?  Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
bsquirrel, It's easy to tell alot of thought went into this . It's very well written and displays the feeling behind it in heart-felt images .Well done , bsquirrel . I hope that by replying to one of your poems people don't get us confused with that other pairing. Doc |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Elizabeth, That's pretty much the way it is. Thanks for reading. Troy, Glad you enjoyed. And I'd be more worried about YOUR health, Mr. Smoker.  Moose, I say the more Rocky and Bullwinkle mentions anywhere, the better. I miss that show. Mike |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
This is wonderful. Well crafted, imaginative, and it stings with truth. Well done. I will be looking for more of your work.  doreen |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
A thousand words spoken in this one Mike |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I really like this Mike...it's as though your stream of consciousness suddenly found itself a waterfall Seriously, this is so lovely. I've been doing a bit of goodbye~ing myself of late... Thanks.~ Claire |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mike~ Powerfully released. ~*Marge*~< !signature--> ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com [This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 04-03-2000).] |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
doreen, I'm glad you enjoyed; and thanks for being a fan. hoot, Thank you. Claire, Glad you enjoyed, and glad that the poem might be some help to you. This is the type of stuff you can only write long after the fact. As the first year anniversary of my breakup draws near, I wanted to think back to it and write a poem that shows it's painful for both sides -- and also one not chock full of swears. (oops)Mike |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
WOW..really excellent writing..I loved it! |
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mete out Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 270england |
***bsquirrel, wow and ow. this is a panful poem to read, although it is truely mind-blowing. a fantastically eloquent goodbye. well done. I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow I don't know how you speak so clearly to and through my heart, this makes me cry...great writing my friend.....thanks for stopping by my page, will try to write soon... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I said it before. I say it again. You are an artist...(I'd 'e' you, but I fear the slug is still comatose after surgery...working on it tho...) Again, EXCELLENT, Mike...) |
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