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i am goodbye

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bsquirrel
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0 posted 04-02-2000 04:27 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bsquirrel

I am sunlight.
I am rain.
I am living.
I am pain.
I am mud-colored stones in a brook,
a long winding passage in a must-read book,
a turret of your castled rook,
a long lustful backward goodbye look.

I am nature.
I am love.
I am a woman.
I am a dove.
I am a man.
I am a horse.
I am an insect.
I am divorce.

I am sweetness.
I am your tongue.
I am your eyes.
I am all wrong.
I am all right.
I am the night.
I am a flashlight
With the batteries almost gone.

I am the long cords in your arms.
I am what you say when it can only end in harm,
Imploding collapse, a broken calm,
Middle finger all that's left of your palm,
Birds suddenly singing deathly psalms,
No longer just your only two's song.

I am love.
I am hate.
I am goodbye.
I am too late.
I am the rope from which you pretend to hang.
I am the words still sharp as fangs.
Puncture wounds and so-long swoons,
Nights alone watching the arc of the moon.

I am the diminished glow on your face.
I am the final night of her lingerie lace.
I am the first sun pouring through the blinds
When nothing but nothing is left on your mind.
I am your friends trying to help you through.
I am the loneliness that ferments and stews.
I am her, I am you.
Tell me what you want to do.

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Elizabeth
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1 posted 04-02-2000 05:11 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

What a way to describe goodbye. Very interesting, Bsquirrel--and painful too.

Elizabeth


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2 posted 04-02-2000 05:15 PM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

Bsquirrel...very well put.  Saying "goodbye" is always hard, even when it's for the best.  Keep writing, and take good care of YOU, okay?


Troy

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3 posted 04-02-2000 06:36 PM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

bsquirrel,
It's easy to tell alot of thought went into this . It's very well written and displays the feeling behind it in heart-felt images .Well done , bsquirrel . I hope that by replying to one of your poems people don't get us confused with that other pairing.
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4 posted 04-02-2000 07:08 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Elizabeth,
That's pretty much the way it is. Thanks for reading.

Troy,
Glad you enjoyed. And I'd be more worried about YOUR health, Mr. Smoker.  

Moose,
I say the more Rocky and Bullwinkle mentions anywhere, the better. I miss that show.

Mike
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This is wonderful. Well crafted, imaginative, and it stings with truth. Well done. I will be looking for more of your work.

doreen
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6 posted 04-02-2000 10:24 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

A thousand words spoken in this one Mike  
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I really like this Mike...it's as though your stream of consciousness suddenly found itself a waterfall    Seriously, this is so lovely. I've been doing a bit of goodbye~ing myself of late... Thanks.

~ Claire
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8 posted 04-02-2000 11:58 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Mike~
Powerfully released.
~*Marge*~


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doreen,
I'm glad you enjoyed; and thanks for being a fan.

hoot,
Thank you.

Claire,
Glad you enjoyed, and glad that the poem might be some help to you. This is the type of stuff you can only write long after the fact.   As the first year anniversary of my breakup draws near, I wanted to think back to it and write a poem that shows it's painful for both sides -- and also one not chock full of swears. (oops)

Mike
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WOW..really excellent writing..I loved it!

 
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***bsquirrel,
wow and ow.
this is a panful poem to read, although it is truely mind-blowing.
a fantastically eloquent goodbye.
well done.


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12 posted 04-03-2000 11:18 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

wow I don't know how you speak so clearly to and through my heart, this makes me cry...great writing my friend.....thanks for stopping by my page, will try to write soon...
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13 posted 04-03-2000 05:58 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

I said it before.  I say it again.  You are an artist...(I'd 'e' you, but I fear the slug is still comatose after surgery...working on it tho...)
Again, EXCELLENT, Mike...)
 
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