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With Pen In Hand
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With Pen In Hand |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
With Pen In Hand One eve, I sat, with pen in hand, And watched the setting sun. The warmth and light of day were o'er; The cold, dark night begun. As if to emulate the sun, My heart had also set. My aching soul was filled with pain, And bitter, sad regret. One night, I sat, with pen in hand, And stillness all around; For darkness, with its ebon throat, Had swallowed every sound. I felt the blackness permeate My very heart and soul; It stole away my hopes and dreams, And left a gaping hole. One morn, I sat, with pen in hand, And watched the sun arise. Its warmth dispelled the chill of night; Its brightness filled my eyes. The hole within me mended, now, My spirit filled with peace. From dark despair, the radiant sun Had swiftly brought release. Now, even in my darkest hours, I think about that night, And how my blackest fears were stilled, By morning's golden light. This shining mem'ry gives me hope, And strength to carry on; For, shades of night, however dark, Must flee before the dawn. -Troy J. Hoecherl- © Troy J Hoecherl All Rights Reserved Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
absolutely lovely. Corinne |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Troy, this is PERFECTION!!! so very well written. and yes, we must try to look for the light,always. beautiful poem, excellent imagery and emotions. take care, jm she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough, and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in. ...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me... and I feel like somethings gonna give... and I'm a little bit angry. matchbox20 |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Troy...I love the rhyme format in this one  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Superbly written piece! I enjoyed it through and through, from the meter and rhyme to the continuity of the "pen in hand" theme. Your writing here is certainly one of a gifting presence. This reminds me very much of a little poem I posted last night called "A Poet's Eve," although yours is far lovelier. Wonderful! ~ Claire |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
You have so much talent! Every piece of yours I have read is stunning. Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is so beautiful and so well written, Troy! I especially loved the closing lines! Denise |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
-Troy- This is my favorite piece by you yet! You have a true gift for writing. This piece has such poetic grace and style to it. the meaning behind it, the words, the form, everything is just plain wonderful in it. i have printed this one out and am going to put it on my fridge. thanks much hon for sharing! AMY ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Once again I echo the responses above , and look forward to more . Doc |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Once again, I am overwhelmed by your responses. Such eloquent praise, from such talented poets - truly "praise from Caesar!" Thank you all for your kind comments! Troy  Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I could become an hsystems addict here... I really could..  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Troy~ This piece is superb. I'm showing partiality to this line. 'For, shades of night, however dark, Must flee before the dawn.' I had a thought as I read it that it would make a wonderful creed for a suicide prevention group. The very thought of a life that manages to make it until the sun comes up is a glimmer of hope and reflection. It's very thought-provoking as well as lovely. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Nan - (Blush) Thanks - you honor me! If ya DO get addicted, I promise my poetry won't make you hallucinate (like drugs,) give you cirrosis of the liver (like alcohol,) give you lung cancer (like tobacco,) or make you gain weight (like chocolate.) Well...maybe "For Epicurus" will add a few pounds, but that's it. Marge - Thank you for your kind words! I have found that writing poetry is often good therapy for me - that was certainly the case, here. I started out feeling suicidal, but by the time I finished the poem, I felt a lot better! Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Troy, I'm so glad I caught this one! Too many good poems escape me and drift so fast to page 2, then 3 etc. But this didn't get away. First of all, this is a perfect verse in rhyme and meter. Second, the subject matter is wonderful. And third, your writing is marvelous. All the ingredients for a truly fine poem. You should be very proud of this one. It is superb! Liz |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Bump! (I still love this poem!) |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I'll second that notion: "I'm becoming an hsystem addict!" This is well-penned to perfection. Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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