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With Pen In Hand

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hsystems
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       With Pen In Hand

One eve, I sat, with pen in hand,
And watched the setting sun.
The warmth and light of day were o'er;
The cold, dark night begun.
As if to emulate the sun,
My heart had also set.
My aching soul was filled with pain,
And bitter, sad regret.

One night, I sat, with pen in hand,
And stillness all around;
For darkness, with its ebon throat,
Had swallowed every sound.
I felt the blackness permeate
My very heart and soul;
It stole away my hopes and dreams,
And left a gaping hole.

One morn, I sat, with pen in hand,
And watched the sun arise.
Its warmth dispelled the chill of night;
Its brightness filled my eyes.
The hole within me mended, now,
My spirit filled with peace.
From dark despair, the radiant sun
Had swiftly brought release.

Now, even in my darkest hours,
I think about that night,
And how my blackest fears were stilled,
By morning's golden light.
This shining mem'ry gives me hope,
And strength to carry on;
For, shades of night, however dark,
Must flee before the dawn.

      -Troy J. Hoecherl-

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Corinne
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1 posted 04-02-2000 10:28 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

absolutely lovely.

Corinne
Janet Marie
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2 posted 04-02-2000 10:37 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Troy, this is PERFECTION!!!
so very well written.
and yes, we must try to look for the light,always.
beautiful poem, excellent imagery and emotions.
take care, jm

 she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough,
and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in.
...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me...
and I feel like somethings gonna give...
and I'm a little bit angry.
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Troy...I love the rhyme format in this one  
Meadowmuse
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4 posted 04-02-2000 12:23 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Superbly written piece! I enjoyed it through and through, from the meter and rhyme to the continuity of the "pen in hand" theme. Your writing here is certainly one of a gifting presence. This reminds me very much of a little poem I posted last night called "A Poet's Eve," although yours is far lovelier. Wonderful!

~ Claire
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5 posted 04-02-2000 12:42 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

You have so much talent! Every piece of yours I have read is stunning.

Elizabeth


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-The Crucible

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6 posted 04-02-2000 03:00 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is so beautiful and so well written, Troy! I especially loved the closing lines!

Denise
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7 posted 04-02-2000 03:15 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

-Troy-

This is my favorite piece by you yet! You have a true gift for writing. This piece has such poetic grace and style to it. the meaning behind it, the words, the form, everything is just plain wonderful in it. i have printed this one out and am going to put it on my fridge. thanks much hon for sharing!

AMY  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
Dr.Moose1
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8 posted 04-02-2000 03:25 PM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

Once again I echo the responses above , and look forward to more .
Doc
hsystems
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9 posted 04-02-2000 04:10 PM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

Once again, I am overwhelmed by your responses.  Such eloquent praise, from such talented poets - truly "praise from Caesar!"
Thank you all for your kind comments!

Troy


 Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry
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Nan
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10 posted 04-02-2000 07:58 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I could become an hsystems addict here... I really could..
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11 posted 04-02-2000 08:06 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Troy~
This piece is superb.
I'm showing partiality to this line.

'For, shades of night, however dark,
Must flee before the dawn.'

I had a thought as I read it that
it would make a wonderful creed for
a suicide prevention group.
The very thought of a life that manages
to make it until the sun comes up is
a glimmer of hope and reflection.

It's very thought-provoking as well
as lovely.
~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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hsystems
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12 posted 04-10-2000 02:44 PM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

Nan - (Blush) Thanks - you honor me!  If ya DO get addicted, I promise my poetry won't make you hallucinate (like drugs,) give you cirrosis of the liver (like alcohol,) give you lung cancer (like tobacco,) or make you gain weight (like chocolate.)  Well...maybe "For Epicurus" will add a few pounds, but that's it.  

Marge - Thank you for your kind words!  I have found that writing poetry is often good therapy for me - that was certainly the case, here.  I started out feeling suicidal, but by  the time I finished the poem, I felt a lot better!  

Troy

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Elizabeth Santos
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Troy,
I'm so glad I caught this one! Too many good poems escape me and drift so fast to page 2, then 3 etc. But this didn't get away.
First of all, this is a perfect verse in rhyme and meter. Second, the subject matter is wonderful. And third, your writing is marvelous. All the ingredients for a truly fine poem. You should be very proud of this one. It is superb!
Liz
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14 posted 04-14-2001 11:03 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Bump!

(I still love this poem!)
Honeybee
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15 posted 06-10-2004 11:50 AM       View Profile for Honeybee   Email Honeybee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Honeybee

I'll second that notion: "I'm becoming an hsystem addict!" This is well-penned to perfection.  

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

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