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In The Eye Of The Beholder
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In The Eye Of The Beholder |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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(Once in a great while, my muse goes a bit berserk and presents to me an idea for a poem that I haven't got a clue as to where it comes from. I am haunted by the verse and unable to write anything else until I write it down...this just happens to be one such piece. It's a bit unusual for me...so bear with it) In The Eye Of The Beholder she watched her standing there long blonde hair in a tight red cashmere sweater that outlined pert little breasts and accented a short black skirt that clung to her hourglass waist and well toned buttocks she’d asked him last night as he lay on worn cotton sheets if this new young secretary was pretty while in the mirror she studied wrinkles that lined her once perfect face and broad hips that had borne the weight of three children “i guess if you like that type” echoed back to her from the bed they’d shared for twenty years she had brought him lunch at the office today for the first time in over ten years out of sheer curiosity and was astonished upon opening the door to find it littered with mementos of their life together pictures drawings cards and souvenirs adorned walls tables and shelves saying more than his words ever could have and suddenly she understood as she left she flashed a smile to the secretary standing beside the copy machine and with an added bounce in her walk stepped out into the spring air where with head held high she paraded down the street < !signature--> There are only two ages of people...living and dead and you all look about the right age to me  [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 04-02-2000).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This brought shivers of delight. So well written, Hoot, unusual or not, it is a wonderful piece Liz |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Brilliant!!! loved this Ruth, loved the ending expected the usual ya know, wife walking in on the husband while fooling around with the secretary, but no it was the oposite and it made not only his wife but myself feel good. Loved it!! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Hoot, this is AWESOME!!! WOW...your muse had not let you down.this is so well thought out and written, and the imagery is perfect-- "she’d asked him last night as he lay on worn cotton sheets" --------------- "it littered with mementos of their life together pictures drawings cards and souvenirs adorned walls tables and shelves saying more than his words ever could have and suddenly she understood" ----------------- this is excellent Ruth, truly...in the eyes of this beholder...  take care,jm she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough, and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in. ...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me... and I feel like somethings gonna give... and I'm a little bit angry. matchbox20 |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I love this Hoot !!!! Brought warm and fuzzie feelings to this gal ...... Still smiling here .... |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow, Ruth, this is a brilliant poem. A lot of people tend to believe that after being married for so long, that love dies, but your poem clearly shows that love can last forever. I Love this one! Well, from now on, you will be my muse, you are such a talented poet and you are truly an inspiration to us all - I'm sure that everyone will agree with me. Take care, Melissa Honeybee |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Elizabeth, Pepper, Janet Marie and Dark Angel...thank you all very much Melissa...you snuck in on me there hon as I was posting. If I inspire you to write, I'd be more than happy to be your muse. Thank you for your kind words [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 04-02-2000).] |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Outstanding work.......Love it and find it among the best of yours A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Hoot~ Lovely thoughts. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Yep - A one-woman parade... Awesome!! |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
This is a wonderful and happy poem, I really enjoyed it Hoot! Nathan |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
Wonderful...I loved it...but of course I love all your poems...your very blessed with talent! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is so delightful and uplifting, Ruth! I could see that bounce in her step!! Denise |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Hoot, this is magnificent! The relationship you speak of reminds me of my parents' marriage. They married when he was 18 and she was 14. That was 53 years ago, this November, and they are still very much in love. I wrote a poem about their lives together, and presented it to them on their 45th anniversary...have to see if I can dig it up and post it here. Thanks for the lift - my spirit really needed it today! Troy  Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
No matter where it came from, Hoot, I like it! Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Hoot isn't that the way it should be? Lovely thoughts? This reminded me of my friend Margaret who has passed away now. Her husband was a doctor and he went for the new young secretary in the office and divorced Margaret. I met her three years after the fact and she was still living in hell on earth. She was having the hardest time accepting her fate..a fate that I would wish on nobody on this earth..the hurt and the pain, the diaappointments, the betrayal. James |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Ruth, Another wonderful job. I knew there was a reason for all those picture all over my office. I so enjoy reading your work. INclan |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Alright! What an awesome poem, my dear! This one hits very close to home, not for myself, but an old family scandal involving the new secretary. Someday, I'll just have to write that story down... Thanks for this! Corinne |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent writing, Ruth. Everyone needs to be reassured at times...it's natural |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This is amazing Hoot....Glad you didn't push the thought aside and flowed with it I loved it. Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I'm with DA on this one! I thought it twas going to be the other way around too. You know what? I think this would make an excellent prose piece, with more added on to it. Hell of a story Ruth! I can see this one in print. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Lucky couple ... nice ... enjoyed the way it was told Rex}>{{{{o> |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Ruth This is going to sound strange but this piece brought tears to my eyes. Sometime's us women need reassuring and this was given to her without a word said. I loved this, it was truly beautiful (sniff, sniff) Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
I'm glad your Muse took you by force to write this piece. It's good to read of the lucky ones. Well done. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
This is Oh so sweet, Ruth...so glad you decided to write and share it. ~ Claire |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you everyone and as much as I fought my muse on this one, I'm glad He/she didn't steer me wrong |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
I've read quite a few of your poems, though I don't always post a reply (don't always have time)~ Anyway, I wanted you to know that I think you have a wonderful talent~ This piece, as odd as you think it to be, was beautiful~ Marie~ "Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind; And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Wow, Wow, Wow, Hay wait just a minute, I thought it was going to be "twit steals love..." and then of all things it's real love. you got a catchy little pen. |
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SorrowsMystress Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 178I'm a wanderer, a nomad...I don't live in one particular area, Just wherever I end up. |
With as much devestation in marriages nowadays, it's difficult to find poetry with such a happy ending....believe me, it was a great relief. It brings a lot of hope to this soul of mine to think that there is probably still marriages out there like this. I truly, truly loved this poem, and will share with many of my married friends who are wary of pretty girls and their husbands. Good work is an understatement!  |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Ruth, You never cease to amaze me. I love the mood changes in this one!  ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you everyone |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
this is wonderful hoot, brought a smile, for all the loves that "should be" and are thanks |
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pmc Junior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 48Germany |
Hello I liked the first one so I looked and found another. Its better still. pmc |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Ruth, this is simply amazing. I remember sometime back you persuaded me to contact a publisher for a couple of particular pieces...well...now it is my turn. Ruth you definitely should get this one off into the hands of an agent/publisher. This is exceptional work. Wonderful feeling throughout, and a great story to boot. thanks for a great read. chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Hoot: I'm glad you didn't ignore your muse. *S* This is fantastic.... enjoyed it much! |
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