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In The Eye Of The Beholder

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hoot_owl_rn
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0 posted 04-02-2000 08:53 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

(Once in a great while, my muse goes a bit berserk and presents to me an idea for a poem that I haven't got a clue as to where it comes from. I am haunted by the verse and unable to write anything else until I write it down...this just happens to be one such piece. It's a bit unusual for me...so bear with it)

In The Eye Of The Beholder

she watched her standing there
long blonde hair in a tight
red cashmere sweater that outlined
pert little breasts and accented
a short black skirt that clung
to her hourglass waist and well toned buttocks

she’d asked him last night
as he lay on worn cotton sheets
if this new young secretary was pretty
while in the mirror she studied
wrinkles that lined her once perfect face
and broad hips that had borne
the weight of three children
“i guess if you like that type”
echoed back to her from the bed
they’d shared for twenty years

she had brought him lunch at the office
today for the first time in over ten years
out of sheer curiosity and was astonished
upon opening the door to find
it littered with mementos of their life together
pictures drawings cards and souvenirs
adorned walls tables and shelves
saying more than his words ever could have
and suddenly she understood

as she left she flashed a smile
to the secretary standing beside the copy machine
and with an added bounce in her walk
stepped out into the spring air
where with head held high she paraded
down the street



 There are only two ages of people...living and dead and you all look about the right age to me      



[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 04-02-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth Santos
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1 posted 04-02-2000 08:59 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

This brought shivers of delight. So well written, Hoot, unusual or not, it is a wonderful piece
Liz
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2 posted 04-02-2000 09:59 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Brilliant!!! loved this Ruth, loved the ending expected the usual ya know, wife walking in on the husband while fooling around with the secretary, but no it was the oposite and it made not only his wife but myself feel good. Loved it!!

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Janet Marie
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3 posted 04-02-2000 10:14 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Hoot, this is AWESOME!!! WOW...your muse had not let you down.this is so well thought out and written, and the imagery is perfect--

"she’d asked him last night
as he lay on worn cotton sheets"
---------------
"it littered with mementos of their life together
pictures drawings cards and souvenirs
adorned walls tables and shelves
saying more than his words ever could have
and suddenly she understood"
-----------------

this is excellent Ruth, truly...in the eyes of this beholder...
take care,jm




 she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough,
and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in.
...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me...
and I feel like somethings gonna give...
and I'm a little bit angry.
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4 posted 04-02-2000 10:29 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

I love this Hoot !!!!
Brought warm and fuzzie feelings to this gal ......
Still smiling here ....  
Honeybee
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5 posted 04-02-2000 11:50 AM       View Profile for Honeybee   Email Honeybee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Honeybee

Wow, Ruth, this is a brilliant poem. A lot of people tend to believe that after being married for so long, that love dies, but your poem clearly shows that love can last forever. I Love this one! Well, from now on, you will be my muse, you are such a talented poet and you are truly an inspiration to us all - I'm sure that everyone will agree with me.  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee
hoot_owl_rn
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Elizabeth, Pepper, Janet Marie and Dark Angel...thank you all very much  

Melissa...you snuck in on me there hon as I was posting. If I inspire you to write, I'd be more than happy to be your muse. Thank you for your kind words  

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7 posted 04-02-2000 11:53 AM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

Outstanding work.......Love it and find it among the best of yours

 A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her.


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8 posted 04-02-2000 12:10 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Hoot~
Lovely thoughts.
~*Marge*~


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Nan
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9 posted 04-02-2000 01:11 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Yep - A one-woman parade... Awesome!!
Nate Dogg
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10 posted 04-02-2000 03:23 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

This is a wonderful and happy poem, I really enjoyed it Hoot!

 Nathan
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11 posted 04-02-2000 03:26 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

Wonderful...I loved it...but of course I love all your poems...your very blessed with talent!

 
Denise
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12 posted 04-02-2000 03:30 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is so delightful and uplifting, Ruth! I could see that bounce in her step!!

Denise
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13 posted 04-02-2000 03:33 PM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

Hoot, this is magnificent!  The relationship you speak of reminds me of my parents' marriage.  They married when he was 18 and she was 14.  That was 53 years ago, this November, and they are still very much in love.  I wrote a poem about their lives together, and presented it to them on their 45th anniversary...have to see if I can dig it up and post it here.
Thanks for the lift - my spirit really needed it today!

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14 posted 04-02-2000 05:14 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

No matter where it came from, Hoot, I like it!

Elizabeth


 "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!"
-The Crucible

JamesMichael
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15 posted 04-02-2000 05:26 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Hoot isn't that the way it should be?   Lovely thoughts?  This reminded me of my friend Margaret who has passed away now.  Her husband was a doctor and he went for the new young secretary in the office and divorced Margaret.  I met her three years after the fact and she was still living in hell on earth.  She was having the hardest time accepting her fate..a fate that I would wish on nobody on this earth..the hurt and the pain, the diaappointments, the betrayal.
James
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16 posted 04-02-2000 05:45 PM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan

Ruth,

Another wonderful job. I knew there was a reason for all those picture all over my office.  I so enjoy reading your work.

INclan
Corinne
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Alright!  What an awesome poem, my dear!
This one hits very close to home, not for myself, but an old family scandal involving the new secretary.

Someday, I'll just have to write that story down...

Thanks for this!

Corinne
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Excellent writing, Ruth. Everyone needs to be reassured at times...it's natural  
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This is amazing Hoot....Glad you didn't push the thought aside and flowed with it I loved it.


 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.

WhtDove
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20 posted 04-02-2000 07:35 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

I'm with DA on this one! I thought it twas going to be the other way around too.
You know what? I think this would make an excellent prose piece, with more added on to it. Hell of a story Ruth! I can see this one in print.
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21 posted 04-02-2000 09:18 PM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

Lucky couple ...
nice ... enjoyed the way it was told

Rex}>{{{{o>
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22 posted 04-02-2000 09:33 PM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Ruth
This is going to sound strange but this piece brought tears to my eyes.
Sometime's us women need reassuring and this was given to her without a word said.
I loved this, it was truly beautiful
(sniff, sniff)


 Keep all the windows of your mind open
Anne Rooks
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I'm glad your Muse took you by force to write this piece. It's good to read of the lucky ones. Well done.
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24 posted 04-02-2000 09:46 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

This is Oh so sweet, Ruth...so glad you decided to write and share it.  

~ Claire
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