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Master
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0 posted 04-02-2000 03:14 AM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

*The last line is in Russian, it literally means, "It's still to early, It's still to early..." and ofcourse it rhymes with stretcher.


The blaring gusts no longer come to soothe,
The wind and I no longer share one course!
The law of motion says that one cant move,
Unless hes acted on by certain force.

The winds blow by my ship with no effect--
They only pass right through the ripped up sail.
From boredom, I recall, in retrospect,
The days when I would ride upon the gale, --

The days when rats were jumping overboard,
When lighting struck, so viciously and surly,
When out of might and strength, I often thought,
Its still too early, its still too early!

I spin the rudder in despair, both night and day,
But the predestined plots proceeding
And motionless, my ship will only sway
Upon the waves, -- forthcoming and receding.

Ive lost my track on this deceiving trek.
Im out of breath, the blurry mist I swallow!
The rain wont cease; it pounds on the deck, --
Not everything thats from above is hallow.

But I refuse to scream out, S-O-S!
I will not leave my ship upon a stretcher
My lucky stars continue to suggest, --
* , ...

© Copyright 2000 Andrey Kneller - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 04-02-2000 03:40 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

AWESOME.

Thank you again and again, Mighty Master!
Continue my education, please....
Lucius Cade
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2 posted 04-02-2000 03:49 AM       View Profile for Lucius Cade   Email Lucius Cade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucius Cade

I loved this poem, it teaches an important lesson about never giving up.

 Lucidity is the answer to all problems
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3 posted 04-02-2000 08:36 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Your talents cease to amaze me my young friend...I only hope I am around to see your work when you are in your 40's or 50's, with what you do now, it's going to be awesome  
Master
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4 posted 04-02-2000 02:50 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thank you everyone,
Ruth I don't deserve all of your compliments, but I can't wait to see what I'm going to be writing when I get older either.
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Don't know much about Russian , but I did enjoy this piece . Na vashe zdrovia .( which probably isn't spelled right , but which I believe to mean " to your health "
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Awesome, Master!! You are so talented!! I too can't wait to see your work when you are older.....the thought is mind boggling!

Denise
Master
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7 posted 04-02-2000 07:17 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Dr. Moose, it's actually "Za vashe zdorovie!" but you're pretty close! Where did you learn that one?

Denise, thank you. It means a lot coming from a very talented poet.
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8 posted 04-03-2000 07:54 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Master~
Nice work.
I enjoyed.
~*Marge*~


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Master
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9 posted 04-03-2000 04:13 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thank you Marge!
 
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