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SorrowsMystress
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0 posted 04-01-2000 11:23 PM       View Profile for SorrowsMystress   Email SorrowsMystress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for SorrowsMystress

Neglect

Have you ever reaped
The being from the soul
And intertwined an echo
between your fingertips
Escaped a sigh
with only seconds left to breathe
Let the leaves
rip and tear
under your feet
The feet which kicked my stomach
so blindly
The feet which walked upon my
face
Until I was beyond
Black and blue
A backhanded  discipline
shot out too far.
But how long will you push me
before I snap
and begin raping your intelligence
Stripping you down to your naked fear....


© Copyright 2000 Kimberlee Jones - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth Santos
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1 posted 04-02-2000 08:34 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

This seems like a dark picture of physical abuse rather than neglect. I hope it isn't true, but your poem shows a lot of emotion
Liz
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Another poem packed full of raw emotions
Marge Tindal
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3 posted 04-02-2000 08:31 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

SorrowsMyst~
This is very sad and very frightening.
Packed with raw emotion ...
Unfortunate for such horror to
inspire a poem.  
If it has happened to you .. seek help.  
If it's happening to someone you know ... seek help.

Powerfully written.
~*Marge*~


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doreen peri
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4 posted 04-02-2000 09:37 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

Wow! Haunting, bitter, and full of life and truth. Enjoyed much.
tracie66
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5 posted 04-02-2000 09:39 PM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Hauntingly dark and sorrowful.

 Keep all the windows of your mind open
Anne Rooks
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6 posted 04-02-2000 10:41 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very powerful piece. If this is happening to you, don't wait 'till you snap. Get out while you can and then get counseling to go on with the rest of your life. And then don't look back.

Denise
SorrowsMystress
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7 posted 04-03-2000 02:26 AM       View Profile for SorrowsMystress   Email SorrowsMystress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SorrowsMystress

Thank you for your concern....this has happened to me, but fortunately I am out of the circumstances which inspired me to write this. I have gotten help for the post trauma it caused, and am doing quite well now. I just have a knack for writing about my atrocities, so I'll warn you now to expect that from me. Thank you for all of your wonderful comments, it gives me great hope.  
Cerenity
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8 posted 04-03-2000 01:50 PM       View Profile for Cerenity   Email Cerenity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerenity

Hi SorrowsMystress,

I am sorry you went through this, life is hard enough to do without this, and I am glad you are ok. I write about my past as well it seems to finalize it, or at least help. This is good.

Cerenity
Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith
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9 posted 04-08-2000 01:37 AM       View Profile for Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith   Email Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith

wow...Wow....WOW
One Who Understands
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10 posted 04-08-2000 01:39 AM       View Profile for One Who Understands   Email One Who Understands   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for One Who Understands

Very, very powerful.

Good poem
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