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Had I known....

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SorrowsMystress
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I'm a wanderer, a nomad...I do


0 posted 04-01-2000 10:44 PM       View Profile for SorrowsMystress   Email SorrowsMystress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for SorrowsMystress

Had I known

Had I known that the heart
breaks slowly, dismantling itself
into unrecognizable fragments
of misery....
Had I known the heart would leak
emitting it's ache
with a vulgar visisbility
Into the dress-up dining rooms
of strangers.....
Had I known that solitude could
stifle the breath, loosen the mind,
and force the toungue against the
palate.....
Had I known that lonlieness could
permeate, winding itself around the
body in an omnious and beautiful
cicatrix.....
Had I known-
I still would have loved you.
Your brash and violent beauty,
Your heavy comedic face
And your knowledge of sweet
delights.
But from a distance
I would have left you unfrequented
for the delectation of those who
Wanted more and could care less....

© Copyright 2000 Kimberlee Jones - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 04-01-2000 11:33 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

hi and welcome to passions...and WOW your poem makesquite a first impression.this is very well written and expressed..packs a punch with you choice of words..and that last verse is perfection...
grat job, take care, jm

 she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough,
and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in.
...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me...
and I feel like somethings gonna give...
and I'm a little bit angry.
matchbox20
Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 03-06-2000
Posts 3768
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2 posted 04-02-2000 12:01 AM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

You certainly Know how to make an entrance, this is breathtaking, you have tapped into such strong emotion.  Your work is such a gift...thank you for sharing it!!!



 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.

Severn
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since 07-17-99
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3 posted 04-02-2000 08:52 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

WOW!

This is a stunner!

But from a distance
I would have left you unfrequented
for the delectation of those who
Wanted more and could care less....

This is nigh on perfect - and an excellent ending...welcome to Passions!

  

hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
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4 posted 04-02-2000 09:06 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

WOw, this is a powerfully written piece packed full of emotions and a grand entrance to our site. Welcome to passions...looking forward to reading more  
Denise
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5 posted 04-02-2000 07:56 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is an excellent piece of writing, Sorrows.

Denise
Elizabeth
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America the beautiful


6 posted 04-02-2000 08:02 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

You are a very wise person, SorrowsMystress, and I hope things look up for you soon. Welcome to Passions!

Elizabeth


 "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!"
-The Crucible

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7 posted 04-02-2000 08:10 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

SorrowsMyst~
This is a very powerful, thought-provoking
piece of writing.
Welcome to Passion's
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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tulip
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8 posted 04-02-2000 08:44 PM       View Profile for tulip   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for tulip

Wow,
what a powerful piece!  Welcome!!!
CherylLynnMckee
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9 posted 04-02-2000 08:49 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

I agree...very powerful..wonderful first post..and welcome to Passion!

 
doreen peri
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10 posted 04-02-2000 09:40 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

A sincere welcome to you! It is good to read such well crafted free verse. I will be looking forward to reading more.
Tatianna
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11 posted 04-02-2000 10:44 PM       View Profile for Tatianna   Email Tatianna   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Tatianna

Your piece speeks of true feelings. This piece hit me very hard.  I've been through similar situations,  and it speeks of feelings that should be universal.  I hope to see more from you.  
Cerenity
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12 posted 04-03-2000 01:35 PM       View Profile for Cerenity   Email Cerenity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerenity

Hi SorrowsMystress,

You have caught my mind with your words so full of power I am very, very impressed. You are a welcomed friend here.

Cerenity
TerryW
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13 posted 04-03-2000 02:13 PM       View Profile for TerryW   Email TerryW   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TerryW's Home Page   View IP for TerryW

Allow me to extend my greetings as well, and to say that I agree with everyone else -- this is a very powerful piece of writing.  Wonderfully done!    Welcome to the passions family!




 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.
Aimster
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14 posted 04-03-2000 03:42 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

First, welcome to Passions. Hope you like it here as much as I do!   Secondly, wow this was one heck of an entrance piece. powerfully written, emotions captured perfectly, and poetically breathtaking. i will look forward to reading more of your work. for now take care.

amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
Parker
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... the old black rum


15 posted 04-03-2000 06:35 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

SorrowsMystress, I must mirror all the other comments, wonderful job. Great choice of word useage. Yes and the ending was perfect.

Parker.... look forward to reading more.
 
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