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The Crying Clown

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gilbert_6
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In a vision I imagined a clown
and on his face he wore a frown.
His makeup was smeared on his face,
somehow he didn't belong in this place.
I sat down beside him to ask him why
he was so sad, and why did he cry,
but then he turned and I looked in his eyes
and knew he couldn't go on living these lies,
of smiling and cheerful thinking
when inside his heart was slowly sinking
with the world's pain and contradiction
wishing his smile was not merely fiction,
but genuine and in some way real
making happiness a feeling he could feel,
not something he put on in disguise
to hide the sadness behind his eyes.
Then the clown turned and i could finally see
that the sad clown with a frown was really me.
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Welcome to Passions, Gilbert. Excellent poem! Please check you email for a special welcome! I look forward to reading more from you!

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This has the potential of being an excellent poem. Welcome, Gilbert.
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Gilbert~
Welcome to Passion's
Wearing the face of a clown,
laughing on the outside ...
crying on the inside ...
has to be difficult.
You've explained this very nicely.

~*Marge*~


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Very nice entree... Welcome to Passions..

Butterflies_dont_cry
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WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!

What an entrance you make...This is beautifully written and so touching.  You've used the style I love as well...the "final blow" at the end.  I can't wait to read more.

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Good poem (Marge what is that person spraying!?)
gilbert_6
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Thank all of you for the comments and support.  Please feel free to criticize, I am wanting to become better, so any suggestions would be appreciated.  Thanks again, this site is a blessing.

gilbert_6
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welcome to passions  
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