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0 posted 04-01-2000 05:42 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for LoveBug

My dear friends
Can you give me some help?
This is a task
That I can't do myself

The day I've dreamed of
And written of, too
Is about to arrive
(No April fool!)

I'm taking charge
Of my own destiny
I just hope that fate
Will be kind to me

The time has arrived
When I will say
What I feel for the guy
That I pine for each day

The guy I write for
Who's always in my mind
And the perfect poem
I'd like to find

This is where you come in
Read through my posts
And find the one
That will work the most

And, so early
This Monday morn
It goes in his locker
Heavily adorned

And, one thing he will surely
Be able to see
It will be MY name
No anonymity

He may say yes
He'll probably say no
But I can't live wondering
I just have to know

Living life for a dream
Isn't how it should be
For once, I'm taking charge
I'm doing this for ME

(So, please help! If you want to, read through my posts to see what poem would tell him what I feel the best, and just tell me the name. If you don't have time to do that, some encouragement would be nice! Thanks!)


 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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1 posted 04-01-2000 06:02 PM       View Profile for Roniece Dawson-Bruce   Email Roniece Dawson-Bruce   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Roniece Dawson-Bruce

ooooh LoveBug, by acknowledging to yourself that now is the time to act - you are already half the way there!  Good Luck and please do let us know how it works out! I will have some good thoughts for you xx

Roniece  
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2 posted 04-01-2000 06:12 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Ugh, I have so little free time lately.. I will try and find the time to look through your stuff Lovebug, but dont hate me if I dont   Its good that yer gonna tell him how you feel, just make sure you brace yourself for whatever he may say. I made the mistake of asking a girl out, and wasnt ready for her answer of no, I was utterly destroyed   I do not, however, regret asking her, and you wont either, no matter what the result.
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3 posted 04-01-2000 06:15 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Good luck, Lovebug! I'll look right now, and when I find it I'll bump it up to the top, 'k?

Best wishes, Elizabeth


 "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!"
-The Crucible

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4 posted 04-01-2000 06:21 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Why not use this poem? Put an opening verse on it addressed to him and give this to him!
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this one maybe? today can be that somedaySometimes, I will sit and think
About what I wish I could say
I would scream it out to you
If I only knew the way
The way to overcome the fear
Of saying it to you
I dream of saying it every day
But will this ever come true?

If this dream ever came to be
And I got to say this to you
Here is what I would say
And every word would be true...

ďIt doesnít matter what you say
As long as I hear your voice
And Iíll gladly give my life for yours
If I am given the choice

It doesnít matter if you push me away
Because Iíll be happy to feel your touch
And you can be as mean as you want
I wonít leave; I love you too much

I wish you would say you loved me
Even if it were a lie
Because if you reject me now
Iíll curl up and dieĒ

Yes, I would say this to you
If I ever got the chance
But, Iím just a coward
Stuck in a hopeless romance

So, I still sit and think
About what I wish I could say
Maybe Iíll say it sometime,
Maybe... someday





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6 posted 04-01-2000 06:26 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

I found two that you might  consider--Deserving of You, and I can't remember the title of the other one, but they are in Teen Poetry #2 at the top. Good luck again!

Elizabeth


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Sprin and love are in the air...best of luck to you, although any guy that can't see that you are a gem is....well he's just plain blind...I'm going poem hunting now  
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8 posted 04-01-2000 08:23 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

lovebug,
I finally got teen forum#2 open but cannot access #1. I think either this one or one of the two on page 1 of Teen #2 are perfect. You should really choose. I personally like this one, eliminating two stanzas, the first one and the one beginning, "THis is where you come in".
Good luck, lovebug.
Liz
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9 posted 04-01-2000 10:35 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

Thank you for the suggestions and support, everyone! I think I'll re-write "Deserving of you" and give it to him, but I'm still open for suggestions!   Thanks again!

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
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10 posted 04-01-2000 10:59 PM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

I think this one works fine, the main thing is that you let your feelings be known. Good luck.
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