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The Simple Grace of Going

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Martie
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The Simple Grace of Going

I can see his skin crumbling
for dust is coming
and this pouring tear
cannot quench this truth.

He sleeps in clouded peace
lulled by elixirs
that dull the brilliance
of his pain-filled sweetness.

In trust he has given me
his arm's strength
and kissed me with his smile
until I am raw weeping.

Still his love lights up
and bursts in strong survival
that time and space can only embrace
with encompassing compassion.

I see him folding into
this heart song that swollows me
and I want to scream let loose
let loose of this stinging.

Just let me soak in his breath
for it fills me with potent peace
and takes each moment sweetly
from this tenderness that loves me

complete and uninterrupted
and with simple grace of going.


[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 04-01-2000).]
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1 posted 04-01-2000 02:37 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

Beautiful poem..such lovely versus.

 
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2 posted 04-01-2000 02:42 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie~

A
tear
shared
with a friend
is a tear that
lasts forever
within the
heart



*Hugs to you.
I understand.
Love you ~*Marge*~

Elizabeth Santos
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Martie,
  This is one of your most splendid works, written from the heart, coming out of the truth experienced in life and of never ending love. Your "raw weeping" is in sadness and also in joy. The slight moments of smiling are of the exquisite kind, and will live forever.
This is one beautiful and unforgettable poem
Love
Liz
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4 posted 04-01-2000 05:41 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Beautiful and touching, Martie. Very well written.

Denise
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Martie, I love this work of yours. You have expressed sadness and loving in your writing
I hope you get to smile soon  
Love
Roniece xx
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This is an amazing, beautiful, sad poem. The title is perfection.......
Martie
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Cheryl--thank you for your sweet comment

Marge--I know you understand...and thank you

Liz--You are an unforgetable friend...thanks for being there for me

Denise--I'm glad this touched you and that your computer is running again

Roniece--I am getting many smiles--enough to last a lifetime

PdV--What a wonderful reply, thank you.
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Martie, yes, yes, it is just this way.

Thank you for these sharing words. Precious goings, savored moments...it is just this way.

~ Claire
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Claire--thank you for your understanding words.
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Oh, Martie, I see a familiar heartbreak unfolding before my eyes.  How poignantly tender you write!  "I see him folding into
this heart song that swallows me", and "complete and uninterrupted and with simple grace of going."
I'm so terribly sorry for your grief.  I truly care.


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Oh Martie hon...you write with sheer grace. This is a touching piece. ((((HUGS))))
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Rosemary--I know you care...and that this place is too familiar..hugs!

Ruth--Your sweetness always shines in your caring replies.
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This is absolutely wonderful, Martie - You never ever fail to enthrall me with your work..
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Martie, I know no one who can say things the way you do. We can all use the same alphabet but you do things with it that I can only smile at in awe. Another brilliant work....
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Nan--What a wonderful comment coming from a poet such as yourself.

Balladeer--you know your compliments to my ability always make my heart sing.
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I had a good friend I met in '66. In the early 70's he was diagnosed with terminal cancer. A handsome man - I visited him daily in the hospital as often as I could. I watched him waste away and it brokemy heart. Gordon left a wife and 5 children - Margaret and I remained friends to this day - she has a house on cape cod and she came to Penny's funeral. I believe I will always have trouble dealing with Cancer. I don't know how you did it.
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I knew by the title this would be good
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I don't know how I missed this... this is absolutely beautiful.

I'm keeping it.

Maree

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Everytime I read something new I had not read, I feel like I am from another planet, for this is not the same language I speak surely?  Martie, it is like you squeeze the life out of each letter, forming a new word to birth.  I respect your writing more than you will ever realize m'friend.
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Do you want to know something mysterious?  This was in my library, and I don't see that I ever responded.  Must be a reason for all things...

All things that are s

Like you, and your family...
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WOW...I have known this a couple different times in my life...and getting ready for another round.     This was absolutely beautiful, Martie!!  I am keeping this one!!

Love ya...

  

Becka
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