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Lonely (tanka)

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INclan
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0 posted 04-01-2000 07:23 AM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for INclan

lonely road before
lonelier road behind me
alone with my thoughts
great crowds press in upon me
no acknowledgment
© Copyright 2000 KKunnen - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
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1 posted 04-01-2000 10:33 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

I can't believe no one's replied to this...I think it's great  
INclan
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2 posted 04-01-2000 02:05 PM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan

Thank you, Ruth.  This one must not appeal to very many people.  I knew I could count on you!

INclan
CherylLynnMckee
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3 posted 04-01-2000 02:09 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

small poem...big meaning and once again I agree with hoot_owl_m there should be more replys...great poem!

 
TravisK
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4 posted 04-01-2000 02:14 PM       View Profile for TravisK   Email TravisK   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TravisK

I can relate to this.Like it.

Take Care,
Travis Kennedy
Joannak
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5 posted 04-01-2000 08:28 PM       View Profile for Joannak   Email Joannak   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Joannak

Oh, INclan, you make me feel your loneliness...

You must know, you inspire me with your wonderful thoughts and haiku.  As for acknowledgement, you only need wait a short while...

Thank you,
Joanna
Denise
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6 posted 04-01-2000 08:41 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is great INclan! So descriptive!

Denise
bboog
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7 posted 04-01-2000 09:06 PM       View Profile for bboog   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit bboog's Home Page   View IP for bboog

In~
I liked the thought behind this one. Maybe "solitary road behind me" instead of "lonlier"?
and "acknowledgement-none"
Just a thought, you're the boss!
bboog
INclan
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8 posted 04-02-2000 08:36 AM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan

Thank you all for your kind responses.

Thank you, Cheryl for the compliment. I try.

Thank you, Travis. There do seem to be lonely times...even in a crowd. This was written during my 1.5 hour commute home after a LONG week.

Joanna,

your work inspires me. Thank you for reading me.

Thank you, dsnyder. I know you read a lot so your compliment means a lot.

Thank you, bboog.  I am flattered that you took the time to think and analyze. I take it as a compliment.

INclan
Severn
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9 posted 04-02-2000 08:44 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

I love this.
I love its simplicity and stark imagery.

Well done!

K
Meadowmuse
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10 posted 04-02-2000 11:32 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

You've illustrated, so well, how one can feel their alone~ness even in the largest crowd. Wonderful writing!

~ Claire  
Elizabeth Santos
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11 posted 04-02-2000 11:52 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

A long road in few words. very meaningful
I like it
Liz


Marge Tindal
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12 posted 04-02-2000 12:14 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

INclan~
This is just perfect.
These Tanka's and Haiku's
are so fascinating to read and
to do.
Thank you for sharing this.
~*Marge*~


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INclan
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13 posted 04-02-2000 10:50 PM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan

Thank you, Severn, Meadowmuse, Marge, and Liz, you are all most kind. I strive to achieve the standards set by your work.

INclan
 
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