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Marshmallow Melted Smore

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Lost Dreamer
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Marshmallow Melted Smore

You stood in front of me looking puzzled
like what era of time did I elapse to thee
was I being obtrusive ignoring all the time
is my mind a marshmallow melted smore?

I played with you in your dreams last night
dangling just within reach yet so far away
did you feel my intense whispering breath
smothering your neck with warm dampness?

A fingernail touch placed upon exposed knee
as my treated lips lightly caressed your nose
following it up to your forehead inching desire
when all a sudden like a flash you awoke me.

I saw a universe of love pouring from your eyes
dressing me in slinky lingerie expressing smile
before myself knew I was a model in your mind
each minute a visual strip tease laced with love

Not sure when the train whistle blew telling me
every hour spent listening is an hour well worn
I walked away knowing now that puzzled look
was an open doorway waiting for an ear to fill.
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1 posted 04-01-2000 12:23 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

How sweet--I liked the second-to-last verse. Wonderful work, Lost Dreamer.

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2 posted 04-01-2000 12:35 AM       View Profile for Witch's Brat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Witch's Brat

Me too! Just beautiful.

WB

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3 posted 04-01-2000 12:48 AM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

well done ... you played with me in my dreams as I was reading !

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4 posted 04-01-2000 08:26 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Elizabeth: Thank You very much, I also like that verse best.  

WB: Thank You, glad you enjoyed.  

Rex:I hope you had fun   Thank you for reading and enjoying

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Oh...it has been a joy to watch you blossum as a poet my friend  
Lost Dreamer
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Ruth, coming from you that compliment sings harmoniously in my mind, Thank you ever so much.  
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Good pat on the back LD! Wonderful!
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Isnt it wonderful how we look threw someones eyes that love us..beautiful poem...lovley versus.

 
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Very beautiful, Gloria!

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I expected a recipe when I saw the title..and I got one..recipe for a lovely poem! Good one, Gloria.
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Makes me hungry for smore.....
 
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