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What Your Prayers Have Done.....An Update on "Pooh"

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Butterflies_dont_cry
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0 posted 03-31-2000 11:58 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry


I would GREATLY appreciate any suggestions on making this better and a title. It is a tribute to a very sweet young man in my life "Pooh"....Shane  is my very dear friends 16 year old son, he and I have formed a bond that hold me like a vice.  Shane was rushed this evening back to the university hospital.  He is awaiting his second liver transplant, he has the same disease that recently took Walter Payton's life.  I have one other small request for the family of Passions.....no matter what belief you have or what God you pray to....please say one tonight for my "Pooh".  Thank you all.  


Oh No....Please not my sweet "Pooh"
Sirens race you to E.R.
I beg....plead...scream...pray..... .why you?
You're so weak...... my fading star

Just sixteen...so very young
But those eyes have seen so much
To Deaths door once....But life clung
When will it all be to much?

Few have the GIFT of one chance
Now...How dare we ask for two?
Up to the heavens I glance
I weep...as my arms hold you.

Mental photos...closed eyes....drift.......
Happy face, eyes bright and clear.
All that gone...You've had one GIFT
One precious chance.....just last year.

The rejection has begun
and now the painful wait.
As I watch the rising sun
Please..... don't let the GIFT come late

An inner battle rages strong
To recieve....one must pass on
This all seems so very wrong
Please "Pooh".....I pray....just hang on.

It's so hard to believe  now
To think........ the unthinkable
But if you'll just please allow
Please remain.........unsinkable

As I hold "pooh"'s yellow  hand  
I hear the nurse's words come
From what seems a distant land
"They have said No"........I go numb.






[This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 04-03-2000).]
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1 posted 04-01-2000 12:02 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

What depth and strong emotion you have here, butterfly, and what a sad situation. My prayers are with you......
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2 posted 04-01-2000 12:07 AM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

butterfly,

oh girl, this touched me so deeply! this kinda emotion is what true poetry is all about! as for what i would change about this to make it better...absolutely nothing. it comes from the heart, so therefore is already perfect as is...as for a title, perhaps something with "pooh" in it...like pooh don't go. help me out with this one guys.

butterfly, i will definitely say a prayer for shane this evening before i go to bed. also my mom is in heaven, and she was a divine lady. shane is ok, she's watching him. i hope that gives u a slight bit of comfort. take care, and god bless.

amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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3 posted 04-01-2000 12:09 AM       View Profile for Roniece Dawson-Bruce   Email Roniece Dawson-Bruce   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Roniece Dawson-Bruce

I too will say a prayer for Pooh and for you - be strong for Pooh - he needs your strength xx  Love Roniece
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4 posted 04-01-2000 12:30 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

May God bless you both! Of course I will say a prayer...as I just did. Take care now and keep us posted!


Hugs'n'stuff,
Elizabeth


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-The Crucible

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5 posted 04-01-2000 02:24 AM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

As Aimster says, change nothing it comes from the heart. I will pray for Shane and for you. My thoughts are with you both.
Suzanne
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I dont think your poem needed any help at all. just stay strong and everything will work out for the best. it always does, my prayers are with you
Michael
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Your poem speaks from the heart and the emotion behind it is very apparent and true.  Nothing more need be said there.  I will definately keep you and him in my prayers tonight.


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This is so heartfelt, it doesn't need any changes! My prayers are with you and your "Pooh".

Love and hugs,
Lizzie

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You are all so kind, and you remind me why I'm so comfortable here.  Thank you for all of your prayers and I'm glad you though it was "enough"....it's hard to read and judge when you have so many tears in your eyes you can't see straight....I'm sure you know how that is.  Thank you again....straight from my heart.
Janet Marie
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Butterfly...you are so special...and so loving...the poem is of your heart, change nothing...you know, you and he are in my thoughts and prayers...and heart...it goes unsaid...
love and prayers my sweet friend, jm

Prayers for Pooh

if i had 3 wishes...
i'd give them all to you
if i knew the answers or reasons
i'd know just what to say and do
sometimes things are decided
and we beg to ask the reasons why
sometimes we feel so helpless
all we can do is cry
i wish i knew the sercets
i wish i could take this pain away
i know we aren't suppose to question fate
so instead of asking why, i'll pray.
Prayers of strength and healing,
Prayers of a miracle true...
Prayers of love and patience
Prayers for you, sweet Pooh.
jm


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My prayers are with you both.
Slashed soul
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Dont know how you all feel - but can't we have a whip round and send this young man some cash, or gifts (i'll say a prayer anyway).

COUNT ME IN!

10 dollas - to address if thats possible!

What do you say?

Give with your hearts, collectively we can give lots, individually we can give hope!

-Rich-

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Dont know how you all feel - but can't we have a whip round and send this young man some cash, or gifts (i'll say a prayer anyway).

COUNT ME IN!

10 dollas - to address if thats possible!

What do you say?

Give with your hearts, collectively we can give lots, individually we can give hope!

-Rich-

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Butterfly
Aimster is right. You need not change a thing. The poem is you and it is perfect just the way it is. It contains your heart and your love.
my prayers are with you both
Liz
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Passionate prayers coming your way, Butterflies
WhtDove
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What emotion, had tears in my eyes. I shall keep you both in my prayers! God bless you and him!
CherylLynnMckee
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17 posted 04-01-2000 12:04 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

OH butterflies I didn't see this tell today...this poem moved me to tears...beautifully written...and even thow I am late I have already said a prayer...and will continue to do so.

 
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ButterfliesDC~
You are such a HUNNY !

Prayers for Shane sent his way.
~*Marge*~

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Your poem pulls such heavy memory from my heart, for times when we see just how fragile life is...Your poem and thoughts are wonderfully powerful as is your love.  My prayers and thoughts are with you and your Pooh.
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You are all so wonderful....J.M. your poem brought tears to my eyes...of course they haven't been without them since I got the call last night....Marge I looked EVERYWHERE I could think of last night to find a Pooh picture...thanks for being there. Rich you are wonderful and with such a huge heart, if wasn't for people like you I'm not sure where Shane and his mom would be right now.

I wanted to share a little bit more of Shane's story with you...at 6 Shane was diagnosed with Chrone's Disease, usually (not always)this attacks the bowels but in Shanes case it attacked his Liver.  Shane was near Death on his 15th birthday when he received his first liver transplant, he was a new kid....smiles and full of life.  The "Make a Wish Foundation" gave him a 4-wheeler and he found the speed and freedom he hadn't known since he was very young.  Then slowly he began to have set backs....on his 16th birthday they diagnosed him with Chirrohsis of the Liver, He is on a long waiting list for a second liver, and the liver is like the heart....there is no artificial replacement or back up once it stops.  All we can do is wait and pray, last night he became very ill and was taken to E.R. he has an infection in his abdomen that is spreading.  Even if a donor is found the sicker gets the less likely he'll be chosen to receive it (the sickest with the best odds of survival are at the top of the list).  When you are placed on a transplant list there are certain critera that match you with a donor...A young man in the hospital with Shane is awaiting the exact "same" liver, he is ahead of Shane on the list, I shudder to think how Shane's mother will react when the first GIFT comes through...can you imagine?  

I have so much respect for his mother...she is a hardworking  mom....raising two teenagers,  she has only been able to work here and there... 3 days in the last 8 wks due to Shane being in and out of the hospital...She has almost lost the material things due to this...bill collectors only wait so long.  

I'm trying to gather some ideas for a fund raiser...the school has done one for him that was last year following the first transplant, if you have any ideas please e-mail me.

Shane's family lives 3 hours from the University...They thought of moving but Shane wants the quality of life that comes from being around friends and family....His mom doesn't want to take that from him too.

I just wanted to share a piece of my Pooh with you as you share your prayers with him.

Thank you all so much!!


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21 posted 04-01-2000 04:53 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Still sending thoughts, prayers, and HUGS your way...

      

Elizabeth


 "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!"
-The Crucible

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Beautiful poem. My prayers will be for you and Pooh!! The best of luck and a heart full of love form me is for you!! BYE!!
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23 posted 04-01-2000 05:05 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

My prayers are with you BDC and with Pooh.


 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


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24 posted 04-01-2000 05:06 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

I will keep praying...it doesn't always feel like it..but god is always with us in are darkest hours..Hang in there Butterflies..and if theres anything I can do let me know...and thanks for sharing the story of Pooh...I wished their was more I could say or do.

 
 
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