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Angel
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0 posted 03-31-2000 07:22 PM       View Profile for Angel   Email Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Angel

My own personal prison; bars to hold in the pain
Tears fall from my eyes like death's black rain
They just never seem to come to an end
Clinging onto the world without a single friend
And yet I am here by my own power
Never giving myself a chance to flower
To me; dependency is so very frightening
Yet it is always there and threatening
And so I cry for you; and I cry for me
I cry for all the hurt that you can not see
You must not know all the pain I feel
Or know that these smiles, just aren't real
The thought of someone stealing my soul
And once again leaving that empty hole
Is an ever present reminder of the past
Every good thing just doesn't seem to last
I may never be the person that I am inside
That is the reason why I must hide
Build up a wall so that no one comes near
For behind that wall grows a garden of pain and fear
Before the time comes when it is you that I love
I know that I must first be free of
All the hurt and pain from deep within
I must learn to love myself for my life to begin...


 ~Susie~


© Copyright 2000 Susan Acacio - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth
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1 posted 03-31-2000 08:33 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Very painful. Best of luck to you, Susie. Hope that soon you can break through the prison bars to find love.

Elizabeth


 "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!"
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Aimster
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2 posted 03-31-2000 08:47 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

~susie,

this was very well written and the words held some powerful messages. this was something that i once could relate to. keep your head up and keep fighting, and you will get past those bars that hold you back from truly enojoying the wonder and beauty of life. take care and god bless. i wish you lots of luck in your future. again, great poem!

Amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
Cerenity
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3 posted 04-01-2000 08:50 AM       View Profile for Cerenity   Email Cerenity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerenity

Hi Angel,

I totally understand this brick wall thing, I have even learned how to put in a elevator of sorts, because I think every thing is OK and then bam, but in my garden of pain I planted black rose all over because to me there beauty goes both ways, I hope you are set free soon.

Thank you, Cerenity
hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 04-01-2000 09:28 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Your last line says it all...we must learn to love ourselves before we are truly capable of loving another.
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5 posted 04-01-2000 10:02 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Hi, Suse~
Nice emotionally-packed poetry, my friend.
Loving yourself is the place to begin.
Good to see you writing.
Keep it up, gal.
~*Marge*~



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6 posted 04-01-2000 10:26 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Sometimes the personal prison of our own creation is harder to escape. But you will do it! I'm sure...  
Angel
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7 posted 04-01-2000 02:22 PM       View Profile for Angel   Email Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Angel

Elizabeth: Thanks so much, I'm on my way  

Amy: Thanks, I will. I'm so glad you got through it  

Cerenity: Thanks so much sweetheart. Geesh, I know how that feels. Thanks again  

Hoot: Thanks for reading. That last line does say it all...  

Marge: Hey, I know, I've been on a sort of vacation (a nice way to say a really bad case of writer's block  ) But then again, with all the great poetry here, I was real busy reading. Thanks  

Poet deVine: Thanks for reading and having faith  


 ~Susie~


TravisK
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8 posted 04-01-2000 02:26 PM       View Profile for TravisK   Email TravisK   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TravisK

Another poem that I can relate to.Nice work.
Take Care,
Travis Kennedy.
CherylLynnMckee
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9 posted 04-01-2000 02:34 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

So well written...I felt the same way for many years...it took a long time for me to realize my worth...and with that came freedom..you will find it to.

 
Rod17NYS
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10 posted 04-01-2000 03:17 PM       View Profile for Rod17NYS   Email Rod17NYS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rod17NYS

Hey this poem is very well written...I think all of us is a prisioner of our own past and faults, but there's someone out there with a key to set you free, and when you least expect..You'll think everything was just a bad dream...Good luck =o)

Rod
Angel
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11 posted 04-06-2000 10:43 PM       View Profile for Angel   Email Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Angel

TravisK-Thanks so much. I love hearing people say they can relate to what I write  .

CherylLynnMckee-I'm so happy you got through it. I think I'm on my way too. Thanks so much  .

Rod-Welcome to Passions. I am getting through this slowly. Thanks again  .



 ~Susie~


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