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Angel
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0 posted 2000-03-31 07:22 PM


My own personal prison; bars to hold in the pain
Tears fall from my eyes like death's black rain
They just never seem to come to an end
Clinging onto the world without a single friend
And yet I am here by my own power
Never giving myself a chance to flower
To me; dependency is so very frightening
Yet it is always there and threatening
And so I cry for you; and I cry for me
I cry for all the hurt that you can not see
You must not know all the pain I feel
Or know that these smiles, just aren't real
The thought of someone stealing my soul
And once again leaving that empty hole
Is an ever present reminder of the past
Every good thing just doesn't seem to last
I may never be the person that I am inside
That is the reason why I must hide
Build up a wall so that no one comes near
For behind that wall grows a garden of pain and fear
Before the time comes when it is you that I love
I know that I must first be free of
All the hurt and pain from deep within
I must learn to love myself for my life to begin...


 ~Susie~



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Elizabeth
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1 posted 2000-03-31 08:33 PM


Very painful. Best of luck to you, Susie. Hope that soon you can break through the prison bars to find love.

Elizabeth


 "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!"
-The Crucible


Aimster
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2 posted 2000-03-31 08:47 PM


~susie,

this was very well written and the words held some powerful messages. this was something that i once could relate to. keep your head up and keep fighting, and you will get past those bars that hold you back from truly enojoying the wonder and beauty of life. take care and god bless. i wish you lots of luck in your future. again, great poem!

Amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~

Cerenity
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3 posted 2000-04-01 08:50 AM


Hi Angel,

I totally understand this brick wall thing, I have even learned how to put in a elevator of sorts, because I think every thing is OK and then bam, but in my garden of pain I planted black rose all over because to me there beauty goes both ways, I hope you are set free soon.

Thank you, Cerenity

hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 2000-04-01 09:28 AM


Your last line says it all...we must learn to love ourselves before we are truly capable of loving another.
Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2000-04-01 10:02 AM


Hi, Suse~
Nice emotionally-packed poetry, my friend.
Loving yourself is the place to begin.
Good to see you writing.
Keep it up, gal.
~*Marge*~



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Poet deVine
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6 posted 2000-04-01 10:26 AM


Sometimes the personal prison of our own creation is harder to escape. But you will do it! I'm sure...  
Angel
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7 posted 2000-04-01 02:22 PM


Elizabeth: Thanks so much, I'm on my way  

Amy: Thanks, I will. I'm so glad you got through it  

Cerenity: Thanks so much sweetheart. Geesh, I know how that feels. Thanks again  

Hoot: Thanks for reading. That last line does say it all...  

Marge: Hey, I know, I've been on a sort of vacation (a nice way to say a really bad case of writer's block  ) But then again, with all the great poetry here, I was real busy reading. Thanks  

Poet deVine: Thanks for reading and having faith  


 ~Susie~



TravisK
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8 posted 2000-04-01 02:26 PM


Another poem that I can relate to.Nice work.
Take Care,
Travis Kennedy.

CherylLynnMckee
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9 posted 2000-04-01 02:34 PM


So well written...I felt the same way for many years...it took a long time for me to realize my worth...and with that came freedom..you will find it to.

 

Rod17NYS
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10 posted 2000-04-01 03:17 PM


Hey this poem is very well written...I think all of us is a prisioner of our own past and faults, but there's someone out there with a key to set you free, and when you least expect..You'll think everything was just a bad dream...Good luck =o)

Rod

Angel
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11 posted 2000-04-06 10:43 PM


TravisK-Thanks so much. I love hearing people say they can relate to what I write  .

CherylLynnMckee-I'm so happy you got through it. I think I'm on my way too. Thanks so much  .

Rod-Welcome to Passions. I am getting through this slowly. Thanks again  .



 ~Susie~



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