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The girl behind the mirror

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star 15
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since 03-28-2000
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0 posted 03-31-2000 04:10 PM       View Profile for star 15   Email star 15   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for star 15

this is a poem for any lonely teeen

i look in the mirror
and what do i see
i see a girl that is not me
i look in the mirror
and wonder who is that girl i see
the one that is not me
i look in the mirror
i see a perosn who used to have a name
i look in the mirror
and i see a girl who has changed
i look in the mirror
and i see a girl who is not me
i look in the mirror
and i see a girl i whish i could be
i look in the mirror
and say who is this girl
this girl that is not me
who is this girl
that i whish i could be
who is this girl
the girl that is not me.



 



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Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 03-06-2000
Posts 3768
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1 posted 03-31-2000 04:46 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry



Oh sweetie this is wonderful and so sad.  I recall being this teen...heck I think I'm still this adult!  If you ever need someone to talk to I listen well, e-mail me anytime!

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Danny Holloway
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since 01-15-2000
Posts 2072
Tulsa, OK


2 posted 03-31-2000 04:47 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

I think you have made a good effort with a theme that most teens struggle with while trying to find themselves in this world.

A comment or two if you don't mind.  The expression could have been better except for some spelling errors and omitted words.

May i suggest you try the review screen before submitting to correct some of these areas in the future.

I think you have a writers imagination and I look forward to reading more of your work.
Welcome to Passions.  You'll find a lot of nice people here.
Best regards,

[This message has been edited by Danny Holloway (edited 03-31-2000).]
EagleOne
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3 posted 04-01-2000 03:02 AM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

Finding yourself is something that many people struggle with well into adulthood.

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