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star 15
Junior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 26


0 posted 2000-03-31 04:10 PM


this is a poem for any lonely teeen

i look in the mirror
and what do i see
i see a girl that is not me
i look in the mirror
and wonder who is that girl i see
the one that is not me
i look in the mirror
i see a perosn who used to have a name
i look in the mirror
and i see a girl who has changed
i look in the mirror
and i see a girl who is not me
i look in the mirror
and i see a girl i whish i could be
i look in the mirror
and say who is this girl
this girl that is not me
who is this girl
that i whish i could be
who is this girl
the girl that is not me.



 



[This message has been edited by star 15 (edited 04-05-2000).]

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Butterflies_dont_cry
Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
1 posted 2000-03-31 04:46 PM




Oh sweetie this is wonderful and so sad.  I recall being this teen...heck I think I'm still this adult!  If you ever need someone to talk to I listen well, e-mail me anytime!

Welcome to Passions, **Angel Wing Hugs and Butterfly Kisses**

Danny Holloway
Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
2 posted 2000-03-31 04:47 PM


I think you have made a good effort with a theme that most teens struggle with while trying to find themselves in this world.

A comment or two if you don't mind.  The expression could have been better except for some spelling errors and omitted words.

May i suggest you try the review screen before submitting to correct some of these areas in the future.

I think you have a writers imagination and I look forward to reading more of your work.
Welcome to Passions.  You'll find a lot of nice people here.
Best regards,

[This message has been edited by Danny Holloway (edited 03-31-2000).]

EagleOne
Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
3 posted 2000-04-01 03:02 AM


Finding yourself is something that many people struggle with well into adulthood.

Welcome to Passions.

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