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The Void

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Mike
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0 posted 03-31-2000 03:36 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mike

Adrift upon night's tideless sea,
Seeking out tempetuous ports,
Unburied hopes of drifting dead,
Punctured by lives of stinging sin,
Swells the howling chorus of man's perdition.
Mephistopheles doth cloak the night,
Darkened depths of melancholy
Forever sailing primordial seas
To silent tombs of Neptune's grave,
As solemn moans of pounding waves
Rise forth the sobbing sea.
I sail on this great brooding sea,
Crossed by no word, no whispered thought,
Mocked by crashing waves of despair,
As seek solace of nameless port.
Do not condemn this helmless ship
Adrift in muted windless storm,
For in the cold bottomless depths
of ocean's currentless void,
Lies ghostly ships of past aground
Shrouded by the sins of man.
As sinking hull fades out of sight
Into the murky depths below,
Tempest calms as anchor fails,
On sinking deck, I mourn my soul,
Rise forth the sobbing sea.
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ESP
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1 posted 03-31-2000 04:06 PM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

This is a beautiful poem! Great use of imagery, I saw everything you expressed. Keep posting!!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie

Martie
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2 posted 03-31-2000 04:18 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Mike, your brooding sea of images is spectacular and dark..."the sobbing sea"...excellent use of words to convey a feeling....more hugs!
Poet deVine
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3 posted 03-31-2000 04:32 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

MY! Darkness becomes you my friend. This is excellent.... whew!
Meadowmuse
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4 posted 03-31-2000 04:32 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

This is beautiful, profound writing, Mike. Seems we are tossing on some of the same waves today...

~ Claire
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5 posted 03-31-2000 09:24 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent piece, Mike. Wonderful writing.

Denise
Nan
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6 posted 04-01-2000 09:44 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Well - What's to say - This is a poignant poem - and quite aptly titled, I might add.. I can't even pick out any lines that I like better than the others - Every one is teeming with fathomed intent...
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7 posted 04-01-2000 09:57 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Mike~
Your poetry is just a wonderful treat
to venture in.

'Rise forth the sobbing sea.'

That line, alone, is worth the read.
Thanks for sharing your images of thought.
~*Marge*~


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Rex Allen McCoy
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8 posted 04-01-2000 09:58 AM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

your poem is true excellence Mike ...
loved every word

Rex}>{{{{o>
Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 04-01-2000 10:07 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Nobody says it like you do
Wonderful imagery, Mike
I wonder sometimes if I have the same dictionary as you. I think I do, just not the same poetic mind
Liz
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Lovely verse Mike...your imagery is grand  
 
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