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The Sweet Guitar
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The Sweet Guitar |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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The Sweet Guitar He was the greatest of the great A master of the strings The strains of his DeGeorgio Took flight like angel wings He rode on horseback into town And strummed his sweet guitar They came to dance and hear him play From villages afar His hands were well accomplished Though he was still quite young And she was there to listen to Each ballad that was sung A dark exotic beauty Long hair as black as night And piercing eyes he said reflected Southern Cross’s light He felt her eyes upon him With every note he played The more she watched the lovelier The music that he made One night he pledged his love to her And made a promise true If you will give your hand to me I’ll play for only you A promise made so long ago But to this very day From behind his little ranch house You can hear the music play Segovia-like strums float down From up atop the hill The moonlit palms stop swaying And the bamboo shoots are still And she is there to hear his song His wondrous serenade Each night the music’s lovelier Than anything he’s played He lights a cigarette and waits The moment to be right Pleading any cloud to pass And open up the night The moment that the moonlight comes To touch upon the strings He cradles his guitar And to his tender love he sings He gazes up at Southern Cross While fingering pleasant strums And she looks down from heaven As she's done since they were young The stars shine brighter on this ranch Than any other place The master plays and smiles As starlight shines upon his face Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 03-31-2000).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is so very lovely, Elizabeth! |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is the most lovely poem!! I could just see everything you described so clearly. Thank you for sharing this gem with us. I totally love this poem! Keep posting!! Love and hugs, Lizzie  |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Beautiful poem, Elizabeth! I enjoyed it greatly, thank you for sharing  Abrahm Simons Put one foot on the path of life and tread the dagger's path betwixt dark and light. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--this is the most romantic, tender love story...you are amazing! |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
This poem was in perfect tune and made such sweet music to my ears. Thanks for the lovely serenade! |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
This was music to the soul. Very well done, Elizabeth! Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you all for your comments. However I don't think anyone understood that she had died long ago and he was still singing to her as he had promised. So I changed a few words to make that clear. This story is based on a beautiful old Brazilian song. I see we've got another Lizzie on board. Martie, you never stop. Just can't keep away from passions, can you? Thanks again, Liz [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 04-01-2000).] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Such a tender, poignant story poem Liz...so nicely shared. Thank you, my friend. ~ Claire |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Elizabeth, this one got me right in my weepy old heart! Very touching and beautifully written! Denise |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
It's a brilliant adaptation, Elizabethian one. Your writings are so beautiful...... and, all this time, I thought that song was about a violinist who promised not to fiddle around! Better brush up on my Portugeuse  |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Truly a wonderful poem from an extremely gifted poet. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Claire, thank you so much Denise, Welcome back! Thanks Balladeer, Very funny, very funny. Thanks for the comments, dear friend Mike, Now if you had written this, we would have felt the day retreating as moonlight slowly crept across the hills and palms, etc,etc. I just can't write that beautifully. Maybe some day. Thank you for the compliment. It means a lot . Liz [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 04-01-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
beautiful story Liz, very rich with your lovely imagery...and sweet with the tale of his undying love and devotion. very well written...you make it look easy.(smile) take care, jm she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough, and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in. ...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me... and I feel like somethings gonna give... and I'm a little bit angry. matchbox20 |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
What a lovely tale you've told |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, You are so talented and write so well. Thank you for posting it. Love Sy |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Liz, A tear for this perfect poem and a tear for you, you write so beautifully it amazes me, thank you so much. Cerenity |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
That was beautiful..your talents know no bounds! so lovely. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Janet Marie, and you read everyone's poetry with love and devotion, and it is much appreciated Hoot, Thank you for your comment Sy, Thanks for keeping up, nice to hear from you, and thank you for the compliments. Love ya Cerenity, Thanks for reading and commenting on this poem. You are very kind CherylLynn, Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it Liz |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth, dear one~ Tuned to perfection. Strummings of devoted love that plays on into the night. Surely she hears his promise kept. Beautiful dear heart. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You've made this one sing, my friend..  |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
This is a keeper, Liz. You should consider submitting this one to poetry magazines. Corinne |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Marge, Glad you enjoyed it, dear. Thanks Nana, Thanks Nan, for the musical response Corinne, Your remark is touching. So sweet of you to say that. Liz |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Liz, this is a beautiful love story! I just got around to reading it, and it's wonderful! I loved it lots! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
This was such a lovely ballad. It makes me sigh. Very nice indeed. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Lovebug and kitcat, Two romantic hearts. Thank you both for reading and commenting. I'm glad you liked this. Liz |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
I understood the poem very clearly about the dying part Liz. Your poem is like drops of sunshine. All I have to say is keep writing because you have something that few poets have. Nathan |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Nate, I must say, that's one of the loveliest compliments ever given to me. Your remarks were very warming. Thanks so much Liz |
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Billy Bolden Junior Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 23 |
Liz, you are wonderful, nothing is more romatic than the acoustic gitar caloused hands. I recognized the the origin from the reference "Southern Cross" many sailors have longed to see this constalation with their love. Even departed. bb |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
touching for me, Rosemary and I have been musicians for many many years but I'm sorry to say I sit and write more today than I sould sit and play. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Billy, Thank you for your comments. The guitar is perhaps the most romantic of all instruments and the Southern Cross the most beautiful of all constellations. Lucky, Nice to learn of another talent that you and Rosemary possess. Thanks for reading and commenting Liz |
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