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On a Pale Horse

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hsystems
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0 posted 03-31-2000 10:48 AM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

                 On a Pale Horse

Speak softly, lest your voice offend the silence.
Come, sit with me, beneath the maple tree.
For, soon, my friend, I'm going on a journey:
My time is near; the Horseman comes for me.
My dreams are gone; my heart is torn and bleeding.
What horror could the end now hold for me?
I feel a gentle calm, though Death approaches;
For, when I die, I know I shall be free.

And, yet, my friend, I'll miss our times together -
The golden hours that you and I have shared.
For, even when life's trials have been the greatest,
You've filled my soul with peace, beyond compare.
I almost wish the end were not so near, now;
And, that my death, I somehow could delay.
For, if there is a means to end my sorrow,
I know that you would help me find the way.

The Horseman's here; I bid him, "Take me swiftly;
From life's dark pain, I long for death's reprieve!"
But, no!  He turns away from me, perceiving
That I have much, as yet, for which to live.
And, so, my friend, I ask you, "Take me home, now;
And stay with me, throughout the lonely night.
Then, with your hand in mine, upon the morrow,
I'll find the strength to carry on the fight."

  -Troy J. Hoecherl-

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Rex Allen McCoy
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1 posted 03-31-2000 01:12 PM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

Beautiful poem Troy ... almost lost both parrents to the horseman ... more than once
he's turned away and wished them well

Rex}>{{{{o>
hsystems
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2 posted 03-31-2000 06:24 PM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

Thanks, Rex!  This poem has special significance for me.  It was one of the (thankfully) rare moments in my life when I felt suicidal, and my best friend talked me out of it - so glad she did!

Troy


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Butterflies_dont_cry
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Troy*
Amazing....You created a whirlwind of feelings with this one... you know a poem has done it's job when it's done that. As always thank you from the bottom of my heart for sharing your gift!
INclan
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4 posted 04-01-2000 07:35 AM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan

Troy,

This is simply wonderful.  I really enjoyed how you have woven the whole thing together. I like how you handled the conflict between "being ready to die" and " Death's rejection." The ending spoke to me....being as resigned to life as you were to death.

INclan
Janet Marie
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5 posted 04-01-2000 08:07 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

troy, this is exceptional writing, truly.
this piece is so strong and well written and just perfect, powerful, and full of the wisdom of your lessons learned.
very nice work here.
take care, jm

 she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough,
and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in.
...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me...
and I feel like somethings gonna give...
and I'm a little bit angry.
matchbox20
hoot_owl_rn
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6 posted 04-01-2000 09:26 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Troy....you are a gifted poet, this is incredibly formated and perfect in it's rhythm and rhyme...not to metion a most powerful piece. You should be proud of how well you have crafted this one  
Nan
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I do agree with my cohorts on this piece, Troy...

You've got some wonderful talent.. This is quite an intense work, and speaks volumes for your ability.  I'll be reading lots more of your work..
CherylLynnMckee
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8 posted 04-01-2000 12:16 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

Thank god for your friend..had he not..so much beautiful poetry we would of lost..this peice included..thank you for sharing it.

 
hsystems
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9 posted 04-03-2000 04:43 AM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

Thank you all for your wonderful comments!

Butterflies...in this case, art imitated life.  The whirlwind of emotions started inside me, and flowed onto the paper.  I guess I really had TWO good friends there that night, as my muse was certainly in attendance.  

INclan...it never ceases to amaze me - sometimes the hardest choices in life can become crystal-clear and simple, when we view them in another light.  I am forever thankful  to this special friend for helping me to see things clearly, and to channel my efforts in the opposite direction.  Glad you liked it!

JanetMarie...thanks for the praise!  And, yes, this was a hard-learned lesson - one of those things where you look back and think "Whew - that was a close one!"

Hoot...thank you so much!  Creating this piece was actually serendipity - my heart spoke so loudly I could not ignore it, and I simply wrote down the words as it dictated.

Nan...you are too kind!  I really don't think  that I'm an exceptional writer, though - just a very good listener.  My heart speaks, my muse translates the emotions into words, and I record them - sorta like a stenographer  with hairy legs, LOL!

CherylLynnMckee...I DO thank God every day for this friend.  She kept me sane when my world was chaotic and crazy, and there is a special place in my heart that will always belong to her.

Again, thank you all for reading my poems!  Your words of praise mean an awful lot to me,  since you are all such talented poets!  I'm really thankful to be part of the Passions family!


Troy

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mariee66
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This was masterfully done~
Wonderful job Troy~
Marie~


 "Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind;
And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard


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