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mete out
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0 posted 2000-03-31 08:50 AM


I feel I have no grip anymore
And there's no hope for this counselling
Because I can't get this aggression out.
I feel perpetulantly removed and in pieces,
I feel as if there's nothing holding me back.

But then I see your face.
I feel myself tingle at your touch.
I hear your consolling words,
Whispered so tenderly.
You make it all faed away.
My mind clears and is filled again,
Not with dark thoughts and despair,
But with love, hope and trust.

Whenever I need you
You are here in abundence.
You feel so hopeless,
Yet you do so much when you hold me.
I acn bury my head in your chest
And everything else disappears.
No pain, no torment.
Nothing but you, me and our love.


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.



© Copyright 2000 Louise Parsons - All Rights Reserved
Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
1 posted 2000-03-31 09:21 AM


It's great to have someone that redeems us. Good job.  
mete out
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2 posted 2000-03-31 09:47 AM


***Poet deVine,
You are so right. Thankyou so much!


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.



Cerenity
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3 posted 2000-04-01 08:42 AM


Hi mete out,

Its so wonderful to have some one that can give confort like that, I wish I had someone sometimes because life is filled with so much STUFF.

Thank you,  Cerenity

mete out
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4 posted 2000-04-03 04:30 AM


***Cerenity,
It is a great comfort to have someone to lean on, you are right.
I am confident you too will be in this situation soon, whatever your crutch may be, it is  just around the corner.
Thankyou for replying.  


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.



Enola
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since 2000-02-11
Posts 138
England
5 posted 2000-04-03 07:14 AM


God, you are so lucky.  I'm having one crappy day today & this has made it that bit better - thanks!

 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.

mariee66
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since 2000-01-30
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Recess, OfYourMind
6 posted 2000-04-03 10:14 AM


I know the feeling of having someone to hold you, making all life's problems melt away~
Nicely written~
Marie~


 "Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind;
And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard



mete out
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7 posted 2000-04-03 10:26 AM


***debs,
thankyou yet again.
every day i am reminded of hoe lucky i am.
and YOU have brightened my day...
(so bad today)  
love always.

**mariee66,
it is fantastic.
the funny thing is, is that i never thought i would ever experience it...
glad you enjoyed it.    


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.



infinat3 sadn3ss
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8 posted 2000-04-03 10:38 AM


i could say the same old cliche stuff like "beautiful", "touching","fantastic" ,but that wouldnt describe the feeling i had when i first read this, the true reaction is beyond words .love infinitum
cabes

mete out
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9 posted 2000-04-03 11:05 AM


***cabes,
awww...thankyou...  
although this is primarily about ryan, you too canes have the same redeeming effect on me...you are too great...love you.


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.



infinat3 sadn3ss
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10 posted 2000-04-03 04:34 PM


dont worry i knew who it was about . he is SO lucky to have you , and so am i (as a friend)
Parker
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11 posted 2000-04-03 06:27 PM


mete out, you are very lucky, and expressed it so well. very nice read.

Parker

just_another_fe
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12 posted 2000-04-03 09:51 PM


mete out~
This was a
great poem.I
miss havin this
feeling.Its great to
have someone there
for you and
with you
~Angie

mete out
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 270
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13 posted 2000-04-04 05:00 AM


***cabes,
you know you are cherished by me...
I'm the lucky one.  

***parker,
thanks.
i'm glad you enjoyed the poem.

***angie,
thankyou for your kindness, it is a great situation i am in right now.
i am determined to hang on to it (and him!)  


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.



angelswing
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since 2000-02-10
Posts 705
United Kingdom
14 posted 2000-04-14 03:41 AM


Great poem, although I wasn't realy in the mood to appreshiate it, it almost made me feel happy briefly, well writen, it says loads .

 With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .

mete out
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 270
england
15 posted 2000-04-14 06:57 AM


***bakes,
yet again thankyou.
i'm glad incould lighten your mood, if only a little.    


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.



PericolosoAmore
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since 2000-04-14
Posts 31

16 posted 2000-04-14 05:04 PM


I like this a lot, it is nice to have someone there for to be comfortated by.
mete out
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 270
england
17 posted 2000-04-20 03:08 PM


***PericolosoAmore,
thankyou for your reply.
it means alot to me to know that you enjoyed this poem.
i'll be looking out for your posts.  


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.



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