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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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Something I threw together. Right now, it sounds cool. I'm sure once I'm well-rested, I'll have second thoughts. Oh well. Mike -smooth- Smooth. So smooth. Taste the vowels caught between my teeth. Oh. Ee. I am U. Hair slicked back to keep it out of reach. Smooth, so smooth. Edges all worn away from time. Jagged little scars that weren't worth the lines I fed U to keep U from finding out. Little lost night in a rotting rain shed, Girl left with the smell of jasmine and her first blood. Smooth, so smooth, the way the lights played in my hair, The blue and red lights -- look at me! I'm revolving! I'm spinning out of control. Smooth, so smooth, the sides of this hole. Trying to climb out, falling farther than I thought I could. U knew I would. I never should. I did, though. And I felt so gloriously f______ sah-moooooooooooth Through it all. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You had to do it. This one HAD to be read out loud, so I did. (Forgot the windows were open, too...) I LIKE this mood in you. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This was great Mike...loved the whole mood- sa-mooth as it was!!!  Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
BSQ...WOW...if this is what comes from sleep deprivation -- then honey stay up!! this is WAY COOL...and Im so enjoying the visual of serenity reading this outloud..LOL your mind goes where few dare to go bsq. its your gift!! we enjoy it. Smooth, so smooth. Edges all worn away from time. Jagged little scars that weren't worth the lines I fed U to keep U from finding out. deep..U R sooooooo very DEEP jm she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough, and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in. ...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me... and I feel like somethings gonna give... and I'm a little bit angry. matchbox20 |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
serenity, Thanks. I guess this held up better than I expected. devina, Merci. Sleep deprivation brings out weird things in me -- of course, it also keeps me totally unguarded, so any barriers I might invariably put up in some of my more obtuse poems are completely obliterated. JM,  You're right, that IS funny.Mike |
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