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0 posted 03-31-2000 02:37 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bsquirrel

Something I threw together. Right now, it sounds cool. I'm sure once I'm well-rested, I'll have second thoughts. Oh well.

Mike

-smooth-
Smooth. So smooth.
Taste the vowels caught between my teeth.
Oh. Ee. I am U.
Hair slicked back to keep it out of reach.
Smooth, so smooth.
Edges all worn away from time.
Jagged little scars that weren't worth the lines
I fed U to keep U from finding out.
Little lost night in a rotting rain shed,
Girl left with the smell of jasmine and her first blood.
Smooth, so smooth, the way the lights played in my hair,
The blue and red lights -- look at me! I'm revolving!
I'm spinning out of control.
Smooth, so smooth, the sides of this hole.
Trying to climb out, falling farther than I thought
I could.
U knew I would.
I never should.
I did, though.
And I felt so gloriously f______ sah-moooooooooooth
Through it all.

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serenity blaze
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1 posted 03-31-2000 02:49 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

You had to do it.   This one HAD to be read out loud, so I did.  (Forgot the windows were open, too...)

I LIKE this mood in you.    
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This was great Mike...loved the whole mood- sa-mooth as it was!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

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3 posted 03-31-2000 03:01 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

BSQ...WOW...if this is what comes from sleep deprivation -- then honey stay up!!
this is WAY COOL...and Im so enjoying the visual of serenity reading this outloud..LOL

your mind goes where few dare to go bsq.
its your gift!! we enjoy it.

Smooth, so smooth.
Edges all worn away from time.
Jagged little scars that weren't worth the lines
I fed U to keep U from finding out.

deep..U R sooooooo very DEEP
jm

 she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough,
and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in.
...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me...
and I feel like somethings gonna give...
and I'm a little bit angry.
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4 posted 04-01-2000 01:21 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

serenity,
Thanks. I guess this held up better than I expected.

devina,
Merci. Sleep deprivation brings out weird things in me -- of course, it also keeps me totally unguarded, so any barriers I might invariably put up in some of my more obtuse poems are completely obliterated.

JM,
You're right, that IS funny.

Mike
 
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