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The Awakening

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Dark Angel
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0 posted 03-31-2000 02:16 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Dark Angel


You move
through me
rapidly
like
the sweet fresh
body of river
cleansing
revitalising
awakening
earth moving
I feel you all
around
dancing trees
rolling rocks
twisting breeze

and I sway
uncontrollably
trying to resist
the intense force
and waves
of you

I shall not
for I cannot
so take me...

I'm yours


Dark Angel
2000



 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


© Copyright 2000 Dark Angel - All Rights Reserved
bobbycat
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1 posted 03-31-2000 02:24 AM       View Profile for bobbycat   Email bobbycat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bobbycat

Wow......very powerful stuff, DA.....great poem!  I really enjoyed it.

Bobbycat =^..^=


 ~~Blessed Be!~~

Lily B
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2 posted 03-31-2000 02:27 AM       View Profile for Lily B   Email Lily B   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Lily B's Home Page   View IP for Lily B

Very nice! And yes, it's powerful.

I especially like:
"I shall not
for I cannot
so take me...."

serenity blaze
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3 posted 03-31-2000 03:19 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

This sizzles.  Very, very, nicely said...
Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley


4 posted 03-31-2000 09:08 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

This is a good one!  
Dark Angel
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5 posted 03-31-2000 06:45 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Bobbycat, Lily B, serenity and Sharon so glad you all enjoyed it   Thank you for taking the time to read   and for your lovely replies.  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Denise
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6 posted 03-31-2000 09:39 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

WOW! This is very moving, Dark Angel! Very lovely!

Denise
hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 03-31-2000 09:47 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Very nice poem DA  
Cerenity
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8 posted 04-01-2000 09:27 AM       View Profile for Cerenity   Email Cerenity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerenity

Hi Dark Angel,

I really liked this, you are so good at short but powerful poems, I have not  learned this wonderful way of writing yet.

Thank you,  Cerenity
WhtDove
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9 posted 04-01-2000 10:12 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

I do believe you've found your slice of poetic pie! You write these sooooooo good!
kitkat
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10 posted 04-01-2000 05:45 PM       View Profile for kitkat   Email kitkat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kitkat

Wow is all I can say. This was a powerful and beautiful piece. Lucky is the person who made you feel this way.
Parker
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11 posted 04-01-2000 08:01 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Dark ........... all I gotta say is WOW, this one really hit me.

Parker
JamesMichael
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12 posted 04-01-2000 08:09 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Dark Angel this just blew me away with all the visual thoughts...looks like right now you are someones precious angel.  James
Butterflies_dont_cry
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Dark Angel,
This is beautiful....I'm in awe of the heart that you write with. You've done a magnificent job!!
Elizabeth Santos
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14 posted 04-01-2000 08:27 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Excellent, Dark Angel
Beautifully written
Liz
Severn
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15 posted 04-01-2000 10:45 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Soul Sis...

You have done a beautiful job here.
And that someone is definitely lucky to have you in their life.

K

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
SorrowsMystress
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I'm a wanderer, a nomad...I do


16 posted 04-01-2000 10:58 PM       View Profile for SorrowsMystress   Email SorrowsMystress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SorrowsMystress

WOW!....lemme just say that again.... WOW! That was the type of poem that captures the soul and leaves the mind numb. Great use of words and feelings. A great inspiration. Wonderful job!
Dark Angel
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17 posted 04-05-2000 07:47 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Thank you so much Denise  
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Ruth honey, thanks dear  
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Cerenity, Hi, thanks for your lovely reply and compliment.
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Angel, thanks sweetie, I appreciate your comment.  
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kitkat, Thank you so much  
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hey Parker, really hit you ey? hmmm well I'm glad   Thank you.
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James thank you for your lovely reply.  
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B_D_C hey wow thank you so much.
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Elizabeth, thank you so much  
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Kamla Thanks sweetie so much  
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SorrowMystress, so glad you enjoyed Thank you  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Lone Wolf
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18 posted 04-05-2000 07:51 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Heavy stuff DA!!  Great poem....enjoyed it.  Sometimes it is almost impossible to resist.  

 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith
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