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Dark Angel
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0 posted 2000-03-31 02:16 AM



You move
through me
rapidly
like
the sweet fresh
body of river
cleansing
revitalising
awakening
earth moving
I feel you all
around
dancing trees
rolling rocks
twisting breeze

and I sway
uncontrollably
trying to resist
the intense force
and waves
of you

I shall not
for I cannot
so take me...

I'm yours


Dark Angel
2000



 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



© Copyright 2000 Dark Angel - All Rights Reserved
bobbycat
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since 2000-02-06
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1 posted 2000-03-31 02:24 AM


Wow......very powerful stuff, DA.....great poem!  I really enjoyed it.

Bobbycat =^..^=


 ~~Blessed Be!~~


Lily B
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since 2000-03-31
Posts 91
Auburn, IN, US
2 posted 2000-03-31 02:27 AM


Very nice! And yes, it's powerful.

I especially like:
"I shall not
for I cannot
so take me...."


serenity blaze
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Posts 27738

3 posted 2000-03-31 03:19 AM


This sizzles.  Very, very, nicely said...
Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
4 posted 2000-03-31 09:08 AM


This is a good one!  
Dark Angel
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5 posted 2000-03-31 06:45 PM


Bobbycat, Lily B, serenity and Sharon so glad you all enjoyed it   Thank you for taking the time to read   and for your lovely replies.  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



Denise
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6 posted 2000-03-31 09:39 PM


WOW! This is very moving, Dark Angel! Very lovely!

Denise

hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 2000-03-31 09:47 PM


Very nice poem DA  
Cerenity
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8 posted 2000-04-01 09:27 AM


Hi Dark Angel,

I really liked this, you are so good at short but powerful poems, I have not  learned this wonderful way of writing yet.

Thank you,  Cerenity

WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
9 posted 2000-04-01 10:12 AM


I do believe you've found your slice of poetic pie! You write these sooooooo good!
kitkat
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since 2000-01-11
Posts 878
Nova Scotia
10 posted 2000-04-01 05:45 PM


Wow is all I can say. This was a powerful and beautiful piece. Lucky is the person who made you feel this way.
Parker
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ON
11 posted 2000-04-01 08:01 PM


Dark ........... all I gotta say is WOW, this one really hit me.

Parker

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
12 posted 2000-04-01 08:09 PM


Dark Angel this just blew me away with all the visual thoughts...looks like right now you are someones precious angel.  James
Butterflies_dont_cry
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13 posted 2000-04-01 08:15 PM



Dark Angel,
This is beautiful....I'm in awe of the heart that you write with. You've done a magnificent job!!

Elizabeth Santos
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Pennsylvania
14 posted 2000-04-01 08:27 PM


Excellent, Dark Angel
Beautifully written
Liz

Severn
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15 posted 2000-04-01 10:45 PM


Soul Sis...

You have done a beautiful job here.
And that someone is definitely lucky to have you in their life.

K

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath

SorrowsMystress
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16 posted 2000-04-01 10:58 PM


WOW!....lemme just say that again.... WOW! That was the type of poem that captures the soul and leaves the mind numb. Great use of words and feelings. A great inspiration. Wonderful job!
Dark Angel
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17 posted 2000-04-05 07:47 PM


Thank you so much Denise  
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Ruth honey, thanks dear  
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Cerenity, Hi, thanks for your lovely reply and compliment.
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Angel, thanks sweetie, I appreciate your comment.  
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kitkat, Thank you so much  
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hey Parker, really hit you ey? hmmm well I'm glad   Thank you.
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James thank you for your lovely reply.  
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B_D_C hey wow thank you so much.
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Elizabeth, thank you so much  
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Kamla Thanks sweetie so much  
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SorrowMystress, so glad you enjoyed Thank you  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



Lone Wolf
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Lansing, MI USA
18 posted 2000-04-05 07:51 PM


Heavy stuff DA!!  Great poem....enjoyed it.  Sometimes it is almost impossible to resist.  

 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

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