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~Do I, Do You?~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Do you even see me, are you even remotely aware. It's like you look right thru me, Empty eyes, Blank stare. Do you even hear me, if only one single word I say. When did you lose all track of me, Do you even know I've lost my way. Do you even feel me, am I still inside of you. There was a time when I could tell for sure, there was a time when I once knew. Do you even love me, can your heart still share. How did we even get to here, and do we even care. Janet Marie * Im not sure if this is a poem or just another one of my "emotional outbursts" put to rhyme...but I felt a damn site better after I wrote it. (smile) and isnt that the reason we write. she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough, and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in. ...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me... and I feel like somethings gonna give... and I'm a little bit angry. matchbox20 |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
In reply, may I? Here's one that depressed me so much, I couldn't post it... Haiku Portrait we sat together staring at the lemon tree silence building walls My heart is SO with you, JM....YOU take care. much love. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
serenity...you may, you may... thank you for that haiku... it was poeticly perfect. ya know what, i gotta learn how to write one of those...but Im too damn long winded to be so brief *L* thank you sweets...seems like we read each others minds and hearts these days... take care, jm she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough, and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in. ...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me... and I feel like somethings gonna give... and I'm a little bit angry. matchbox20 |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ This is terribly sad. My heart sends *HUGS* And if you feel better ...... I feel better !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Janet Marie....yep, that's what poetry is all about and this little piece hits on a lot of truth. I think many of us feel that one can "love me or hate me but at least acknowledge that I am". You expressed the "invisible man (or woman) theory very well. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
.gif) Dear JM* You hit the feeling on this one sister of mine. Wow, sometimes it feels like the one that they depend on everything is just noticed when it's not done....did I say that????? lol yeppers cuz you already knew it Do you even hear me, if only one single word I say. When did you lose all track of me, Do you even know I've lost my way. This especially hit home...you are an amazing woman J.M.!! Thank you for sharing another part of your soul. **AWHs** |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Margie-girl I feel much better with a hug from you..how could I not  thank you sweetie. Balladeer, thank you for the understanding...yes, INVISIBLE...a quality that should be left for ghosts and comic book super heroes. Butterfly...I know...you know...wish we didnt know...thank you for the angel hugs and for always maing me smile... butterfly kisses to you love ya! thanks guys, jm she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough, and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in. ...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me... and I feel like somethings gonna give... and I'm a little bit angry. matchbox20 |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I've felt this so many times! And we do feel better after we get rid of those kinds of feelings!  |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
It's a poem, its emotional and its good. Lay those feelings out there anytime you wish, we will handle them tenderly. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Janet Marie, This was wonderful! As with all your poems, I can truly feel the emotions and messages behind the words. "sunshine girl" just thought she'd let ya know she thinks you are quite wonderful. And this person you speak of is a damn fool! And yes that is the EXACT reason we write. I am glad that it made you feel better. You deserve to be very happy. Take care, and love ya.. AMY ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Poet D,I wish so many of us didnt relate, thank you for your understanding....and for always reading and encouraging...your great. Danny...you are SO sweet...ya make me smile, thanks...right about now a little tenderness goes a long way, Amy-girl...your right he is a damn fool LOL and I'll be happy to tell him ya said so LOL just kidding...you know how it goes...if ya didnt laugh yu'd cry...well I try to laugh and let my poems do the crying for me... HEY...that sounds like a line in a poem HHHMMMM inspired again (SMILE) thanks for the love sweets take care, jm she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough, and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in. ...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me... and I feel like somethings gonna give... and I'm a little bit angry. matchbox20 |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Oh! It is definately poetry. Heartfelt emotional, and a little close to home for me. Great work. It is certainly the reason that I write Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien |
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