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~Do I, Do You?~

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Janet Marie
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0 posted 03-31-2000 01:14 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Janet Marie

Do you even see me,
are you even remotely aware.
It's like you look right thru me,
Empty eyes, Blank stare.

Do you even hear me,
if only one single word I say.
When did you lose all track of me,
Do you even know I've lost my way.

Do you even feel me,
am I still inside of you.
There was a time when I could tell for sure,
there was a time when I once knew.

Do you even love me,
can your heart still share.
How did we even get to here,
and do we even care.

Janet Marie


* Im not sure if this is a poem or just another one of my "emotional outbursts" put to rhyme...but I felt a damn site better after I wrote it. (smile)
and isnt that the reason we write.


 she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough,
and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in.
...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me...
and I feel like somethings gonna give...
and I'm a little bit angry.
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serenity blaze
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1 posted 03-31-2000 01:23 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

In reply, may I?

Here's one that depressed me so much, I couldn't post it...

    Haiku Portrait

we sat together
staring at the lemon tree
silence building walls

My heart is SO with you, JM....YOU take care.
much love.
Janet Marie
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2 posted 03-31-2000 01:30 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

serenity...you may, you may...
thank you for that haiku...
it was poeticly perfect.
ya know what, i gotta learn how to write one of those...but Im too damn long winded to be so brief *L*

thank you sweets...seems like we read each others minds and hearts these days...
take care, jm

 she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough,
and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in.
...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me...
and I feel like somethings gonna give...
and I'm a little bit angry.
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3 posted 03-31-2000 01:32 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

JanetMarie~
This is terribly sad.
My heart sends *HUGS*
And if you feel better ......
I feel better !  
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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4 posted 03-31-2000 01:37 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Janet Marie....yep, that's what poetry is all about and this little piece hits on a lot of truth. I think many of us feel that one can "love me or hate me but at least acknowledge that I am". You expressed the "invisible man (or woman) theory very well.
Butterflies_dont_cry
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5 posted 03-31-2000 05:38 AM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry


Dear JM*
You hit the feeling on this one sister of mine.  Wow, sometimes it feels like the one that they depend on everything is just noticed when it's not done....did I say that????? lol yeppers cuz you already knew it  
Do you even hear me,
if only one single word I say.
When did you lose all track of me,
Do you even know I've lost my way.

This especially hit home...you are an amazing woman J.M.!!  Thank you for sharing another part of your soul.
**AWHs**
Janet Marie
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6 posted 03-31-2000 09:04 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Margie-girl I feel much better with a hug from you..how could I not  
thank you sweetie.

Balladeer, thank you for the understanding...yes, INVISIBLE...a quality that should be left for ghosts and comic book super heroes.

Butterfly...I know...you know...wish we didnt know...thank you for the angel hugs and for always maing me smile...
butterfly kisses to you  
love ya!

thanks guys, jm

 she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough,
and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in.
...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me...
and I feel like somethings gonna give...
and I'm a little bit angry.
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Poet deVine
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7 posted 03-31-2000 09:25 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I've felt this so many times! And we do feel better after we get rid of those kinds of feelings!  
Danny Holloway
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8 posted 03-31-2000 12:37 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

It's a poem, its emotional and its good.
Lay those feelings out there anytime you wish, we will handle them tenderly.
Aimster
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9 posted 03-31-2000 03:53 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

Janet Marie,

This was wonderful! As with all your poems, I can truly feel the emotions and messages behind the words. "sunshine girl" just thought she'd let ya know she thinks you are quite wonderful. And this person you speak of is a damn fool! And yes that is the EXACT reason we write. I am glad that it made you feel better. You deserve to be very happy.

Take care, and love ya..

AMY  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
Janet Marie
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10 posted 03-31-2000 08:52 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Poet D,I wish so many of us didnt relate, thank you for your understanding....and for always reading and encouraging...your great.

Danny...you are SO sweet...ya make me smile,
thanks...right about now a little tenderness goes a long way,  

Amy-girl...your right he is a damn fool LOL and I'll be happy to tell him ya said so LOL
just kidding...you know how it goes...if ya didnt laugh yu'd cry...well I try to laugh and let my poems do the crying for me...
HEY...that sounds like a line in a poem  HHHMMMM inspired again (SMILE)
thanks for the love sweets
take care, jm


 she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough,
and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in.
...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me...
and I feel like somethings gonna give...
and I'm a little bit angry.
matchbox20
EagleOne
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Between a laugh and a tear...


11 posted 04-01-2000 02:53 AM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

Oh! It is definately poetry. Heartfelt emotional, and a little close to home for me. Great work.  It is certainly the reason that I write  

 Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien
 
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