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Sven
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0 posted 2000-03-31 01:06 AM


Take my hand, love of my heart,
I've got the map, I know where to start
We start with two people, you and me
Where will we end up?
          We'll just have to wait and see

Walk with me, song of my soul
You make me complete, you make my life whole
Moving with me in harmony, life's gentle song
How long will this last?
          Hopefully, throughout my whole life long

Together we'll be, light of my life
You rescued my spirit, taken me away from this strife
Now that you're back in my life, I'll never let go
How much can I thank you?
          More my love, than you'll ever know.

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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2000-03-31 01:25 AM


oh Sven, you make us swoon...
this is a very sweet and romantic poem of dedication and promise...
just perfect for that songbird.  
take care, jm

 she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough,
and I'm a little bit rusty, and I feel like my head is caving in.
...and I dont know if I've ever been really loved by a hand thats touched me...
and I feel like somethings gonna give...
and I'm a little bit angry.
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2 posted 2000-03-31 01:28 AM


Ohh-- this was sweet~
I love this one~
Marie~


 "Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind;
And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard



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3 posted 2000-03-31 01:42 AM


Sven, your poetry lately has been so much like music...lyrical and sweet! This is very good!
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4 posted 2000-03-31 02:07 AM


Sven, you old softie, you. This is very touching....nice work.
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5 posted 2000-03-31 02:32 AM


You are such a darling man!  Melting hearts all over the forum...  (Just love the musical allusion, too...)  Sweetie-pie!
Marina
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6 posted 2000-03-31 11:16 AM


OK...I running out of kleenex boxes!!

Marina

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7 posted 2000-04-02 04:36 PM


Sven....excellent words and emotion in this one.  Here is my hand...can we walk??  What do you say??  I am game if you are....

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JamesMichael
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8 posted 2000-04-02 05:16 PM


Sven I liked the thoughts and the style you used here.  The way you ask a question and than aswered it at the end of each paragraph.   James
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9 posted 2000-04-02 05:17 PM


Very romantic--I like the metaphors used in here.

Elizabeth


 "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!"
-The Crucible


hsystems
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10 posted 2000-04-02 05:18 PM


Sven - nice work, Gentleman Poet!  Living proof that chivalry is not dead.


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Corinne
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11 posted 2000-04-02 06:11 PM


beautiful!

Corinne

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12 posted 2000-04-02 07:36 PM


This is very lovely, Sven!

Denise

Isis
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13 posted 2000-04-02 07:44 PM


WOnderful words and feelings here Sven, anyone would be a fool not to take your offered hand!!  

 There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Nan
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14 posted 2000-04-02 08:11 PM


Our incorrigible romantic at his best!!..
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15 posted 2000-04-02 09:17 PM


Sven~
Your romantic heart is very much
on display in this render.
Very moving.
~*Marge*~


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