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jfreak
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0 posted 03-30-2000 11:24 PM       View Profile for jfreak   Email jfreak   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for jfreak

“Whipped”            March 30, 2000

Beaten and bleeding here on your threshing floor,
I feel as if I am your ever-present whore.
Take as you please all that you want.
Leaving me helpless, empty, and distraught.
Oh how I wish to gain my freedom from this tyranny,
From the talons of you, my tormentor, who have no sympathy.
My hated lover, you defiantly ignore my every plea.
Yet, still you’re here, beating, pulling, taking everything of me.

Even up until my very last breath.

Then a memory from a time long before
Bursts open my heart’s lonely bound door.
I had ignored, that incessant knocking that I had heard,
But in my last breath, I opened what I had never wanted to unfurl.
Yet, what I now feel is as nothing ever in my dreams
My heart is growing pure and washed away clean
No longer do I feel the talons and teeth ripping and grappling at my soul.
All I feel is love, peace, and grace making me once again whole.

It will be a longer walk though, to unify my flesh.

© Copyright 2000 jfreak - All Rights Reserved
WhtDove
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1 posted 03-30-2000 11:32 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

WOW! What a surprise to see you! Good surprise it is!  The tormentor sure does have no mercy...Thank God for His grace and His willingness to always pick us back up!

Great to see you posting again!  

It's been a while and I'm trying to remember...was it Moses?

[This message has been edited by WhtDove (edited 03-30-2000).]
CherylLynnMckee
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2 posted 03-30-2000 11:33 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

ouch painful poem..love the ending..nicely done!

 
jfreak
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3 posted 03-31-2000 12:15 AM       View Profile for jfreak   Email jfreak   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jfreak

Hey Whtdove,

yeah my nickname is Moses.  Funny how people never forget that!  Thanks, I just got into the writing mood tonight and this came out.  You know how I am.  Lately I haven't been in the mood for writing poetry.  I have written a fairly descent short story though.  If you want to read it, email me, and I will reply it back to you.  Thanks for the encouragment.

Chryl,

Thank you

Jfreak
Nan
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4 posted 03-31-2000 07:24 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Hey, BC.... nice to see ya... This is a a pretty intense work - with a great finale...  We'd like to read your short stories too, ya know.. That's what we've got a Prose forum for.

Don't be such a stranger round these parts..
Poet deVine
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5 posted 03-31-2000 09:13 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Wonderful use of words in this, sir. It is nice to 'read' you again.  
WhtDove
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since 07-22-99
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6 posted 03-31-2000 11:04 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Yep, I'll email you, but you should post your story in Prose too!  
jfreak
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7 posted 04-01-2000 03:46 AM       View Profile for jfreak   Email jfreak   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jfreak

Good to go everyone.  I will definately put the story in Prose.  Within the next two days or so.  I will let you guys know.  Thanks for the encouraging words all you gave for this poem.

Jfreak
StarPryncess17
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8 posted 06-14-2000 05:46 PM       View Profile for StarPryncess17   Email StarPryncess17   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit StarPryncess17's Home Page   View IP for StarPryncess17

Well, this poem is very nicely written! It's heart breaking, but the fact that you found your salvation in the end makes it all so wonderful. I suppose a good word for it would be bittersweet...? well, I THINK I'm pretty sure of who this about. am I right? keep posting! Hope to see some more soon! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

 "Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves."
"Bleeding hearts release tears of fire"
"work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last"
JamesMichael
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9 posted 07-03-2000 08:05 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Excellent writing...James
 
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