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Can You And I?

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Lost Dreamer
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Can You And I?

Can you begin at the base
of my mountain
slowly climb till reaching the cliff
at the utmost top?
If I suggested you jump would you,
could you,
or would you hold onto what you
started with till the end?

Could you deep sea dive the depths
of my ocean
concurring the schools of fish
currently in control?
Would you drown if my oceans depth
was to deep
or would you rise to the surface for air
now and then?

Can you diagnose and repair my computer's
main frame
replacing mother board and ram memory
gone bad?
Will it require erasing all the memories
of the past
to reboot and start my repaired main frame
all over again?

Can a locksmith you become unlocking
stubborn doors
or are keys a hindrance to you
preferring openness?
If I locked myself out would you
come rescue me
or would your priorities leave me
finding other measures?

Would you allow me to scale your mountain
memorizing every ridge
bungee jump within your security till daylight
turns to night?
Could I reach the peak and still see
the beautiful valley below
through eyes that embrace nature
piece by piece?

Can I surf the tides of your ocean
starting with the highest
as it's intense wave caresses
my imagination?
Could I savor the lowest tide caressing
the evening
relaxed in the softness of the sandbar
below the water's rule?

Can I play on the keys of your computer
make them come alive
with the touch of my fingertips
creating romance?
Can my computer and your computer
network together
creating a powerful mega force
no one can corrupt?

Can I become a master key
in your life
unlocking all the closed doors
so freedom can reign?
Can I use my key to unlock
our fantasy's
making way for two single worlds
to become one?

Can you and I climb the tallest mountain
together hand in hand
guiding each other through the journey
like there's no tomorrow?
Can you and I hang glide over the valley
below our sky line
floating away further into our destiny
forever together?

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hoot_owl_rn
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Nice poem Gloria  
Lost Dreamer
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2 posted 03-30-2000 10:47 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Ruth: Thank You very much.
Poet deVine
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3 posted 03-31-2000 12:57 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Very good! I love how you tied this together..he..you...the two...good..  
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4 posted 03-31-2000 01:44 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

LostDreamer~
This is an intricately woven tapestry
of feeling.
Absolutely stunning.
I've read it three times already ...
and I just love it.
Very, very creative ...
and I might venture to say ...
a piece from the depth of your soul.
~*Marge*~


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5 posted 03-31-2000 01:54 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Wow, Gloria! I am really impressed by this one. You took great thoughts and wove them together expertly to create a piece of writing to be proud of, for sure.

Can my computer and your computer network together? Well, I've got the Mac if you've got the Gateway  
Lost Dreamer
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Poet deVine: Thank You very much, it was interesting to write.

Marge: Thank You, thank you, thank you, I'm glad you loved it, and yes it came from the deepest of my soul. These would be my thoughts if I were looking today.

Balladeer:Thank You deeply, when you tell me one of my poems are good I take it to heart cause of the talented man you are, you brought a smile to my face Sir. I think a Mac would stumble all over a Hewlett, no Gateway yet.
tracie66
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7 posted 03-31-2000 08:58 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

L.D
A most beautiful piece to read, your imagery and flow was magnificent.
Truly most wonderful
Tracie
Lost Dreamer
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Tracie: Wow, Thank You very much for your kind words, glad you enjoyed.  
ESP
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9 posted 03-31-2000 12:14 PM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

This is a great poem! I really enjoyed reading it.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie

Lost Dreamer
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Lizzie: Thank You very much, glad you enjoyed
doreen peri
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11 posted 03-31-2000 08:12 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

Gloria, I think this is one of the very best pieces you've written. You've painted a picture with words interweaving your feelings with events and imagery. Nicely done, my friend.

-doreen
Denise
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WOW! This is a fantastic piece of writing, Gloria! Absolutely wonderful!

Denise
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13 posted 04-01-2000 01:42 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Doreen: Thank you so much, you know I would not be where I am today writing if it were not for you, and your honesty.  

Denise:Wow, I sparked a WOW from you I think you may have just ignited my inspiration, Oh no, everyone's gonna run for the hills now...LOL
Thank You Denise, I am just crazy right now, I'm in this awesome fabulous mood that I wish would never leave and it's totally natural, I wish I could bottle it for those other times...LOL  
 
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