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Inner Storms

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Nicole
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0 posted 03-30-2000 06:13 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Nicole

A snow storm rages across the lands
A blizzard in hues of whites and blues
No life can survive this storm’s rough hands
Gripping and tearing – shredding – all within view
Barren and cold lie miles of death
As far as the eye can see, then that much more
Impossible to encompass the very breadth
Of vitality once felt, and loved, now deplored

The storm rages on ‘round a fortress made of steel
Forged and cast in Hell, each brick carefully laid
Bells toll an eternity in melancholy peals
Giving voice to all things dead – unswayed
No windows cut, no doors lead in or out
Walls a’bastioned scrape the bruised, black sky
Around each tower, wraithlike clouds writhe about
As the solitary clogs of time clunk slowly by

Breaking through the clouds with a deafening roar
Shines a beam of light to rival a hundred suns
Its warmth spreading, caressing – melting the storm
A spring-like breeze healing all hurt – all shunned
Walls a’ bastioned come crashing to the ground
Through clearing dust, center-most, can be seen a hole
In the earth that holds a heart now unbound
Because you reached out tenderly – and touched my soul.



 May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

--Author Unknown
© Copyright 2000 Nicole Adams - All Rights Reserved
CherylLynnMckee
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1 posted 03-30-2000 06:17 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

Lovely poem..well written..enjoyed it much.

 
Local Rebel
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2 posted 03-30-2000 06:20 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Wow , such violent vivid imagery!  I think you captured the intensity of the wrath and the healing...

reminds me once again og Gibran's prophet

'the deeper sorrow carves into our souls the more joy we may contain'
Poet deVine
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3 posted 03-31-2000 12:43 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Oh, this is good! I love it....I can see that old heart melting now...  
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4 posted 03-31-2000 12:51 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Satiate~
Nothing calms the storms like a tender touch.

'Because you reached out tenderly – and touched my soul.'

Beautifully done.
~*Marge*~


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Michael
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5 posted 03-31-2000 02:10 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Beautiful poem, satiate.  Great imagery...  I can relate well to the new found warmth and the crashing of the walls around you.  The ending nearly got a tear out of me... Loved it!

Michael
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6 posted 03-31-2000 02:15 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Imagery second to none, Satiate. The storm, the fortress and the appearance of hope and deliverance...this poem has it all, Well done.
Nicole
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7 posted 03-31-2000 10:54 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

CLM:  Thank you!

LR: Coming from the imagery king, that is quite a compliment...thankee kindly, sir.  Wise words too, but sometimes we're left wondering if there is enough joy to fill such great carves. Yanno?

PdV: Hey...are you trying to tell me I'm old?!  hehe    I'll attribute this old heart melting to the Spring weather outside!

Marge:  You said it true, dear.  Nothing indeed.

Michael, seems we relate well to a lot of things...prolly why we're friends!   Hey, and no tearing up...this is a happy poem!

Balladeer, Thank you very much, your compliments always leave me blushing! lol  
Danny Holloway
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8 posted 03-31-2000 12:33 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Please let me echo the nice comments already expressed.
Very nice writing!
hoot_owl_rn
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9 posted 04-01-2000 10:19 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Beautiful  
Alicat
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10 posted 04-03-2000 09:14 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

Satiate, you astound me.  Perhaps, if you can get past the logical lumberjack inside, you should let the Muse breathe a bit more freely, for, by this example, you have shown once more what a simple breath can do.  

Perhaps soon, if you happen to be inflicted with insomnia, we could meet for coffee and chat freely once more.  

Alicat the Persnikitty
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