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In Your Eyes"--My Version

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Sven
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0 posted 03-30-2000 12:25 AM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Sven

"I get lost in your eyes"
     I'm taken to a place where the sun never rises
     and the stars always shine
"And I feel my spirits rise"
     My wings are open and I'm soaring through the air
     the earth below me without a care
"And soar like the wind"
     Carrying me away from this place that I know
     to your side so my love can show
"Is it love that I am in?"
     A love that is pure and bold and true
     this is the love that I've found with you

"I don't mind not knowing what I'm headed for"
     This is the place that I've always longed to go
     and I can't wait to see what you've got to show
"You can take me to the skies"
     To a love that's new, a love unknown
     a love that's just so easy to show
"It's like being lost in heaven"
     And when we reach that beautiful place
     we'll finally be together arm in arm and face to face
"When I am lost. . . in your eyes"
     The eyes I've searched for my whole life through
     and I'm so glad I found them in you

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Isis
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1 posted 03-30-2000 12:34 AM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Never seen such beautiful twists and added meanings to one of my favourite songs.
A gift for me at least...thanks Sven  

 There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)


Marina
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2 posted 03-30-2000 01:51 AM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

A beautiful version at that!

Marina
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3 posted 03-30-2000 03:00 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Sven
This is a beautiful version
The words so tranquil and meaningful
Tracie  


 Keep all the windows of your mind open
Anne Rooks
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4 posted 03-30-2000 09:02 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

I love the song and your take on it did it justice by far  
Lone Wolf
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5 posted 03-30-2000 10:57 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Sven....very nice work!!  Interesting form incorporating lines from the song with your own.  New love is special, isn't it?  

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6 posted 03-30-2000 11:01 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Sven, a very interesting form, as Ruth said. Quite wonderful, really.

~ Claire
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7 posted 03-30-2000 11:36 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

I think I like your version better..quite lovely!

 
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8 posted 03-31-2000 01:03 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

In your soul is the singer of poetry...Sven this is wonderful.... just lovely..
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