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CherylLynnMckee
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0 posted 03-29-2000 05:37 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for CherylLynnMckee



The cold winds blow in silent fields..
Where death hangs low over fallen souls..
Where will the stooped men dig..
all the needed holes..
Well worn shovels..
Bloodied hands..
Aching backs..
The ground claims them all lovingly back..
Quietly covering in time..
all the muddy tracks..
The barest facts left to be discovered..
That war and death..
had ever came to rest..
Inside these peacful fields..

 
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PoeticKnight
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1 posted 03-29-2000 05:54 PM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoeticKnight

The ground claims them all lovingly back..
Quietly covering in time..
all the muddy tracks..

Cool lines. I like this poem. I am a sucker for dark stuff, done a little differently, and with style.
CherylLynnMckee
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2 posted 03-29-2000 06:00 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

Thanks JML my first dark post here..didn't know how it was going to go over..your kind words are much appreciated.

 
Mike
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3 posted 03-29-2000 06:47 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Sheesh.. I didn't think it was dark...
kind of enjoyed it... well done...
Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 03-29-2000 09:01 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Cheryl,
Enjoyed the post, you write well.
hoot_owl_rn
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Excellent post Cheryl...the ending sums it up nicely  
TerryW
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6 posted 03-30-2000 11:25 AM       View Profile for TerryW   Email TerryW   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TerryW's Home Page   View IP for TerryW

Very Well Done, Cheryl!
  It wasn't really dark, but more starkly truthful!



 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.
Rex Allen McCoy
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7 posted 03-30-2000 11:49 AM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

This barely touches the edge of dark
well done Cheryl
see you in the twilight zone

Rex}>{{{{o>


 I'm not ugly!
I'm just visually challenged!



CherylLynnMckee
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8 posted 03-30-2000 12:02 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

Thanks everyone...this one is diferent
than I usually write...debated on
posting it or not..So your words are
very reassuring to me..Thanks again.
Plus can anyone tell me why when I get
an e-mail saying a certain person
replyed on my poem but then when I look
it didn't show up?

 
Rex Allen McCoy
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For the same reason that when there is someone standing behind you and you turn and look to find there is no one there
... twilight zone ...
your being watched

Rex}>{{{{o>
Denise
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10 posted 03-30-2000 12:15 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Intense poem, Cheryl. I like it!  

Rex - you crack me up!  

Cheryl, it is probably just your browser....just click your refresh button then you should be able to see all the recent posts!
CherylLynnMckee
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11 posted 03-30-2000 12:21 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

Can someone tell me why the last 3 posts from people on this poem doesnt show up on here? This is the third time I have tried to post on my own poem..they were not showing up either.

 
CherylLynnMckee
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12 posted 03-30-2000 12:47 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

LOL at Rex....I was starting to wonder if I was being erased..lol..Thanks to you all for helping me out I am not a real bright when it comes to problems with my unit....thats what my sons for. And he's at school..lol.

 
Collins
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13 posted 03-30-2000 08:32 PM       View Profile for Collins   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Collins

I've been trying to send you an letter but it doesn't seem to want to get throught!!!

My e mail is marks_fanclub@hotmail.com


I'm sorry about the dodgy name!!!

Anyway i hope that there will i want everyone to get on!!!!

(Please i only want you to answer my e mail!!!  Once you know it, please destroy it!!! 'cos i don't like to give away of my feelings on the matter.
Martie
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14 posted 03-30-2000 09:08 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

This poem was so visual and full of stark reality...and very well done.
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