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Parker
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0 posted 2000-03-29 03:53 PM


I Wished Upon A Falling Star

I wished upon a falling star          
And it fell right on my head          
I stumbled to the bathroom door        
But it was the garden shed            
                                      
I fiercely fought the Kracken beasts    
Entangled in their den                
Fangs and claws and skinny necks      
I thrashed and kicked them dead        
                                      
I stumbled out and ran for life        
How'd they get in my shed?          
Down the street, for haven sought      
And hid behind yon garden rocks        
                                      
I must have warped through time itself
For I heard a maiden call,            
Hark, who hides in frigging rocks      
You've crushed my treasured holly hocks

With mustard of the bravest knight            
I staggered through yon goldfish moot        
And fell upon your wooden boat,              
I must have scared your furry bunny boots,    
Cause they tried to kick me in the snoot.    
                                              
I woke up in the strangest place,            
Soft and frill with maiden's lace,            
Which held me tight, from neck to waist      
An ancient courting rite, I think I like.    
                                              
You dabbed and cleaned my tender wounds      
Wiped my head of dragon's goo                
Strange it smelled of diesel fuel,            
And your smile was for me I knew.....        
                                              
For days and days my fever ruled,            
You held my hand and kept me cool.            
When the madness was finally through          
The queen of my castle, became you.          
                                              
(I finally fixed the star on the roof, replace my smashed and broken rakes        
And locked the garden shed)                  
                                              

James Parker Haley  mar 29, 2000              





[This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 03-31-2000).]

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JamesMichael
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1 posted 2000-03-29 04:04 PM


Lots of funny madness to read..I liked the humor here and a romantic ending gives this a nice touch..dare I wish on a falling star?
James

CherylLynnMckee
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2 posted 2000-03-29 04:55 PM


lol...that was excellent..I am still smiling...I loved the ryhming and the flow.

 

Parker
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3 posted 2000-03-29 05:57 PM


James, thanks I was kind of in a crazy mood.

CherylLynnMckee, thank you glad you liked the read.

Parker

Marina
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4 posted 2000-03-30 02:17 PM


I think a lot of people must have missed this one first time around....so round two.

Marina

Rex Allen McCoy
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5 posted 2000-03-30 02:22 PM


This is pricless ... wish I could have seen it happen

Rex}>{{{{o>

Lucius Cade
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6 posted 2000-03-30 02:33 PM


I love the part about the bunny boots. lol
Great poem.


 Lucidity is the answer to all problems

Parker
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7 posted 2000-03-30 07:05 PM


Thanks Marina, Rex and Lucius Cade, I was having fun.

Parker

Corinne
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8 posted 2000-03-30 07:07 PM


Excellent, Parker!  A new side to you here.

Corinne

Parker
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9 posted 2000-03-30 07:13 PM


Core, I guess I have many sides, thanks.

Parker

Martie
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10 posted 2000-03-30 08:47 PM


Parker, you've raked in another smile here...wonderful sense of fun in this garden escapade, and I loved this line, "soft and frill with maiden's lace"
Lost Dreamer
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11 posted 2000-03-30 08:57 PM


This is great, what an imagination you have to unfold a journey such as this. I thank you for the smile from beginning to end  
Parker
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12 posted 2000-03-30 09:34 PM


Martie and Lost Dreamer thank you glad to make you smile.

parker

Meadowmuse
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13 posted 2000-03-30 09:35 PM


Parker, you're a silly star wisher!  

Loved this one!

~ Claire

Parker
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14 posted 2000-03-30 11:20 PM


Claire, silly is a silly does...........

thank you

Parker

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15 posted 2000-03-30 11:55 PM


ROFL!!! This is great imagination! Those Krackens can be tough! Love the way you medievaled yourself through it!!!
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16 posted 2000-03-31 12:27 PM


LMAO!!!! This was too cute James!!! Medievail and all...sounds like your kind of fairy tale me thinks!!!lol

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...


Poet deVine
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17 posted 2000-03-31 01:28 AM


Thank you for the laugh! I sure needed it tonight!  
Parker
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18 posted 2000-03-31 11:03 AM


Balladeer, devina, Poet deVine, thank you for reading, just remember to lock those garden sheds, ya never know whats in there.

Parker

RAM
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19 posted 2000-03-31 01:01 PM


LOL   Way cool, Parker.
Denise
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20 posted 2000-03-31 10:39 PM


Very entertaining, Parker!  

Denise

Parker
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21 posted 2000-04-01 07:51 PM


Denise, thank you, gotta play the court jester every once and awile, can't always be writing that romantic stuff, you'd all start gaging.

Parker

Elizabeth Santos
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22 posted 2000-04-01 08:00 PM


This is entertainment at its finest! Very captivating, and a great ending
Liz

Nan
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23 posted 2000-04-02 12:20 PM


Um... How'd you get into my shed?
I thought I had it well-guarded too...

Parker
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24 posted 2000-04-02 08:09 PM


Liz and Nan, thanks glad you liked.

Parker

Corazon
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25 posted 2000-04-03 04:26 PM


liked this, great job, sitting here with a smile on my face....and today, that means good job for you  
Parker
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26 posted 2000-04-03 06:50 PM


Corazon, thank you, a smile is a happy spirit.

Parker

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