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Silent Twin

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hoot_owl_rn
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Silent Twin

I watch you,
lying there,
tiny hands and feet moving;
reaching out in your sleep
as you dream
of life before life;
of breathless womb
and wordless safety.

In your dreams
do you see him?
He was the brother you knew
better than any other;
but yet, will never know
outside the quiet darkness
and calming waters
of my inland sea.

What secrets did he share
with you
as hearts formed together
and you floated
side by side?
What was he like,
this child of mine
that I only held
alive within me?

I watch you,
lying there,
restless in your sleep
and wonder
...do you grieve too?




 There are only two ages of people...living and dead and you all look about the right age to me    



[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 03-31-2000).]
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WhtDove
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1 posted 03-29-2000 10:27 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Ruth your writing is just so touching to the deepest parts of people. They just reach right in and grab you!
So many things going through my head, but I just can't think of something. I shall ponder this one, and if I can come up with something, I'll let ya know!
"Bonded In Womb?"  I'll keep trying.

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Local Rebel
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2 posted 03-29-2000 10:34 AM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Wow Hottie... from whence cometh your muse?  You have executed this powerfully my friend..

perhaps -- Dreaming the Lost Seraph?
TerryW
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3 posted 03-29-2000 10:40 AM       View Profile for TerryW   Email TerryW   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TerryW's Home Page   View IP for TerryW

Ruth,
     That was beautiful and touching, my friend.  I am at a loss for words.  I can't think of a suggestion now, but if I do, I will let you know.  

   ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
       and I am all the better for it.~
     Terry

 Terry A. Woodson, Jr.
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4 posted 03-29-2000 10:43 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is very touching and very beautifully written, Ruth! But of course! As for a title how about your last line.....Do You Grieve Too?

Denise
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5 posted 03-29-2000 10:46 AM       View Profile for Tess   Email Tess   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tess's Home Page   View IP for Tess

A very sad topic, but written so well....and yes.hard to think of a title that reflects all the ideas contained here...twins...but seperate.....together and yet not...and I'm no help with the title sorry...
Rex Allen McCoy
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Beautifully sad poem
you might try
"whisper his name ... bring me his hug"

Rex}>{{{{o>
hoot_owl_rn
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Whtdove...thank you so much  

Local Rebel...my muse hasn't been of much help of late, I am just happy to write something   Thank you so much

Terry....thank you for the kind thoughts  

Denise...I've considered that one too  

Tess...that's okay, thank you for the kind comment  

Rex...thank you

Another thought given by a friend I am seriously considering Silent Twin
Elizabeth Santos
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8 posted 03-29-2000 11:08 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Just Beautiful, Hoot

But the title is hard

"Soul Mate Lost"   (?)

"A Twin Without a Twin"  (?)

"The Other Half of Your Soul"  (?)

I can see why you had a hard time
But it is a beautiful piece
Liz

Now I see you just suggested "Silent Twin". That is perfect!
Liz

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Corazon
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I am terrible at titles...lol...so will just say this is beautiful, with or without a title....hugs  
Corinne
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The Twin.

WhtDove
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I think "Silent Twin" says it all!
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I agree with Silent Twin and once again Ruth you gave us all a masterpiece to admire.
Mike
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Wonderfully written and thoughts so perfectly expressed.
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Hoot Owl....where are the kleenex??  This was filled with warmth and longing.  Excellent job.  I think your muse is wide awake now.  As for title....how about Whispers in the Womb or The Other Side of Me?  This was really beautiful.  

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Ruth,

That's a tough question. It brought to mind many thoughts, but one especially of a time when we were there watching one of our own die. Not more than a few feet away lay another child maybe 3 or 4 and the doctor came in to tell the parents that she was terminal. The litle girl over heard and when the father came in ask her if she knew what the doctor meant. I shed a tear as the little girl in all innocence said she wondered why she was going to the terminal, he ask her if she knew what the terminal was. She said it's where people go to get on trains and go somewhere. I know I haven't said this well but I was just so taken back by your writing. Hope this sheds a little direction.

 
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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This is absolutely beautiful and heartrending.  I love the lines "will never know outside the quiet darkness and calming waters of my inland sea."
You are a master at telling a deep story in lovely poetry.  I too, like the title "Silent Twin".
JamesMichael
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Hoot Owl this touches me...you have such a wonderful compassionate style of writing...I like the title that was suggested...silent twin..and I offer a new one...shared grief...because I believe the entire family will share the grief.  I was talking to my new friend Maria a few days ago and she had mentioned to me that when she was pregnant she had triplets and only one lived.  I only talked to her a few minutes and I mostly listened and the conversation was about lots of different subjects..but she threw that in and this poem has me thinking about all the grief she must have felt over that...and I know it is still in her thoughts.  Life can be very sad sometimes...right...  James

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My Lady Hoot... as always your writing touches the heart.  You and your words are a treasure... especially on this sad and tender piece. As a nurse I'm sure you see a great deal of the harshness that life can deliver... that you manage to write of it in such a beautiful manner is a tribute to the quality of your soul.  Thank you for sharing all that you do.

Your's sincerely,

Andrew, Scott
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Hoot,
This is a breathtaking piece.  You write with the eyes of a nurse and a heart of an angel.  I'm sorry I'm without suggestions of a title, they are not my strong suit...lol. But even without the "perfect" title this is still and Amazing story.
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Hoot~
This is a touching piece.
I would suggest 'In Silence Weeping'
It's lovely, hon.
~*Marge*~



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Nan
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Very, very nice, Ruth... You have a unique sense and ability for putting some of life's rarest moments into words...

How about "Enwombed"....
hoot_owl_rn
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I just want to thank everyone for your beautiful and touching comments, for all your title suggestions and as always for you loving support of my work.
Lucky and Rosemary...I thought of you both when I posted this piece...thank you so much for your touching comments

As far as the title goes...still undecided, but I think I've narrowed it dow to two: "Silent Twin" or Nan's suggestion "Enwombed"
jfreak
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23 posted 03-31-2000 12:24 AM       View Profile for jfreak   Email jfreak   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jfreak

Hey Hooter,

very heartwrenching poem.  I loved it.  Very introspective on two different levels.  One of your mental level, two, on your physical level. (womb and all)  I just love it.  (picks up hanky and blows nose) very touching.

As for title.

"Missing brother"

Jfreak


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Ruth, through tears, as I read this beautiful poem of love and loss, I kept thinking ~


Hearts Undivided


I've known the loss and questioning you speak of, and I thank you for sharing this. My heart goes to yours today.
~ Claire
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