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Doomsday #8

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Enola
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0 posted 03-29-2000 10:10 AM       View Profile for Enola   Email Enola   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Enola

Sometimes it feels like you're the only one.
At that moment in time,
I can identify with this vision,
More than ever.
Sometimes I wish that you were here
So I could hear those words,
Feel the sincerity
And cry your tears.
Sometimes I would walk a thousand miles
Just to feel acception  
-But not move an inch.
I'm waving before blind eyes.

My expanding intelligence,
Experience and knowledge,
They can't explain a thing
But you do.
You unravel it all.
A towering glory:
A rotting mass.
Does it really matter?
I suppose it doesn't.

Does it.

Sometimes I expect you to walk into my room
But that wouldn't be you.
Just another cliche,
One more unexpected fall.


 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.
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hoot_owl_rn
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1 posted 03-29-2000 11:01 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Stinging ending that stays with the reader
Parker
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... the old black rum


2 posted 03-29-2000 11:57 AM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

very emotionally taut, well done.

Parker
CherylLynnMckee
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3 posted 03-29-2000 12:34 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

painful...but nicely done..your emotions really come threw.

 
infinat3 sadn3ss
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4 posted 03-29-2000 12:57 PM       View Profile for infinat3 sadn3ss   Email infinat3 sadn3ss   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for infinat3 sadn3ss

how i wish that you knew that i will always be here for you
Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley


5 posted 03-29-2000 07:05 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Excellently done. And I like your 'signature phrase' also.  
Enola
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6 posted 03-30-2000 04:09 AM       View Profile for Enola   Email Enola   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enola

It's good to know that the emotions come through.  Everything I'm writing about at the moment is negative, I'd hate it to seem that I was constantly whining.    
infinat3 sadn3ss - I already do, stop worrying bud.


 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.
mete out
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7 posted 03-30-2000 04:40 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***Enola,
You are not whining. All this writing is an on-going process. You are gradually cleansing yourself.
Your talent is one very rarely flaunted as well as you have done.
     ***
My expanding intelligence,
Experience and knowledge,
They can't explain a thing
But you do.
     ***

This was my favourite stanza. Although it feels that you can do nothing to help yourself, your day will come.
Trust me.
Love always, Louise   xxx


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


Enola
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8 posted 03-30-2000 09:41 AM       View Profile for Enola   Email Enola   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enola

mete out -

All this writing is an on-going process. You are gradually cleansing yourself. your day will come

I suppose this is true, I hope so, I am trying to stay positive about it all.  It's become a lot easier now I've started to let it out through poetry.
hoot_owl_rn - thank you for your continuing support, I'm really grateful.


 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.
JamesMichael
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9 posted 03-30-2000 03:55 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

This is interesting that you have labeled this Doomsday...someday you will write a poem called New Beginnings.   James
Enola
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10 posted 03-31-2000 04:28 AM       View Profile for Enola   Email Enola   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enola

James - you're right, someday I will.  

 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.
angelswing
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11 posted 04-14-2000 04:06 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelswing

Nice poem, It is as usual breath takingly good, I can see that you have put alot of emotion in this one .


 With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .
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