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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2000-03-29 03:20 AM


My mother dressed me in vests
For school age photographs.
She owned me.

My brother whipped my back
With a shining heavy doghouse chain.
He owned me.

My first friend cried
When I smashed his prize Coke bottle.
He owned me.

My teachers asked me what's it like
To be so tall, so different.
They owned me.

My father wouldn't hear
Of snapped pencils taking the place of work.
He owned me.

My cousin threw throwing knives
Into my onecoatslackpainted wall.
He owned me.

My books opened to worlds
So fanciful and distant it was all fake.
They owned me.

My god opened my eyes
To worlds so distant I were it were fake.
He owned me.

My girlfriend let me taste
Several flavors of fluttery lip gloss presses.
She owned me.

My home state drove me out
To a place I now call home and mean it.
It owns me.

My poetry shapes my insides
For you to be inspired to find different paths.
You own me.

© Copyright 2000 MPC - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
1 posted 2000-03-29 11:41 AM


Mike...Nobody owns us unless we allow them. This poem was very well crafted although it makes me a bit sad in its nature  
Corazon
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209

2 posted 2000-03-29 11:51 AM


I understand....and yep...in a way they do...freedom is just a word...even if nothing else owns you but food and water...you are still owned....sigh...good writing
CherylLynnMckee
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since 2000-03-28
Posts 215

3 posted 2000-03-29 12:56 PM


Your poem makes me think of a line in an old Janis Joplin song..."Freedoms just another word for nothing left to lose." People can only take so much from you..before theres nothing left to give.I have felt owned many times in my life...but I bought myself back..and you can to.Your poem really makes you think..nicely done.

 

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

4 posted 2000-03-29 06:46 PM


Your poetry paints pictures in my spirit, makes me feel and think...you own me, m'friend!
bsquirrel
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5 posted 2000-03-29 10:58 PM


hoot,
Thanks for reading. I don't feel owned anymore -- one great thing about being in California.

Corazon,
Nice to see you, stranger.   Also thanks for reading.

CLM,
It's all about thinking. Glad you enjoyed.

serenity,
Only if you let yrself be owned.  

Mike

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

6 posted 2000-03-29 11:56 PM


this is a very cool poem Bsq...very deep and thought provoking and obviously personal, yet I could read so much of my own lifes "ghosts" in to it..powerful piece, unique as well, as you always are.
take care, jm

 Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules
Do you care what is thought by others about you
If this day is all that is promised to you
Do you live for the present, the future the past...
tracy chapman


serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

7 posted 2000-03-30 02:04 AM


Yes, it is a choice, isn't it?  And in this particular case, it's my pleasure...
bsquirrel
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8 posted 2000-03-31 02:43 AM


JM,
Thanks for reading, and understanding. My attempt at taking personal moments and throwing some universality into them.

serenity,
Then let it be so. Or something.

Mike

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
9 posted 2000-03-31 05:56 AM



Wow.....magnificent!!  The words of being owned by all and belonging to none...I relate and offer *angel wing hugs* for they ask nothing in return.

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