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RAM
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0 posted 2000-03-29 01:10 AM


Desert Spring

Morning paints itself
across the tops of foothills.
Night's chill retreats,
having never found purchase;
the bonding of skin to skin
ensured this.

Laughter paints itself
across the tips of your smile.
Day's warmth is foretold
in your eyes - in my eyes.
Dawn's envious strokes
attempt to match the colors we see.

Passion paints itself
across the valleys and foothills
of our dreams -
across the rise and fall
of head on chest.
Peace strecthes,
yawns
and weaves itself
among our ever willing,
labored breaths.
We rise.

©  RAM  3/15/00

© Copyright 2000 RAM - All Rights Reserved
CherylLynnMckee
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1 posted 2000-03-29 01:17 AM


I love the way your love and nature competes in this poem. Nicely done!

 

hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 2000-03-29 11:46 AM


This poem is wonderful. Not only is it well crafted and flows very well, but your word choices and the imagery you create from them is incredible. It's soft, it's sensuous, and it works all the way around. Wonderful work  
Mike
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3 posted 2000-03-29 01:42 PM


First of your poems I've read.  Well done, I enjoyed.
Panthers Chrysalis
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4 posted 2000-03-29 02:12 PM


What an interesting way to describe a peaceful love....    I enjoyed it!

Lone Wolf
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5 posted 2000-03-29 02:30 PM


I love the images you have created....sweet, soft.  Well done!!  A pleasure to read!!!  

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Corinne
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6 posted 2000-03-29 03:32 PM


Sweet and sensuous, just like the poet.

Corinne

RAM
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7 posted 2000-03-29 06:19 PM


Thanks, Cheryl, Hoot, Mike, Chrys and Wolf.

Corinne,  Thank you so much.  However, the extent to which this is sweet and sensuous is wholely attributable to my muse being so sweet and sensuous.

Rick

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8 posted 2000-03-31 12:12 PM


Lovely poem....tell your muse to inspire more!!!  
RAM
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9 posted 2000-03-31 01:51 PM


Thank you, Poet.  Alas.  Our muses work hours of their own choosing, don't they?  LOL  When we're really lucky, though, they walk with us throughout our days.  Bless me, Muse, for I have penned.  It's been twelve hours since my last profession.    

Come whisper words into my pen;
come fold me into song.
Then, as the melody unfurls,
we'll share each morning's dawn.

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