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Kayes poem - The Swan.

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Collins
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0 posted 03-28-2000 06:45 PM       View Profile for Collins   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Collins

Her Love was like the blackest swan,
swimming 'neath the midnight sun.
Gentley gliding through the lake,
I watch her movements,
the ripples she makes.
The circles extend until no more,
or get washed upon the pebbled shore.
Still she moves on without a pause,
Does this bird know the damage it's caused.


 
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1 posted 03-28-2000 07:23 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

I enjoyed it...lovely poem!



 
Butterflies_dont_cry
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2 posted 03-28-2000 07:30 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Welcome to Passions!!

I enjoyed the story you told.  The ripple effect often goes un-noticed by those that cause the most waves.

Can't wait to read more!!
Collins
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3 posted 03-28-2000 07:54 PM       View Profile for Collins   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Collins

Thank you so much for your replies.

It is such a personal poem, it means alot to know that someone likes it.  Thank you.
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4 posted 03-28-2000 08:17 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Collins,
Welcome to passions!!  I loved your poem.  Beautiful image of the black swan.  I am betting it has no idea of the damage and never will.  Looking forward to more of your work.

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Collins~
What a lovely entrance to the family
of Passion's poets. Welcome.

This is truly a beautiful poem.

The thought of the ripples
being sent to the shore of our hearts
is truly a unique look at what love
can sometimes do when it goes
swimming by.
Hope to see more from you.
~*Marge*~



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Collins
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Thank you Marge and Lone wolf.  If anyone else is reding this i strongly suggest you check out some of the work these two have done (indeed butterflys don't cry and chreylLynnmcKee) There is some really good stuff there.

Thanks for you replies!!!
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7 posted 03-28-2000 09:14 PM       View Profile for jbouder   Email jbouder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jbouder

I enjoyed this, Collins, and agree with you about the quality of this one.  The only line I stumbled over a little bit, as far as meter is concerned, was the last one.  Otherwise, well done poem.

Jim
Collins
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Cheers jim!!

(I think you're right about the last line, i'll work on it!!)
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This is a beautiful poem...Welcome to passions  
Collins
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10 posted 03-29-2000 11:05 AM       View Profile for Collins   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Collins

thanks for your kind replies!!!!  Peace.
TerryW
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Lovely, Collins!  
    Welcome to Passions!    

    T

 Terry A. Woodson, Jr.
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Cheers Terry!! o
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thankyou,
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Hi Collins,

This is beautiful, I really like the last sentence, giving a twist to the beauty.  

Welcome to passions,

Cerenity
Collins
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thankyou for your comments. peace.
Collins
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16 posted 04-02-2000 08:37 PM       View Profile for Collins   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Collins

Good nite everyone.
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Welcome to Passions, Collins! This is a beautiful poem! Please check your email for a special welcome!

Denise
 
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