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PoeticKnight
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0 posted 03-28-2000 06:15 PM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for PoeticKnight

‘I don’t know what to think,’ she said
‘I feel too much to feel,’ she said
And if you want to know the truth again
Just have to wrap your arms around the wind
‘And trust in something higher than us,’ I said

‘There’s something missing inside of me,’ she said
‘There’s too much noise to hear me,’ she said
Clearness is offered, but will never be found
We are one with the sky, the water, the ground
‘How much do you need to be touched?’ I said

‘Can’t pretend this ghost again,’ she said
‘Can’t let in, or even begin,’ she said
With her arms folded, eyes downcast
The sun was drowning in the past
‘Things gold cannot buy your soul,’ I said

‘Just another day, a minute, an hour,’ she said
‘Just hold me again like a little flower,’ she said
And once more with arms around each other
Trying, and praying not to smother
‘Just me and you this complete,’ I said



[This message has been edited by JML (edited 03-29-2000).]
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1 posted 03-28-2000 06:18 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

I like it!

Elizabeth


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2 posted 03-28-2000 06:42 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse


This piece speaks to me of a tenderness, a willingness to reach out and touch, perhaps protect, the soul of another...and I love the natural, elemental flavor of some of your lines ~

"Just have to wrap your arms around the wind"

"We are one with the sky, the water, the ground"

"The sun was drowning in the past"

~ Claire

Janet Marie
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3 posted 03-28-2000 08:47 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

I don’t know what to think,’ she said
I feel too much to feel,’ she said
**********************
And trust in something higher than us,’ I said
************************
There’s something missing inside of me,’ she said
There’s too much noise to hear me,’ she said
***********************
How much do you need to be touched?’ I said
***********************
Can’t pretend this ghost again,’ she said
Can’t let in, or even begin,’ she said
***********************
Just another day, a minute, an hour,’ she said
***********************
Trying, and praying not to smother**
Just me and you this complete,’ I said
***********************

your right jer, this does read kinda like a song...
small world...I know this woman, very well.
you asked me about the title?
call it "Holding Her Heart In His Hand" (or not.)
your jm



 Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules
Do you care what is thought by others about you
If this day is all that is promised to you
Do you live for the present, the future the past...
tracy chapman



[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 03-28-2000).]
Butterflies_dont_cry
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4 posted 03-28-2000 11:27 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Touching the corners of my heart with this one.  I've been on both sides of that embrace...as most have.  Well written with a  gift that you put to use so well.
gemini shadow
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5 posted 03-29-2000 09:23 PM       View Profile for gemini shadow   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for gemini shadow

hey, this is really cool. It does sound like the makings of a song.She is a lucky girl, having this wrote for her. You show a tender gentle heart in this.I agree with the chick above, Heart in Hand would be a cool title.
a poem or song like this would steal my heart.
gemini

 I want to be the face you see when you close your eyes
I want to be the touch you need every single night
I want to be your fantasy
And be your reality
And everything between
I want you to need me,
like I need you.
celine dion
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6 posted 03-30-2000 08:48 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Oh...once more romance drips from your pen  
PoeticKnight
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7 posted 03-30-2000 09:34 AM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoeticKnight

Thank you all so much. I am grateful I touched a nerve out there...*S*
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8 posted 03-30-2000 10:24 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is beautiful writing! Very nice!

Denise
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