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Of wait and fate

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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 03-28-2000 12:06 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seymour Tabin

       Of wait and fate

I bathed in passions waters,
Emersed in its confine.
Left my senses out to dry,
Like dew upon a vine.

Walked upon its blissful beach
And played upon its shore.
Never thought about a change,
Or what God had in store.

Time has brought about a storm,
That struck me to the bone.
Plummeting down from heaven
And now I am alone.

Distance blacks a barrier,
The touching and the sight.
It stole away the senses of,
My passion and delight.

And now I hold in distant wait,
The future of my distant fate.
© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 03-28-2000 12:16 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent expression, Seymour!

Denise
Butterflies_dont_cry
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2 posted 03-28-2000 12:19 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Superb!!  You have a way with words and a way with opening the heart to your message.
Martie
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Sy, you speak from your heart and I hear you.  Excellent poem!
Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 03-28-2000 05:49 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sy, We have all been through this one. A painful experience, but you express it so beautifully
Love ya
Liz
TerryW
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5 posted 03-28-2000 05:56 PM       View Profile for TerryW   Email TerryW   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TerryW's Home Page   View IP for TerryW

Sy,
   Well spoken.  I love this poem, because it rings true within me as well.    

 Terry A. Woodson, Jr.
Janet Marie
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Walked upon its blissful beach
And played upon its shore.
Never thought about a change,
Or what God had in store.

Time has brought about a storm,
That struck me to the bone.
Plummeting down from heaven
And now I am alone.
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Sy, this is excellent...truly, perfect rhyme and flow and so full of emotional imagery...
very well written and expressed...your emotions drip off the page.
take care, jm


 Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules
Do you care what is thought by others about you
If this day is all that is promised to you
Do you live for the present, the future the past...
tracy chapman

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 03-28-2000 07:51 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Denise, Thank you for the excellent. *L*

Butterfly, Thank you for the superb. A beautiful comment.

Martie, And you are in my heart. *L*

Elizabeth, Thank you and love ya Sy

Terry, Glad it rang a bell for you, thank you

Janet, Thank you for the sweet comment, *L*
Poet deVine
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8 posted 03-30-2000 11:41 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I find many meanings in this poem and tonight it suits me well. Good writing, Sy.  
CherylLynnMckee
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9 posted 03-30-2000 11:47 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

Really lovely poem...you write beautifully...I enjoy reading all your poems.

 
Meadowmuse
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10 posted 03-31-2000 12:05 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Time's storms may blacken brightest night
with no sign of reprieve.
Indeed I've faced that raging fright
but somehow lived to breathe.

The storm will pass for you, my friend.
I believe that earnest fact.
Clutch near your dear ones and your faith
and whole, you'll stand, intact.

Your poem, as always, is wonderful, Seymour.



  
jfreak
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11 posted 03-31-2000 12:35 AM       View Profile for jfreak   Email jfreak   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jfreak

Great poem Symor,

You truly are a gifted talent.  Keep up the great work.  I totally feel this poem.  It reminds me of my life.  Before I joined the Corp I was involved heavily in youth ministry and wanting to go on the mission field but God took me somewhere else for a season.  I am headed to the mission field but that is still a little off.  Now there have been many storms that life and time have brought upon me since my enlistment, and I have felt very alone like I had lost God.  Also, the distance, being away from all my family and friends and everything that I had known my whole lift seemed to douse my passion burning deep inside me.  Like the poem states I wait for my future fate.  I just relate.  I do not hate and I'm no reprobate.  I will get a clean slate and hopefully a full plate.  Nothing is ever late.

Jfreak
 
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