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Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
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0 posted 2000-03-28 12:22 PM


Here it is another day
More chances to push me away
You think it's wrong to want to be
One together you and me
I love you very much
My body longs for your touch
Why do you have to question
It gives me the wrong impression

Here it is another night
And so goes my plight
I try to move a little nearer
Hoping that your heart is dearer
Maybe we can set things aside
To allow expression for what's inside
Together we could create
A state where we realte

Here it is another day
What more do I have to say
Thoughts of you fill my head
Us together and in bed
Two hearts merge into one
The bliss created is second to none
Isn't it plain to see
This is our destiny




 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

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VampDude
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since 2000-03-24
Posts 21
Canada
1 posted 2000-03-28 01:02 AM


Wolf, superb poem.. bumps in a relationship are tough, very well thought out, and I love the rhyming scheme.

 "So close, no matter how far, couldn't be much more from the heart, forever trusting who we are, and nothing else matters"
-Metallica-


Enola
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2 posted 2000-03-28 03:43 AM


This is a lovely poem.  I hope it works out okay for you.  

 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.

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3 posted 2000-03-28 07:09 AM


LoneWolf~
Nice sentiments.
Enjoyed the read.
~*Marge*~


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tracie66
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since 2000-01-18
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4 posted 2000-03-28 07:54 AM


Great poem
I to hope that it works out for you
HUGS
Tracie


 Keep all the windows of your mind open
Anne Rooks

Lone Wolf
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5 posted 2000-03-28 08:34 PM


VampDude....thank you and yes the bumps are tough, but well worth what awaits on the other side.

Enola....thanks and time will tell.

Marge...glad to hear it.  They are my feelings as always.

Tracie....thanks for the hug.  We will see...

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 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
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6 posted 2000-03-28 08:41 PM


The closest love is often the one we take for granted, the one that will always be there so why "try"....your words are the voice to the song my heart hums.  You wrote this with the grace of an angel.
CherylLynnMckee
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7 posted 2000-03-28 08:45 PM


Its hard when you feel like you love someone more than they love you..beautifully written.

 

Janet Marie
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8 posted 2000-03-29 01:11 AM


perfection in poetry LW...such sweet devotion in this...and excellent rhyme flow...very nice work.
take care, jm

 Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules
Do you care what is thought by others about you
If this day is all that is promised to you
Do you live for the present, the future the past...
tracy chapman


Lone Wolf
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9 posted 2000-03-29 11:58 AM


Butterflies...You are so right that we do take love for granted at times.  It is only when that love is withdrawn that we miss it and realize what a great thing we had.  Hopefully, it is not too late.  Thank you so much for the angel comment.  It is what he used to call me....

Cheryl...always is hard, but I guess we keep trying because maybe someday that person will return our love tenfold.  Thanks.

JM...thank you.  The rhyme and flow just poured out one day.  I am hopelessly devoted to my beloved even if the feelings are not always the same.  He did think this was very nice though.

 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

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