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Flidais
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since 2000-03-27
Posts 9
Durham, CA

0 posted 2000-03-28 12:14 PM


She sits there
And she's smiling
And no one knows what she has locked inside her heart
The breeze blows her hair away from her face
And she laughs a tiny crystal laugh
But no one can feel the pain that tears her to pieces inside
The sun twinkles in her eyes
And she joyously waves her hands when she talks
Her voice chirping like the songs of sparrows
But no one can see that she's crying
They see her smile
They hear her laugh
They listen to her happy stories
Of a life that has caused her so much pain
No one notices her soul shriveling up
And turning to dust
No one notices her wasting away before their eyes
No one notices she's dying

© Copyright 2000 Flidais - All Rights Reserved
VampDude
Junior Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 21
Canada
1 posted 2000-03-28 01:06 AM


wow, amazing work Flidais... too many people are in that situation, best thing to do is talk it out with a friend. Great work and welcome!!

 "So close, no matter how far, couldn't be much more from the heart, forever trusting who we are, and nothing else matters"
-Metallica-


just_another_fe
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since 2000-02-05
Posts 483
MICHIGAN
2 posted 2000-03-28 01:13 AM


this kind of reminds me of me. no one understands so i pretend everything is fine so i dont have to listen to them tell me how stupid i am or the things i do. Sometimes i wanna burst into tears and instead a pull out a little laugh...till im alone.my pen is my friend thats where i get all my feelings out and he doesnt tell me how wrong i am he just listens. oh and everyone here at passions always has something good to say   that kinda helps
Lucius Cade
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since 2000-03-23
Posts 235
Saskatchewan
3 posted 2000-03-28 01:28 AM


Incredible peice. Makes me wonder how many people that I talk to in a day are wearing masks of emotion.

 Lucidity is the answer to all problems

mete out
Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 270
england
4 posted 2000-03-28 08:58 AM


***Flidais,
Wow.  This really reminds me of myself.
I wrote a poem along the same lines as this amazingly inciteful piece. It is caled "Actress". I'll have to dig it out for you.

Anyway, Welcome to Passions.

If the rest of your work is anything as good as this, I guarentee, I'll be reading.    
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 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.




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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
5 posted 2000-03-28 09:00 AM


Excellent poem! Welcome to the family, please check your email for a special welcome.  
Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
6 posted 2000-03-28 09:07 AM


Welcome to Passions!

Your words are written with an acute sense of feeling and pain, showing the world one side and keeping the other locked up tight.  I too have lived this and through poetry have begun to open the door now and then, the more I look into my soul the more I release and set free through poetry.  I hope that you are able to find the same release and comfort.  This was a sincere and heart felt piece.  Thank you for sharing it.


 Whatever strength I add to myself becomes my greatest weakness, while whatever weakness I'll consciously endure will be replaced with a strength that is not my own.
G. Finley



hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
7 posted 2000-03-28 10:08 AM


I have been there before   Welcome to passions.
Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
8 posted 2000-03-28 11:36 AM


These are certainly sentiments that everyone can relate to at some time in their lives... Welcome to Passions..
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