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Apology of Sorts

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Destiny
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0 posted 03-27-2000 02:00 PM       View Profile for Destiny   Email Destiny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Destiny

i know i brought you to this place,
led you to this fire...
i opened up the doors of hell,
tempted you with desire.

i wanted more than i could give
and more than i could see,
and somewhere in your trusting heart
you put your faith in me.

and there i see that my own choice,
my hope and selfishness,
has brought you to this sacrifice
and given you distress.

it must be hard to see the ash
and not call out to blame
and if it were my life in smoke
i know i'd feel the same.

but somehow even here and now,
with all the strife and pain,
i plead with you to walk the coals
and look at this as gain...

and should this prove too much for you
and leave you feeling numb,
i can't regret the way i've loved
and sorry just won't come.




[This message has been edited by Destiny (edited 03-30-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Destiny - All Rights Reserved
Lucius Cade
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1 posted 03-27-2000 02:05 PM       View Profile for Lucius Cade   Email Lucius Cade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucius Cade

and should this prove to much for you
and leave you feeling numb,
i can't regret the way i've loved
and sorry just won't come.
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I really like your perspective in this poem. It has alot to say about the other side when a couple breaks up. Welcome to passions.


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Denise
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2 posted 03-27-2000 02:08 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is a beautiful poem, Destiny!

Denise
Nan
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3 posted 03-27-2000 02:25 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

'I can't regret the way I've loved
and sorry just won't come.'

I like this verse. Destiny - Nice finale...
Danny Holloway
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4 posted 03-27-2000 03:09 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Nice expression.  I liked the final two lines as well.
Good writing.
Sven
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5 posted 03-28-2000 12:37 AM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Destiny. . .

I see that you don't apologize for the feelings that you feel. . . this is an excellent poem. . .

Excellent words. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Meadowmuse
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6 posted 03-28-2000 12:53 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Exceptional writing...very well put.

Welcome to Passions  

~ Claire
Michael
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7 posted 03-28-2000 02:01 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Man that next to the last stanza hurts...literally.  Great poem... great title.  Even if I can feel the blisters on my feet...


Michael
JamesMichael
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8 posted 03-28-2000 09:09 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Lovely Destiny..I accept your apology no matter how brief and humble.  James
hoot_owl_rn
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9 posted 03-28-2000 10:06 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Destiny...lovely written verse  
Elizabeth Santos
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10 posted 03-28-2000 10:20 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Very well done, indeed, and perfect rhyme and meter. And the content, superb!
Liz
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11 posted 03-28-2000 02:10 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Destiny~
WOW !
This is quite the awesome piece.
WOW !
~*Marge*~


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just_another_fe
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12 posted 03-28-2000 02:31 PM       View Profile for just_another_fe   Email just_another_fe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit just_another_fe's Home Page   View IP for just_another_fe

DESTINY
THIS WAS A GREAT POEM. I REALLY LIKE THE LAST LINE IT FITS ME PERFECT

"i can't regret
the way i've loved
and sorry just won't come."

GOOD JOB  
~ANGIE

ZuMBLe
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13 posted 03-28-2000 04:27 PM       View Profile for ZuMBLe   Email ZuMBLe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ZuMBLe

First off, I have to thank you.  I thank you for opening my eyes.  I've been upset with myself for loving someone, for caring about them.  But now I realize that I shouldn't be sorry.. and I'm not.  Very well written poem.  Everyone should read this poem.  Nobody should be sorry for loving someone.

Zum
CherylLynnMckee
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14 posted 03-28-2000 04:54 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

I loved it from the first word to the last.

 
hsystems
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15 posted 03-28-2000 05:07 PM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

What a beautiful poem, Destiny!  I am impressed by your sensitivity and power of expression.

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Butterflies_dont_cry
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16 posted 03-28-2000 08:01 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Beautiful....
I have often wondered if it is better to love and not be loved in return or to be loved and not love back.....You have a very strong message here.  
Lone Wolf
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17 posted 03-28-2000 08:06 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Destiny,
Wonderful words!!!  This is a great piece.  You should never be sorry for how you feel.
Well done!!

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 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith
Destiny
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18 posted 03-30-2000 05:44 PM       View Profile for Destiny   Email Destiny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Destiny

thank you all for loving this poem for me... i hated it when i finished it! it was difficult for me to let this one loose for other people to read... thanks for being supportive  

Destiny
Sandra Cox
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19 posted 03-30-2000 05:55 PM       View Profile for Sandra Cox   Email Sandra Cox   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sandra Cox

I can see my ex writing something like this to me.  I guess its strange to see the other side of things.

Sandra
Passions Voice
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20 posted 04-29-2001 02:49 PM       View Profile for Passions Voice   Email Passions Voice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Passions Voice

I'm not going to say that you shouldn't apologize for the way that you felt then.  But, what happened if this didn't work out?

Or, this could be just a poem.  But see?  You've made me think.

Just milling around back here, and I found this.  Hope that there's more.

passion is life. . . ~Diana

 
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