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Prince Of Eden

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Michael
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0 posted 03-27-2000 03:46 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Michael

PRINCE OF EDEN


Banned of the land, a father's pride.
Contempt in hand, a dream denied.
By greed or lust, who dare gives thought
To break His trust now lives forgot.

Gloss on the eye of vintage past,
Lost to a lie of stone been cast.
As brother fell, as hope lived on
Yet straight to hell spirit was drawn.

Now walk in shame, emotion's flood,
Behind a name, once shared, now blood.
If by visions serene and calm,
Or Decisions' crimson stained palm.

Live in shadow, love by disdain
That none follow this path of pain.
Each tear been kept, solemn sorrow
A promise, swept to the morrow.

Requiem sung, a shallow grave
History wrung by well honed glaive.
In sacred halls, no recompense,
Sweet Eden falls, long live her prince.

Michael Anderson




 For all behind was dark and drear,
And all before was night and fear.
How many hours of night or day
In those suspended pangs I lay,
I could not tell; I scarcely knew
If this were human breath I drew.

Lord Byron






[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 04-15-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Michael Anderson - All Rights Reserved
Nicole
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1 posted 03-27-2000 03:51 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

...and it looks even better all put together too.     Quite a tale you've spun, my friend.

"Or Decisions' crimson stained palm"

That is a great line, one of the best I've read yet.

Well done, as usual!


 May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

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2 posted 03-27-2000 03:55 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

sigh this is so good yuh
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3 posted 03-27-2000 04:10 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

You've put some great feeling in this babe...had to read it twice just to get the whole of it...

Much expectation is put upon her prince, dare say the fall of Eden will ever be justified?

"By greed or lust, who dare gives thought
To break His trust now lives forgot."

-You've said it all within these lines.
This was beautiful Michael..



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4 posted 03-27-2000 05:32 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Michael
This is magnificent
Tracie


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Such intensity comes from within you, my friend... This is a great piece of work..
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6 posted 03-27-2000 11:01 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Michael...this is a wonderful piece of poetry. You still reign here at passions  
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7 posted 03-27-2000 02:13 PM       View Profile for Destiny   Email Destiny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Destiny

I think i could spend hours engulfed in this work... i love the lines:

Live in shadow, love by disdain
That none follow this path of pain.

great writing  
Destiny


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8 posted 03-27-2000 06:44 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

What a gift you have for storytelling Michael, this is superb  
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9 posted 03-27-2000 07:08 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

M, you are the Master!
Another wonderful work from your pen.

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10 posted 03-27-2000 07:50 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Yeah. What Danny (and all the rest) said.

(and me, I'll just say thank you for gifting us with this lovely piece of writing, Michael.)

~ Claire
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11 posted 03-28-2000 01:55 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Satiate,  I think you are my living muse.  Should talk with you every time I try to write a poem...  I owe this one to you.

devina, I can tell you read completely between the lines on this one...  You are getting so good at that...    Knew you'd like this one.

Nan, kinda scarey, huh?

Destiny,I have been equally intrigued by your poetry.  I'm so glad you enjoyed.  

Claire, you are quite welcome - and I ditto that sentiment to all of your works as well.


Thank you all for the kind replies,


Michael

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12 posted 03-28-2000 02:03 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Deep stuff...but that is not a surprise...

Gloss on the eye of vintage past,
Lost to a lie of stone been cast.
As brother fell, as hope lived on
Yet straight to hell spirit was drawn.

THIS verse really got me - it is so rich.
I just have to say that this is another excellent piece of rhyming poetry.

Envying here...

K


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life enriches writing'
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13 posted 03-28-2000 09:36 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

You must have the most wonderful Muse.... I've never read a poem you wrote that I didn't absolutely love!  
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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14 posted 03-29-2000 03:12 AM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

Very deep, very strong, steeped in personal meaning for me.  This is an exceptionally well worded poem.

Tess
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My favourite line
"Gloss on the eye of vintage past,"
I like the way it sounds and the image it creates for me
Great poem

 "Love is the only drug you can take that will convince you each time
that you've never had it before."
~author unknown~


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16 posted 03-29-2000 09:31 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Your passion for words pours out in all of your poetry. All are so well written.
Excellent
Liz
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17 posted 04-14-2000 10:34 PM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lucky

Michael,

Thank you so much for your time spent, the ideas, style and needless to say the poetic message. May you ever be cradeled on the winds of heaven, magnificent isn't the word for it. Maybe exquisite suits it better...

[This message has been edited by lucky (edited 04-15-2000).]
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A powerfully intense tale, my friend.  I especially loved the last verse, it closed this piece extremely well.  Exellent work!  

 *Krista Knutson*

As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins.
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Micheal,
I agree with pdV. None of your work have I read that I didn't absolutely love.

Jeffrey
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20 posted 04-14-2000 11:20 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Michael~
Your poetry is from the heart
and that's what comes through
in this piece.

You have a talent to be pleased with
and proud of ... thank you for sharing
this with passionate friends.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Michael
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21 posted 04-15-2000 02:40 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Thanks for bringing this back up, Lucky.  For those of you who may not have noticed what Lucky was pointing out in his post.  This was actually meant to be three distinct poems in one.

PRINCE OF EDEN

Banned of the land, a father's pride.
Contempt in hand,  a dream denied.
By greed or lust,  who dare gives thought
To break His trust  now lives forgot.

Gloss on the eye  of vintage past,
Lost to a lie  of stone been cast.
As brother fell,  as hope lived on
Yet straight to hell  spirit was drawn.

Now walk in shame,  emotion's flood,
Behind a name,  once shared, now blood.
If by visions  serene and calm,
Or Decisions  crimson stained palm.

Live in shadow,  love by disdain
That none follow  this path of pain.
Each tear been kept,  solemn sorrow
A promise, swept  to the morrow.

Requiem sung,  a shallow grave
History wrung  by well honed glaive.
In sacred halls,  no recompense,
Sweet Eden falls,  long live her prince.


Thank you all for the replies.


Michael
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22 posted 04-15-2000 02:58 AM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lucky

Michael,

You know that feather quill of marge's is stirring in hot dark ink and she's gonna catch us dead in our artful poetic tracks.

Yes... mind waves, and landing in the same currents are somewhat baffling to me. You got that one figured out yet..?
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23 posted 04-16-2000 03:02 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

SLAM - I see why they like it...good job.
 
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