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An Old Dusty Notebook (Revised!!)

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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 03-27-2000 03:25 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for wayoutwalt


In my hands rejoined a piece of heart
From a box of fondest memory
Flowered photo albums try to express
What a poetís mind can simply free

Itís beaten up as smiling I muse
The cover foretells what lies inside
In my comfort chair I feel myself
Living the poems for which I cried

Little sayings grew inside of me
Saw life on pages I once held dear
Sometimes Iíd forget they are not real
I hope their wisdom returns me here

Some of the poems I shake my head
The boy with ideals that reached the sky
Most of the poems Iím looking down
Wanting the boy not to wish heíd die

A few love sonnets written for none
Poemís for my dog dead and cherished
A few lines here, there, going no where
This notebook long ago has perished

But thatís the wish of the faithless boy
I write this on the last page left so clean
The boy has died so his resting-place
Is taken up by suicidal teen






[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 03-27-2000).]
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Michael
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1 posted 03-27-2000 04:04 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Wow, Walt.  This is extraordianry.  Nothing so powerful as the words from the past looking you in the face.  They can take you back to another place in time altogether.  Awesome ending, I may add.

Michael  
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2 posted 03-27-2000 04:15 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

As I've already said, this is full of emotion Walt- I know I still go back and reread, just to remember where I've been. Keep that notebook close m'friend, it will always be your best friend!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

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3 posted 03-27-2000 05:25 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Ah
the trusty notebooks, we all have em
Walt this was the most fantastic piece to read.
Loved it I did
Tracie


 Keep all the windows of your mind open
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4 posted 03-27-2000 06:56 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

W.O.W.~
This is a nostalgic piece that lets us all take a look back at yesterday.  Those notebooks sure harbor a lot of who we were and were we thought we were going.
Nice job on this.
~*Marge*~


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5 posted 03-27-2000 08:03 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Sometimes it's not easy to look at our own reflections, walt.. You've done it beautifully.... no matter what that "grown-up" part of you says...
Meadowmuse
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6 posted 03-27-2000 08:13 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

"What pages of a poetís mind can simply free"

"Wrapped in poems born from the tears I ever cried"

I found this piece particularly touching, Walt. Excellent reflection.

~ Claire

wayoutwalt
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7 posted 03-27-2000 04:59 PM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

i dunno why im bumping this up yuh genuine thanx to those who liked it and replied yuh the meter fails but yuh...
Mistikman
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8 posted 03-27-2000 06:48 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Wow, walt, this is so full of emotion.... No doubt I will have a similar experience when I grow older and see the stuff I write now, which seems quite similar to the work you describe from your youth. Keep writing the serious ones walt, they are very powerful and heartfelt.
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9 posted 03-27-2000 09:20 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

I don't know what you see wrong this Walt! I think it's fantastic! I also keep a book and to be able to go back into that and see emotions or writings that can lead into good, tearful memories, or whatever memories those are, is a good thing!

You've done an excellent job, and I'm not the only one here that thinks so.
Thanks for posting this!!!!
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