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The scramble of awake

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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 03-27-2000 12:07 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seymour Tabin

This is just a poem nothing more.

      The scramble of awake

From the greyness of the inbetween,
These four words crept.
They were partly shock and partly seem,
What did I expect?

And from the dream state quite real,
These four words leapt.
Brought me from ambiance to fret,
What did I expect?

I challenged the notion of what?
These four word swept.
While I stewed in muse and awes think.
What did I expect?

In the darkness behind my eyes,
These four words wept.
Till awake closed the inbetween, of
What did I expect?

And I rose confused, somewhat inept,
From this dream where the answer still slept.

© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 03-27-2000 01:26 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

From the greyness of the inbetween,
These four words crept.
They were partly shock and partly seem,
What did I expect?

----------------
In the darkness behind my eyes,
These four words wept.
Till awake closed the inbetween, of
What did I expect?

And I rose confused, somewhat inept,
From this dream where the answer still slept.
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just a poem??
A WAY COOL poem SY,
really, I love this poems cryptic and dark feel...very well written out thoughts..,
enjoyed this one much.
take care, jm

 Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules
Do you care what is thought by others about you
If this day is all that is promised to you
Do you live for the present, the future the past...
tracy chapman

Nan
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2 posted 03-27-2000 07:33 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I like you couplet... as usual..
We really do seem to find answers easily in our dream-state, don't we??..

Another nice one, Sy....
Meadowmuse
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since 12-27-1999
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3 posted 03-27-2000 07:47 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Love the title, Seymour. Oh, and the poem's good too. I like mine over~medium.        

~ Claire
Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 03-27-2000 08:00 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

I woke up from the waking dream
Of blackness of the sunlit screen
And pondered in the hours not slept
But what did I expect?

Awake but sleeping in a dream
Of loveliness of in between
My mind to those past visions swept
But what did I expect

And now released from daylight ponder
Not the real of what I wondered
My mind on dreamless cloud has slept
But what did I expect

In truth of what I should have known
I sit here on a solid stone
And ponder now in introspect
Of what I should expect

The greyness of the dreams of wake
Wrought of a singular mistake
Has withered in the vines of cease
And now I sleep in peace

A classic Tabin beauty
Love ya
Liz


Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 03-27-2000 09:17 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Janet, Thank you for the WAY COOL, love your answers. *L*

Nan, You are a love, thanks for the read and comment. *L*

Meadow, Thank you claire always enjoy your answers. *L*

Elizabeth, Your poetic answer is better then mine. You are such a talent.
Love ya
Sy
hoot_owl_rn
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6 posted 03-27-2000 10:52 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Oh that misty period between sleep and wakefullness...expressed so eloquently  
 
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