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Razor's Edge
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Razor’s Edge Touch me not with your sinister sorcery Your poison has invaded my veins A fool, you have played me for Release me from your cursed clutches Love as played me as a vulgar violin And chosen someone without consent It smirks at what I am now shielding Dancing on my handicapped heart What a cruel grueling game to play When so unsuspecting was I How could you have snuck in When I had closed all damaging doors Go please, and leave me at peace Take your damn deliberate dart Look! My heart bleeds From a kiss of love’s razor’s edge Marina Mar 18 2000 |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is a very intense work, Marina.. Your sentiments certainly to pervade your words.. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
There has to be far better times ahead ... I know ... when and who is your question ... and why bother and no thanks and never again ... but I pray your day comes soon ... and true Rex}>{{{{o> |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Love as played me as a vulgar violin And chosen someone without consent It smirks at what I am now shielding Dancing on my handicapped heart ---------------------------- DAMN!!! WOW...Marina- this is awesome... your poets pen is whats razor sharp... this is intense and powerfull... "closed all damaging doors" wow really excellently expressed... take care jm PS (remind me to never make you mad at me)(SMILE)  take care, jm Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules Do you care what is thought by others about you If this day is all that is promised to you Do you live for the present, the future the past... tracy chapman |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Nan,thank you Rex, thank you for your kind words Jm, thank you for your compliment and don't worry you too much of a kind person for anyone to get mad at. Marina |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
WOW!!!! You go girl...this is a powerful piece of writing packed full of great lines and emotions.  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very intense and lovely and sad. James |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Hoot, thank you very much. Coming from a poet such as yourself that is a great compliment. James, thank you. Sometimes when emotions get the better of you they can be all three: intense,lovely and sometimes sad. Marina |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent as always Marina. . . it would seem that you have found a voice that suits you. . . Sharp and to the point. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Sven, thank you very much. Sharp and to the point? I could say so mucg at this comment, but I'll save it for adult. Marina |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is very powerful, Marina. Well written! Denise |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Denise,thank you very much |
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