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Razor's Edge

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Marina
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0 posted 03-26-2000 09:34 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Marina

Razorís Edge


Touch me not with your sinister sorcery
Your poison has invaded my veins
A fool, you have played me for
Release me from your cursed clutches

Love as played me as a vulgar violin
And chosen someone without consent
It smirks at what I am now shielding
Dancing on my handicapped heart

What a cruel grueling game to play
When so unsuspecting was I
How could you have snuck in
When I had closed all damaging doors

Go please, and leave me at peace
Take your damn deliberate dart
Look! My heart bleeds
From a kiss of loveís razorís edge

Marina Mar 18 2000

© Copyright 2000 Marina Crossley - All Rights Reserved
Nan
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1 posted 03-26-2000 10:52 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

This is a very intense work, Marina.. Your sentiments certainly to pervade your words..
Rex Allen McCoy
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2 posted 03-26-2000 11:02 PM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

There has to be far better times ahead ... I know ... when and who is your question ... and why bother and no thanks and never again ... but I pray your day comes soon ... and true

Rex}>{{{{o>
Janet Marie
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3 posted 03-27-2000 01:11 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Love as played me as a vulgar violin
And chosen someone without consent
It smirks at what I am now shielding
Dancing on my handicapped heart

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DAMN!!! WOW...Marina- this is awesome...
your poets pen is whats razor sharp...
this is intense and powerfull...
"closed all damaging doors" wow
really excellently expressed...
take care jm
PS
(remind me to never make you mad at me)(SMILE)
take care, jm

 Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules
Do you care what is thought by others about you
If this day is all that is promised to you
Do you live for the present, the future the past...
tracy chapman

Marina
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4 posted 03-27-2000 11:30 AM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Nan,thank you

Rex, thank you for your kind words


Jm, thank you for your compliment and don't worry you too much of a kind person for anyone to get mad at.

Marina
hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 03-27-2000 11:43 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

WOW!!!! You go girl...this is a powerful piece of writing packed full of great lines and emotions.  
JamesMichael
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6 posted 03-27-2000 03:36 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Very intense and lovely and sad.  James
Marina
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7 posted 03-27-2000 09:10 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Hoot, thank you very much. Coming from a poet such as yourself that is a great compliment.

James, thank you. Sometimes when emotions get the better of you they can be all three: intense,lovely and sometimes sad.

Marina
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8 posted 03-28-2000 12:34 AM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Excellent as always Marina. . . it would seem that you have found a voice that suits you. . .

Sharp and to the point. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Marina
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9 posted 03-28-2000 12:03 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Sven, thank you very much.  Sharp and to the point? I could say so mucg at this comment, but I'll save it for adult.

Marina
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This is very powerful, Marina. Well written!

Denise
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Denise,thank you very much
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